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1Amnet, Daughter of Raab Empty Amnet, Daughter of Raab on 25/09/19, 08:03 pm

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Name: Amnet Nut-Raabis Pyrrha

Tier: A Tier

Damage Required to Defeat: A Tier

Description: Standing at five feet and eleven inches, Amnet’s long flowing hair, the subtle colour of rose pink, contrasts with her dark caramel complexion. Her eyes, the colour of lavender, are slightly glazed over and exhibit a ring of purple when utilising Life magic.
   Amnet is the twenty-five year old daughter of Raab, a previous vizier to the pharaoh, who was exiled from her native land after her father was killed by a rival contender and his position usurped. She now wanders the world with the intent of carrying on her father’s legacy of reinventing Life magic and its uses. She operates under the hand of the world emperor, Jahangir.
   Amnet has goals which are often quite far off of her current abilities, but this happens to have been what allowed her to get so far as she has worked so hard to achieve these goals. This determination and her stubbornness make her quite a formidable woman, as once she has her mind on something, she will do anything to reach that goal, helped by her extraordinary wit and sharp tongue which nature has given her.

Weapons:
Ra-Karhut: A magnificent staff of length one metre and fifty-two centimetres, heirloom of her father’s brief viziership, fashioned out of mahogany branch and painted in the regal gold and blues of the royal court.
Records of Geb: An old tome of width sixty-centimetres which she carries on her back as if some form of load, which is engraved with all manner of inked symbols - her father’s notes on all sorts of matters about Life magic.

Trait Name: Mind’s Jaws
Trait Tier: A Tier
Trait Requirement: Must be Magician class.
Trait Description: Amnet has mastered usage of her Borg to such an extent that she is able to use it for secondary reasons.
Trait Effect: When Amnet is approached by someone with ill-intentions within seven metres, her Borg will passively register them as a threat, putting her on guard. If they speak with ill-intentions, she is able to ascertain the truth or falsity of their claims by her want to put up her Borg.

Trait Name: Sense of Nature
Trait Tier: B Tier
Trait Requirement: Must be Magician class.
Trait Description: Amnet has mastered usage of Life magic for healing purposes and she is able to passively view life aura’s in the surrounding area for further precision on locating vital areas of harm.
Trait Effect: Amnet may view the life aura of anyone in a radius of twenty metres. One’s life aura is of purple colour - brighter shades for healthy areas and darker shades for harmed areas. Her Sense of Nature may only view the life aura of organic creatures and is unable to view inorganic constructs. It may view through inorganic constructs within its range.

Abilities:
Construct/Sutekh: Amnet taps her staff upon a ‘seed’ and recites the Construct’s name. She cultivates the organic material inside the ‘seed’ using Life magic in order to start the process of growth. Using a combination of Life magic and Strength magic, Amnet grows this organic material into a plant-based beast. Unlike normal plant cells which provide all necessary life functions but lack mobility, these plant cells are divided between different functions and reunified to stimulate optimization. Sutekh is a Construct with four limbs and can take B Tier damage. It lasts for three posts before falling apart, unless it is defeated before. Sutekh resembles a hyena sporting fibrous muscles bound in ninety-two centimetres in height one metres and thirty centimetres in length, with features such as bright flowers for eyes and sharp thorns for canines. Sutekh is as fast as a B Tier Fanalis but deals only C Tier damage, which is given by way of cutting damage from its teeth or claws. It can only operate within a twenty metre diameter around Amnet.

Construct/Ammit: Amnet taps her staff upon a ‘seed’ and recites the Construct’s name. She cultivates the organic material inside the ‘seed’ using Life magic in order to start the process of growth. Using a combination of Life magic and Strength magic, Amnet grows this organic material into a plant-based beast. Unlike normal plant cells which provide all necessary life functions but lack mobility, these plant cells are divided between different functions and reunified to stimulate optimization. Ammit is a Construct with four limbs and can take A Tier damage. It lasts for three posts before falling apart, unless it is defeated before. Ammit resembles a hippo spilling clouds of gases from its body of one and a half metres in height and three metres in length, with features such as tough vines for hide and tree trunks for legs. Ammit is as fast as a D Tier Human but deals A Tier damage, which is given by way of the noxious gases which it dispersed like a fog. These gases gradually surround it at a slow pace to a maximum radius of two metres. These gases are formed from the constant breakdown and optimisation of its cells which forms carbon monoxide and hydrogen chloride. These gases are coloured ever so slightly yellow, hard to see for those not looking carefully. These gases deal no instant damage but upon contact make their way into blood cells through the skin. This results in A Tier damage in the next post. This can be removed by purging one’s blood in some fashion. Ammit can only operate within a fifteen metre diameter around Amnet.

