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1Doxrus abilities [Lagi] Empty Doxrus abilities [Lagi] on 04/07/20, 01:08 pm

Lagi

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Name: BETA Flash - Light Speed
Tier: [A-Tier]
Djinn: Doxrus
Element:Hazard [STRENGTH + HEAT + LIGHTNING]
Type: Supplementary
Range: Self
Requirements/Drawbacks: Lagi focuses on his bodies' own natural radiation and begins to convert it to beta particles.
Scaling:   Disperse: For every additional 10 Magoi paid, Lagi can double the range of his scatter limit from where he can reform.
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 4 posts
Cost: 20 Magoi
Description:  Going more into the nature of how Lagi can use his hazard magic with his body manipulation and how Hazard magic centers around radiation, Lagi uses Beta Radiation to avoid attacks in a short amount of time.  Lagi can temporarily convert his body to beta radiation to become a high speed electron that scatters and reforms in the face of attacks. What this move does is that in the face of A-rank or lower ability that makes contact with Lagi in any way, he can scatter himself as a tradeoff in order to avoid the final check and count it as an indirect clash for that ability in particular.  This is treated as Lagi's avoidance limit. Afterward, Lagi can reform within 40 meters of the area intact.  Converting into beta radiation and reforming does not affect his gear whatsoever. Since the purpose of this ability is to avoid the damage check, the scaling of the opposed ability is not factored in as long as the original rank of the ability matches the avoidance limit of this ability. Avoidance is successful if the radius can be escaped.


Name: Hazailor Prison
Tier: [A-Tier]
Djinn: Doxrus
Element:Hazard [STRENGTH + HEAT + LIGHTNING]
Type: Supplementary
Range: Long
Requirements/Drawbacks: Lagi must connect the surrounding radiation in that area in order to make the prison.
Scaling:  Reinforcement - For every 10 magoi paid,  Lagi can double the layers of this ability.
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 4 posts
Cost: 20 Magoi
Description:  With the use of Hazard Magic, Lagi creates a field of that magic type with his beast claw, grasping tightly as the ghastly energy disperses from it. The result creates a layered construct of Hazard Magic that's 40mx40m in a square shape from Lagi's current position, wit him being able to trap those inside for a period of time. Due to the way that it's formed by using the surrounding natural radiation, the trapping field is created rather quickly. In this field, all abilities A-Tier or lower that originate from the users body without the use of magic tools/weapons are interrupted by inducing Hazard Radiation Sickness. Due to the internal process of channeling ones own magoi or stamina, that comes into an immediate confliction with  one's own natural radiation being  used against them,  
causing muscle weakness and dysfunction.  This ability lasts for 4 posts before dispersing on it's own or destroyed. After paying the cost of this ability and it's scaling, cooldown immediately starts.

Name: Rakshasa's Palm
Tier: [A-Tier]
Djinn: Doxrus
Element:Hazard [STRENGTH + HEAT + LIGHTNING]
Type: Offensive
Range: Long
Requirements/Drawbacks: User must tense the muscles of his chosen arm  and infuse it with Hazard Magic as he rotates it.
Scaling:  Double: For 10 every magoi paid, the number of hazard magic layers on the drill increases.
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 4 posts
Cost: 20 Magoi
Description: This is method of utilizing his hazard magic and using his body manipulation as well.  This attack is a Hazard Magic palm strike with a twisting impact.  The force from the technique is transmitted from the back to the shoulders, the upper arms, then amplified and transformed into a powerful twisting blow by the spiral motion of the forearms. The end result makes the attack look like a spinning cone that's 15 feet in width and height,  being able to travel as far as 40 meters. Upon contact, the ability deals A rank hazard magic, especially lethal if he's using his beast arm. If sustained, Lagi can use it again to rotate either Arm.

