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31Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 18/07/14, 03:07 pm

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32Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 18/07/14, 08:25 pm

Ilirran Iskam

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Character Name: Ilirran Iskam
Link to Plot Thread: https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t1713-the-leopard-man-enters-solo-event#7317
Summary of Plot: Ilirran makes his way to the capitol after spending the last few years as a sword for hire. He learns of the Strongest Man Under The Sun tournament and plans to compete in it. He hopes to find strong opponents to partake in the dance of death with.
Key Plot Points: Heliohapt, Strongest Man Under The Sun


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33Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 18/07/14, 08:27 pm

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34Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 19/07/14, 07:14 pm

Lance Knighthunter

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Character Name: Lance Knighthunter
Link to Plot Thread: https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t1727-new-beginnings
Summary of Plot: A few years after the death of the children he looked after and taught, Lance returns to the ally way they lived in to relive some memories... although the memories he got were greater than he expected. Once he arrived there he met Griffon, His old apprentice who used to live with the kids and him. Griffon gave Lance a staff and went off to Reim while Lance stayed in Heliohapt because he had overheard about a slave trade that was going to happen.
Key Plot Points: Griffon Nightlock, Heliohapt, An ally way, Lance got his staff



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35Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 19/07/14, 07:59 pm

Duquin

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Please add another post detailing why you are going to Reim. The point of the event post is to explain where your character is going and more importantly, why they are going there.


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36Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 19/07/14, 09:03 pm

Lagi

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Character Name: Lagi El Nagi
Link to Plot Thread: https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t1729-the-secrets-of-the-rukh-compass-the-king-of-legends-solo-plot#7396
Summary of Plot: After assuming command of the Nagi Orai and becoming a Black King, Lagi took it upon himself to find out if he could master the mysteries of the Rukh Compass. It’s reckoned to their fates, destiny, or their utmost desires, but the compass kept changing in different directions charges at any applied time.  Besides looking for El Drago, Lagi stumbled upon the sanctuary of the king of legends. Lagi must once again prove himself to the self proclaimed greatest of all dominance users, who even considered El Drago as "Troublesome"
Key Plot Points: Reim, Alkian (The King of Legends) El Drago, Blessing of legends



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37Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 19/07/14, 09:47 pm

Lance Knighthunter

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I edited my app a little saying why he stayed in Heliohapt as well as put it inside my post


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38Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 19/07/14, 11:26 pm

Lagi

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39Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 20/07/14, 03:26 pm

Duquin

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@Lance Knighthunter wrote:Character Name: Lance Knighthunter
Link to Plot Thread: https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t1727-new-beginnings
Summary of Plot: A few years after the death of the children he looked after and taught, Lance returns to the ally way they lived in to relive some memories... although the memories he got were greater than he expected. Once he arrived there he met Griffon, His old apprentice who used to live with the kids and him. Griffon gave Lance a staff and went off to Reim while Lance stayed in Heliohapt because he had overheard about a slave trade that was going to happen.
Key Plot Points: Griffon Nightlock, Heliohapt, An ally way, Lance got his staff

Lagi El Nagi wrote:Character Name: Lagi El Nagi
Link to Plot Thread: https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t1729-the-secrets-of-the-rukh-compass-the-king-of-legends-solo-plot#7396
Summary of Plot: After assuming command of the Nagi Orai and becoming a Black King, Lagi took it upon himself to find out if he could master the mysteries of the Rukh Compass. It’s reckoned to their fates, destiny, or their utmost desires, but the compass kept changing in different directions charges at any applied time.  Besides looking for El Drago, Lagi stumbled upon the sanctuary of the king of legends. Lagi must once again prove himself to the self proclaimed greatest of all dominance users, who even considered El Drago as "Troublesome"
Key Plot Points: Reim, Alkian (The King of Legends) El Drago, Blessing of legends

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40Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 01/08/14, 01:29 pm

Supergoon

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Character Name: Goon av den Frie
Link to Plot Thread: https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t1822-let-s-get-started-solo-cd-plot
Summary of Plot: Goon and the troupe just got into Heliohapt and was resting for the night. Nox was acting strange, and gave Goon the just of a job they were gonna complete. Goon agreed to help, then Nox told him about the rumors of something big happening within the city, he wasn't entirely too sure what it was, but he knew it wasn't good. He asked Goon if he'd help him and Goon agreed, after that they began to rest to prepare for the days ahead.
Key Plot Points: Nox(Clown, Goon's friend), Traveling circus troupe(Goon's company), slaves, and Heliohapt.

41Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 01/08/14, 03:26 pm

Duquin

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Approved, your huang has been rewarded! Post in 1 B-tier Xp Reward and one D-tier Xp Reward to claim the rest of your prize and be sure to include a link to this approval post when you do!
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P.S. Your post had a lot of strange punctuation going on. I recommend looking up grammar rules behind commas because the main issue was comma misuse.