Enforce/Pierce: Amnet points her staff at a Construct. Using a combination of Life magic and Strength magic, Amnet simulates the process of carbon-pressurisation and synthesises diamond structures. When used, this synthesised diamond may erupt out of the Construct’s limbs. This manifests as four sharp cylindrical stakes of ten centimetre diameter and twenty metres maximum length. Each stake deals C Tier piercing damage and extends at ten metres per second. They may only change direction at forty-five degree angles. They hone in on a target which Amnet can view within fifteen metres of the Construct. But they can only hone in on those who are visible to her. Amnet may use this along with Sense of Nature to hone in on targets whose life aura she can view. This holds the same limitations, however, that she may only view the life aura of organic creatures and is unable to view inorganic constructs. It costs one of the Construct’s limbs.

Enforce/Launch: Amnet points her staff towards a Construct. Using a combination of Life magic and Strength magic, Amnet simulates the fermentation of sugars and produces the liquid fuel of ethanol. When used, this liquid fuel can then be detonated upon the Construct. The detonation of travels outwards in a cone of ten metre length from the point of detonation at sub-sound speeds and causes B Tier burns. The detonation propels it ten metres into the air in the opposing direction of the detonation. It costs two of the Construct’s limbs.

Aid/Seal: Amnet points her staff at a target within twenty metres. She then uses Life magic to produce a one metre wide purple wave which travels at the speed of sound. This seals a wound of B Tier damage or less, whether it be internal or external, and regrow organic tissues.



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2Amnet, Daughter of Raab Empty Re: Amnet, Daughter of Raab on 27/09/19, 12:01 am

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Let us get into this.


    Weapons, Traits, and Trait Points

  • Weapons - You may have only one. Furthmore, the Book of Geb may not be approved. Earn a tome of such knowledge through a plot or an event.

  • Seeds of Plenty - This cannot be approved as a trait. It is more of an Ability than anything.

  • Borg's Jaws - You cannot strengthen a Borg from the mastering of the Rukh. Altering one's Borg is considered a high level spell.

  • Ancient Understanding - Earn this knowledge through a plot or an event.

  • Sense of Nature - 20m is more appropriate here, especially if you may see through/past non-living things. Otherwise, 30m if you cannot see through/past non-living things.

  • 10/6 Trait Points - You have gone over the limit a B-Tier non-player character may have, which is 6 (six). Please correct this. You currently have 4 (four) more trait points than what is approvable. Per tier of a trait, you use 1 (one) trait point.

    Abilities

  • Beast Summoning Abitlities - How long are the beasts active and how close far can they be from the user? I suggest 15m maximum, and 3 posts maximum.

  • Sutekh: Please detail the size of the beast. Your beast may only deal B-Tier damage and sprint as fast as a horse, in other words, D-Tier fanalis speed. Alternatively, it can be C-Tier damage and be able to outrun most mounts, C-Tier fanalis speed, or D-Tier damage and able to move like a blur across short distances and run across walls.

  • Ammit - Please detail the size of the beast. You may not have over B-Tier speed, damage, or durability. Also, it should really only deal damage by blunt force. I don't think carbon monoxide is necessary or should really do anything.

  • Pierce - 50m is far too long for B-Tier, let alone A-Tier. 30m is more appropriate I would say. Furthmore, what does a 10cm diameter sharp stake look like? How does it damage everything 5m of the beast? You may only either use this as a weapon (which would last 3 posts) or as an attack, pick one of them. You should also have the attack aimed at opponent and shot out if it is a 10cm diameter sharp stake, however, a 10cm diameter also implies it is round. So what is going on here?

  • Launch - Why does this Ability have two separate Abilities? One where it explodes, and another where it travels with the explosive concoction. Please remove one of the effects. Also, a 10m radius is a 20m diameter in all its length from one end to the other. This may be more appropriate at a 15m diameter considering it is an AoE if exploding. Furthermore, the construct/beast should take damage as the explosion is bigger than the construct/beast itself. Lastly, please change your wording from "anyone within x range is damaged" to something that does not suggest it is unavoidable. Instead, I opt that you rather say "the explosion travels outwards x meters this quickly (insert descriptive of speed)".

    Seal - This should describe the beam/projectile/etc that travels to the target.