Name:  Cero Bomb
Tier: [A-Tier]
Djinn: Doxrus
Element:Hazard [STRENGTH + HEAT + LIGHTNING]
Type: Offensive
Range: Long
Requirements/Drawbacks: The user must focus Hazard magic in a particular point and snap his fingers to initiate the detonation.
Scaling: Double: For every 10 magoi paid, Lagi can double the number of explosives used within this ability.
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 4 posts
Cost: 20 Magoi
Description: Radiation is universal, it's even located in the most inconspicuous places like metals, the soil, water and even the air. With that in mind, Lagi can supercharge those sources of radiation with Hazard Magic and creates a mini atomic bomb. This ability can be executed from within 40 meters of Lagi, and upon its execution, becomes a 25-meter instantaneous explosion that's first shown as a small 1-meter orb ghastly green in the vicinity.  This is the representation of gathering the radiation on that particular area to create the bomb, and the attack itself deals A-Tier Radiation damage to all items within that vicinity. Upon sustaining this ability, Lagi can use it again.

Name: Freeform Doxra-Claw
Tier: [A-Tier]
Djinn: Doxrus
Element:Hazard [STRENGTH + HEAT + LIGHTNING]
Type: Supplementary
Range: Self
Requirements/Drawbacks: Lagi must first loosen up his body in order to get a whipping effect of launching them at a target or a particular direction.
Scaling: Power: For every 10 stamina paid, this increases the damage of the barrage (not counting the passive) by an additional tier, capping at A-tier
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 4 posts
Cost: 20 Magoi
Description: This was one of the easier ways that Lagi utilizes his body manipulation. Lagi makes his body much looser while relaxing the muscles in his arms and his legs. This allows him to launch a barrage of basic attacks in a single instance, with it only looking like he moved the selected limb once. Through this technique, the amount of Doxra Claw infused basic attacks that Lagi can launch without scaling is 8, as per ability rules. Each attack, not initially counting other factors, deals D-Tier hazard ability damage. If sustained, Lagi can use it again with anyone of his limbs.

Name: Chernobyl Aura
Tier: [A-Tier]
Djinn: Doxrus
Element:Hazard [STRENGTH + HEAT + LIGHTNING]
Type: Defensive/Supplementary
Range: Self/Long
Requirements/Drawbacks:  The User must focus the Hazard magic from around his body before generating the aura outwards.
Scaling: Multi: For every 10 Magoi paid, the layer of hazard magic that covers Lagi doubles.
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 4 posts
Cost: 20 Magoi
Description: After generating  Hazard magic from his metal vessel, Lagi covers himself in a B-Tier layer of hazard magic in order to protect himself from harm that repels outward and away from his body/body extensions. With every instance of damage that this ability blocks, it sends a 40-meter aoe repelling radiation wave that originates as a outward hazard force from the aura. This hazard force deals -100 ability damage to tool/weapon durability within the possession of those exposed to the wave. Due to this being a defensive ability, the checked block and repelling hazard pulse happens at the same exact time.  If a tool/weapon's defensive power is brought to 0, it becomes broken and unusable unless fixed. The aura itself is a ghastly green that seems transparent in nature. If sustained, Lagi can rebuild the layers again or stabilize it.  