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42Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 02/08/14, 11:15 pm

Nero

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Character Name: Adam Kahndaq Yuan-Zu
Link to Plot Thread: https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t1829-the-prince-s-wandering-plot#8035
Summary of Plot: Adam is given a huge sum of money and sent away by the emperor to purchase as many slaves as possible to create a brigade of Fanalis Warriors. However, Adam's goal is different; he plans to free the slaves and use a select few whom he can bond with as personal bodyguards. He intends to use his royal status to help him squeeze through cracks in the system, provided he is able to.
Key Plot Points: Slave Auction



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From far and wide
And lightyears away
The one force of nature
They call by name
I came from tomorrow to take back today
I am the future

43Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 02/08/14, 11:38 pm

Duquin

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Please include what the diplomatic mission you were sent there to do was. Give like an extra paragraph detailing why your father sent you there and what your responsibilities/obligations as prince are in Heliohapt.

It could be anything from establishing trade relations to trying to form an alliance or set up some other deal such as cross training of the military or economic issues. This will give your presence there a more solid back ground and help you give your future threads an underlying goal to pursue other than the slave auction which is only a 1 day event IC wise.
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44Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 03/08/14, 12:16 pm

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Edited.


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From far and wide
And lightyears away
The one force of nature
They call by name
I came from tomorrow to take back today
I am the future

45Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 03/08/14, 01:38 pm

Duquin

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I wish you had kept the diplomatic related mission because gathering Fanalis Slaves for the army makes little sense when your bastard brother has already enslaved the Fanalis Corps, but...

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46Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 07/08/14, 03:56 pm

Ariella Negri

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Character Name: Ariella Negri
Link to Plot Thread: Quest for knowledge
Summary of Plot: Ariella wants to become the best magician on the planet. Her brother gave her a list of magicians she could try to study under to accomplish this goal. Her first stop had been Balbadd, which was a bust so she decided to see if the magician's in Reim had more to teach her.
Key Plot Points: Reim, Figuro, ship


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47Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 07/08/14, 05:40 pm

Diego Namez

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48Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 08/09/14, 06:47 pm

dordur

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Character Name: Thordur
Link to Plot Thread: https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t2026-thordur-stranded-in-reim#9133
Summary of Plot: Thordur, recently having developed extreme motion sickness when travelling on a boat had to travel all the way to reim just to get his so called "medicine" from the so called "medicine vendor"  Only to learn that there was no medicine vendor for his major problem of motionsick ness, But soon realised there was more to the world then he had imagined and since he couldn't get a job as an apprentice beast tamer he decided to train himself so soon he can get a pet(dominance perks)
Key Plot Points: Sea, Reim, Apocathaery, docks, Coliseum, beast tamers house.



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49Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 08/09/14, 07:24 pm

Ariella Negri

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50Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 08/09/14, 07:27 pm

Duquin

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Approval overridden, huang removed.

This post does nothing to express your characters personal plot. All it shows is a poorly written/planned excuse for your character to be in Reim.


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51Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 08/09/14, 09:16 pm

Vardreth

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52Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 15/09/14, 09:19 pm

Myra

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Character Name: Myra
Link to Plot Thread: Zafar & Me
Summary of Plot: Okay, so Myra dreams of Freedom and Family. Myra plans on going a difficult and unusual path to archive her dreams, that include traveling around and even sticking with the Zou Empire. She knows that she is quite unexperienced, because in her life she hasn't seen more than a very small part of the Zou Empire, so visiting a new Empire/Country is a big step for her. All the knowledge she gains during her "travel" will help her somehow.
Key Plot Points: Zafar, Yunling, Zou, Reim, Fanalis, PC's people (creating connections, building up friendships ect)


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53Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 15/09/14, 09:22 pm

Ariella Negri

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54Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 16/09/14, 12:48 am

Trever Winnett

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Character Name: Trever Winnett
Link to Plot Thread: https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t2085-why-am-i-here-plot-solo#9482
Summary of Plot: Trever meet a man that made him think of why he was in Riem. Trever did some soul searching on his own to find the answer. He came to the conclusion of becoming stronger, his family, and meeting others
Key Plot Points: Riem, Random Man


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55Plot Event: Dawn of Magic - Page 2 Empty Re: Plot Event: Dawn of Magic on 16/09/14, 02:03 am

Vardreth

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There are a couple of things I want to bring up, first. Your thread didn't describe much of where your character was, nor did it describe who that random man was, or how he came upon you or why he was even curious as to why you were there in the first place.

It's an obvious Deus Ex Machina . You should work to avoid these in the future. RP definitely exists to have fun, but there are a few core things you must keep in mind.

The suspension of disbelief that a reader has is limited. This means that if you write things that look really out of place (characters/plot moving suddenly and with no explanation), then it looks worse to the reader.

Your character's actions give life to his personality, but your character's interaction with his environment and interactions with other individuals gives life to his story. Don't forget to add some background to your character! You may have been able to imagine it just fine, but let me tell you the scene it painted in my mind: Your character was standing in an open grassland with nothing in sight except a strange man who approached you and randomly asked you why you were there. You walked away from him thinking. Maybe sitting under a lone tree. Then walked back to him and told him your answer, and he just walks on his way, nodding at the information.

It probably looked different when you were imagining it and writing it. Please take this as a learning experience to improve ^_^.


That being said, I'm applying tentative approval to this. What I said above is just my personal bit of advice to give to you as a writer.

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