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3Amnet, Daughter of Raab Empty Re: Amnet, Daughter of Raab on 28/09/19, 03:11 pm

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Bump!


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4Amnet, Daughter of Raab Empty Re: Amnet, Daughter of Raab on 01/10/19, 10:21 pm

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  • Weapons - You may only have one.

  • Born Botanist - This Trait has 2 effects. I am not approving either of these effects. Magoi is unable to be recovered from Traits currently.

  • Mind's Jaws - Must be A-Tier before being able to manipulate or alter your Borg. This also does not have a range on it.

  • Sutekh - Change the word Radius to Diameter. They are different, and misunderstanding Radius vs Diameter may result in approvals that result in a Range that is double what it is meant to be. Change the Range to 15m Diameter.

  • Ammit - Five meters in length is far too long. C-Tier Human Speed also does not exist as a descriptive for Speed on the site. Please simply change this to D-Tier Human Speed. You also cannot have two methods of damage here, pick one, physical strength is most likely to be approved. Noxious gasses is hard to say.

  • Pierce - These are capable of bending, and honing in? If it is diamond like material, it is hard to understand how it bends and hones in, unless you just mean it aims and can tilt and shift.

  • Launch - I do not see how this ability does not damage the construct as it is within its own explosion. Furthermore, it still has two separate choosable effects which should not be present together in this ability even if weakened. I would ask for the speed to be brought down, as super sonic seems a bit much.


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5Amnet, Daughter of Raab Empty Re: Amnet, Daughter of Raab on 02/10/19, 05:13 am

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6Amnet, Daughter of Raab Empty Re: Amnet, Daughter of Raab on 03/10/19, 04:49 pm

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I have resolved to take out that controversial trait. Instead, I will withhold those trait points for work after the Dungeon. With that said, bump!


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7Amnet, Daughter of Raab Empty Re: Amnet, Daughter of Raab on 10/10/19, 10:43 pm

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Please remove the gasses surrounding your construct. Rather, it should be exhaled from the construct, and visible, ideally goes as far as 2-4m and not too quickly.


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8Amnet, Daughter of Raab Empty Re: Amnet, Daughter of Raab on 11/10/19, 03:42 am

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9Amnet, Daughter of Raab Empty Re: Amnet, Daughter of Raab on 11/10/19, 07:38 pm

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Approved. Please speak to Merrze if you may include this NPC in the dungeon. I am personally okay with it as I should have got to this a little sooner, however, my word is not final.

Bump to purchase this NPC priced at 50k.

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[b]Name:[/b] Amnet Nut-Raabis Pyrrha

[b]Tier:[/b] A Tier

[b]Damage Required to Defeat:[/b] A Tier

[b]Description:[/b] Standing at five feet and eleven inches, Amnet’s long flowing hair, the subtle colour of rose pink, contrasts with her dark caramel complexion. Her eyes, the colour of lavender, are slightly glazed over and exhibit a ring of purple when utilising Life magic.
   Amnet is the twenty-five year old daughter of Raab, a previous vizier to the pharaoh, who was exiled from her native land after her father was killed by a rival contender and his position usurped. She now wanders the world with the intent of carrying on her father’s legacy of reinventing Life magic and its uses. She operates under the hand of the world emperor, Jahangir.
   Amnet has goals which are often quite far off of her current abilities, but this happens to have been what allowed her to get so far as she has worked so hard to achieve these goals. This determination and her stubbornness make her quite a formidable woman, as once she has her mind on something, she will do anything to reach that goal, helped by her extraordinary wit and sharp tongue which nature has given her.

[b]Weapons:[/b]
[b]Ra-Karhut:[/b] A magnificent staff of length one metre and fifty-two centimetres, heirloom of her father’s brief viziership, fashioned out of mahogany branch and painted in the regal gold and blues of the royal court.
[b]Records of Geb:[/b] An old tome of width sixty-centimetres which she carries on her back as if some form of load, which is engraved with all manner of inked symbols - her father’s notes on all sorts of matters about Life magic.

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Mind’s Jaws
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] A Tier
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Must be Magician class.
[b]Trait Description:[/b] Amnet has mastered usage of her Borg to such an extent that she is able to use it for secondary reasons.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] When Amnet is approached by someone with ill-intentions within seven metres, her Borg will passively register them as a threat, putting her on guard. If they speak with ill-intentions, she is able to ascertain the truth or falsity of their claims by her want to put up her Borg.