Name: Uranium Disaster
Tier: [A-Tier]
Djinn: Doxrus
Element:Hazard [STRENGTH + HEAT + LIGHTNING]
Type: Supplementary
Range: Long
Requirements/Drawbacks:  The user must be within range in order to apply the status effect. This is a status effect for items and is a non-damaging ability to the NPC/PC's themselves.
Scaling: Aoe: For every 10 magoi paid, Lagi can double the range of the ability.
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 4 posts
Cost: 20 Magoi
Description: Due to the universal fact that the majority of things possess radiation and that it's all around us,  Lagi is able to weaponize it with Hazard Magic. Since all things have a low level of radiation,  Lagi can feed Radiation to clothes, items, etc that are A-tier or lower from within 40 meters of his current location in the form of an aoe hazard radiation wave.  It looks similar to a light green color palate that continuously fills the area for up to 40  meters from Lagi's current location at all times. It also followed by the noise of a  Geiger counter within that vicinity. The shroud-like mist continues to be pumped out from Lagi at his current location throughout the remainder of the duration. To other individuals, it would look as if the atmosphere around them took on a more grassy green color. The only safe zone is the epicenter of this shroud, being 1 meter from Lagi's body. The result of this ability makes the things a person or people have in their possession highly radioactive, giving them a status effect should they ever be exposed at any time. What this does is attack the integrity of the item'(s) durability in the individual's possession, with the radiation itself eating at the items. Once exposed to the shroud, which counts as the start point for the status effect, for the next four posts, the item(s)will receive -200 to its defensive power. If the item's defensive power is completely depleted in this way, the item will become classified as broken and unusable. This is a single payment ability with no sustain that will start cooldown after the initial payment and scaling payment.  The hazard magic passive is applied to each item(s) and the inflicted will experience an instance of damage for each one if they are within possession of them (even if broken).  Due to it being a surrounding force from Lagi's body, being close to him or one meter from him counts as the safe zone of this ability.  The shroud and the status effect from when a target is exposed do not share the same duration.



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2Doxrus abilities [Lagi] Empty Re: Doxrus abilities [Lagi] on 12/07/20, 12:52 pm

Adrastos Thanatos

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General fixes to get started:

1.) Remove all speeds mentioned in the abilities. They don't exist on the site anymore.
2.) Uranium Disaster is unfinished and can't be graded until the scaling is finished.
3.) Hazard Control is a split ability (supp/off). As such it shouldn't be dealing A-Tier damage and should be toned down to B-Tier.

I'd also like to note... How is your magic radiation when radiation is not stated in the magic description? It's only described as a decaying magic with a green glow, similar to the WIP Apocrypha Magic (which is black) or the Decaying Flame magic.


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3Doxrus abilities [Lagi] Empty Re: Doxrus abilities [Lagi] on 12/07/20, 04:12 pm

Lagi

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The thing about Hazard control is the fact that it the only thing it does is add an additional damage type to other abilities classified as body manipulation or body manipulation hybrid abilities. I doubt you would of allowed me to add that damage type to those abilities, but if it could last as it is as supplementary only ability and it can add that A tier damage then I could change it as such.

As for the radiation bit, I was under the impression from the time I fought doxrus that I had access to radiation through hazard magic. For example, the interruption is a Doxrus move caused via hazard radiation. Within the capabilities of hazard magic, i should be able to supercharge it with hazard magic to initiate abilities, just like how a water mage can pull the hydrogen from the air or a cloud to summon a tsumani.

From everything I wrote, it was under the impression of what I was capable of doing. Hazard magic does not share a relationship with decaying magic. The concept is similar but the source is that radiation is the cause, radiation necrosis and etc.


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4Doxrus abilities [Lagi] Empty Re: Doxrus abilities [Lagi] on 14/07/20, 01:07 pm

Adrastos Thanatos

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First off, you can't be immune to the magic passive or the magic itself. That's not how it works. You have a djinn, but that doesn’t grant you immunity to your own spells or if an NPC or PC had access to Hazard Magic. If you're within your own spell or someone used Hazard Magic against you, you are going to be hurt. Of course, if it came from another character, you could absorb it as per the absorption rules. Secondly, are you changing your passive effect based on the ability scaling?

Hazard Control

This reads more like a trait than an ability. It’s too vague. You are able to stack abilities in combat. You don't need an ability to allow you to do so. It does not have to be limited to just body manipulation techniques but if you wish to keep that drawback, you may.

This should be written as something akin to enchantment as that is what it is. It is just a supplementary type.

As an A Tier ability, it would be able to coat your body in Hazard Magic. This would add A Tier damage to any attack you use for that post. If you wish for an extension on the time, the damage must be split into D Tier over the course of 4 posts.