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Sense of Nature
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] B Tier
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Must be Magician class.
[b]Trait Description:[/b] Amnet has mastered usage of Life magic for healing purposes and she is able to passively view life aura’s in the surrounding area for further precision on locating vital areas of harm.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Amnet may view the life aura of anyone in a radius of twenty metres. One’s life aura is of purple colour - brighter shades for healthy areas and darker shades for harmed areas. Her Sense of Nature may only view the life aura of organic creatures and is unable to view inorganic constructs. It may view through inorganic constructs within its range.

[b]Abilities:[/b]
[b]Construct/Sutekh:[/b] Amnet taps her staff upon a ‘seed’ and recites the Construct’s name. She cultivates the organic material inside the ‘seed’ using Life magic in order to start the process of growth. Using a combination of Life magic and Strength magic, Amnet grows this organic material into a plant-based beast. Unlike normal plant cells which provide all necessary life functions but lack mobility, these plant cells are divided between different functions and reunified to stimulate optimization. Sutekh is a Construct with four limbs and can take B Tier damage. It lasts for three posts before falling apart, unless it is defeated before. Sutekh resembles a hyena sporting fibrous muscles bound in ninety-two centimetres in height one metres and thirty centimetres in length, with features such as bright flowers for eyes and sharp thorns for canines. Sutekh is as fast as a B Tier Fanalis but deals only C Tier damage, which is given by way of cutting damage from its teeth or claws. It can only operate within a twenty metre diameter around Amnet.

[b]Construct/Ammit:[/b] Amnet taps her staff upon a ‘seed’ and recites the Construct’s name. She cultivates the organic material inside the ‘seed’ using Life magic in order to start the process of growth. Using a combination of Life magic and Strength magic, Amnet grows this organic material into a plant-based beast. Unlike normal plant cells which provide all necessary life functions but lack mobility, these plant cells are divided between different functions and reunified to stimulate optimization. Ammit is a Construct with four limbs and can take A Tier damage. It lasts for three posts before falling apart, unless it is defeated before. Ammit resembles a hippo spilling clouds of gases from its body of one and a half metres in height and three metres in length, with features such as tough vines for hide and tree trunks for legs. Ammit is as fast as a D Tier Human but deals A Tier damage, which is given by way of the noxious gases which it dispersed like a fog. These gases gradually surround it at a slow pace to a maximum radius of two metres. These gases are formed from the constant breakdown and optimisation of its cells which forms carbon monoxide and hydrogen chloride. These gases are coloured ever so slightly yellow, hard to see for those not looking carefully. These gases deal no instant damage but upon contact make their way into blood cells through the skin. This results in A Tier damage in the next post. This can be removed by purging one’s blood in some fashion. Ammit can only operate within a fifteen metre diameter around Amnet.

[b]Enforce/Pierce:[/b] Amnet points her staff at a Construct. Using a combination of Life magic and Strength magic, Amnet simulates the process of carbon-pressurisation and synthesises diamond structures. When used, this synthesised diamond may erupt out of the Construct’s limbs. This manifests as four sharp cylindrical stakes of ten centimetre diameter and twenty metres maximum length. Each stake deals C Tier piercing damage and extends at ten metres per second. They may only change direction at forty-five degree angles. They hone in on a target which Amnet can view within fifteen metres of the Construct. But they can only hone in on those who are visible to her. Amnet may use this along with Sense of Nature to hone in on targets whose life aura she can view. This holds the same limitations, however, that she may only view the life aura of organic creatures and is unable to view inorganic constructs. It costs one of the Construct’s limbs.

[b]Enforce/Launch:[/b] Amnet points her staff towards a Construct. Using a combination of Life magic and Strength magic, Amnet simulates the fermentation of sugars and produces the liquid fuel of ethanol. When used, this liquid fuel can then be detonated upon the Construct. The detonation of travels outwards in a cone of ten metre length from the point of detonation at sub-sound speeds and causes B Tier burns. The detonation propels it ten metres into the air in the opposing direction of the detonation. It costs two of the Construct’s limbs.

[b]Aid/Seal:[/b] Amnet points her staff at a target within twenty metres. She then uses Life magic to produce a one metre wide purple wave which travels at the speed of sound. This seals a wound of B Tier damage or less, whether it be internal or external, and regrow organic tissues.


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10Amnet, Daughter of Raab Empty Re: Amnet, Daughter of Raab on 12/10/19, 03:40 pm

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BUmp!


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11Amnet, Daughter of Raab Empty Re: Amnet, Daughter of Raab on 12/10/19, 05:28 pm

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Approved. 50k huang deducted. 451k huang after purchase.


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