If your intention is to apply your passive to your abilities instead of your basic attacks, this ability needs to written to better communicate that as the intention behind it is unclear.


Doxra Haz-ailor

A sustain does not provide anything additional other than repeated usage of this ability. It will not allow you to move it unless your character is in a different position from where he started as he is the epicenter.

The scaling of this ability does not make logical sense. If it only affects physical moves, it wouldn't be allowed to affect non-physical moves that the target preforms.

This needs a duration on how long the field lasts.

Since the effect is only vomiting, it shouldn't be able to definitely assume that all abilities A Tier or lower are interrupted. As actions physical or otherwise may still be able to be preformed in that state.


Rakshasa's Palm

The scaling on this ability has little to do with the ability itself. You may not decrease the tier of an ability. You may decrease the damage it causes or the effect. Regardless, it does not make sense with this ability. This is an ability that serves to deal damage. It does not contain any properties that support the scaling you chose. Nor does your magic type.


Cero Bomb

Again, please refer to the above for the grading on your Downgrade scaling. Here it does not make sense either.


Freeform Doxra-Claw

Again with the scaling. Speed may not be applied to abilities. Please specify that each attack can only deal D Tier damage for each hit as it is split into 8 attacks. Since the claw is created from magic, your basic strength or weapon damage is not applied to it unless you are making direct physical contact with the target.


Chernobyl Aura

This ability can not protect you if it is dealing damage. You have to choose one or the other. You may not prevent the usage of a specific tier of ability as I've stated above. This effect may induce symptoms, however. How long does this last? Keep in mind that the more duration, the less damage / protection it will provide.


And, I'll say this for sure:

Uranium Disaster can not be an AoE "indirect clash" where every weapon on a person A-Tier and lower, are instantly broken. Even your items would be damaged. For you to deal damage on items, you must strike the weapon with a direct clash that others can defend against.  It's unfair and broken for you to be able to do this and other players are unable to do anything about it.


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Trait Points: 4/11 | SoS: 1

5Doxrus abilities [Lagi] Empty Re: Doxrus abilities [Lagi] on 17/07/20, 01:37 am

Lagi

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round 2 of changes


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6Doxrus abilities [Lagi] Empty Re: Doxrus abilities [Lagi] on 22/07/20, 07:35 pm

Adrastos Thanatos

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  • There is too much going on in all of these abilities. Lots of information you included is not necessary and just makes it difficult to understand what it is you're wanting or trying to do. You don't need to explain what happens when you sustain since sustaining just means you recast/reuse the ability the exact same way as last time. You don't need to explain what happens when items break.

  • All skills must say the tier of damage being done. Replace mentions of numerical item damage to the tier it is supposed to do. If a construct requires A-Tier damage to be broken, then just say that. If the ability deals A-Tier damage, just say that.

  • Scalings are supposed to build off what an ability already does, not add additional effects to your spells. That being said, the following scalings can't be allowed as they add additional things to your spells that the base spell does not do: Rakshasa's Palm, Cero Bomb, Freeform Doxra-Claw, and Uranium Disaster. Scalings increase the strength in spells, duration, range, etc. Tho custom scalings are allowed to be made, they're graded with higher scrutiny, but the bottom line is that no scaling should add additional effects in any ability.


Just because your magic is based on radiation, does not mean it has access to all forms of radiation. Your hazard magic is explained as damaging radiation. That being said, it makes no sense for Hazard Magic to give Lagi x-ray vision as x-ray visions would fall outside of Hazard Magic's capabilities.


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Trait Points: 4/11 | SoS: 1

7Doxrus abilities [Lagi] Empty Re: Doxrus abilities [Lagi] on 22/07/20, 10:57 pm

Lagi

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fixed


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8Doxrus abilities [Lagi] Empty Re: Doxrus abilities [Lagi] on 03/08/20, 09:17 am

Lagi

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Bump


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