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1Beast submission. Empty Beast submission. on 10/09/16, 04:45 pm

JerichoRogers

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Beast submission. Darcia-wolfs-rain-2861217-379-412
Name: Daisy
Tier: D
Type: Normal
Species:Wolf
Height: 91.4 cm Tall, 168 cm in length. {Roughly standing 3 foot tall, and 5 and a half foot in length. when stretched out.}
Weight: 43Kg  {95lbs}
Appearance: A medium to large sized wolf with black sleek fur. eyes of mismatching color as well. His fangs are sharp and the creature offten carries a heavy growl to try and intimidate its foes. Its flesh under the fur when petted can let someone feel the rough patches from several past wounds or scars.
Beast Traits: (See the Trait Systems for more info.)
3 Available traits-
Trait Name: Enhanced Sense of Smell
Trait Tier: D
Trait Requirement: Canine Nose
Trait Description: The ability to use the natural animal senses trained and tuned even farther for tracking benefits.
Trait Effect:
Can track up to one person at one time by remembering scents and trails. Daisy can lead Jericho to them rather easily if they evade or escape his grasp, or if he simply gets lost from his allies later and needs to locate them quickly. Daisy can pinpoint the location of a target by smell down to a 30m area and can pick up a trail up to 250m away. Heavy rain or pungent smells can temporarily block Daisy's tracking senses.

Trait Name: Beast Strength
Trait Tier: D
Trait Requirement: Animal strength and finesse.
Trait Description: The power the wolf holds in its small but agile body. Trained and the image of fitness for one of her kind.
Trait Effect: The wolf has great strength given its training and harsh life style even that a little beyond of your average black wolf. [can deal up to C tier damage with physical strength alone .]

Trait Name: Dashing Speed
Trait Tier: D
Trait Requirement: Animal reflexes
Trait Description: The quick movements of a hunter. Able to move faster then her master and move ahead along if needed.
Trait Effect: Allows hr to break speeds normally that wouldn't be as easily achieved to one of her kind. [Allows her to achiever C-tier speed and can hold it for up to several minutes.]



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2Beast submission. Empty Re: Beast submission. on 10/09/16, 06:17 pm

Duquin

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Approved for now, but I'll leave this thread open and in the approval area. When you are ready to add traits, just edit your post and bump this thread.


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3Beast submission. Empty Re: Beast submission. on 11/09/16, 08:59 pm

JerichoRogers

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Bump


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4Beast submission. Empty Re: Beast submission. on 12/09/16, 08:39 am

Noir Ecryola

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Enhanced Senses: Put the range of how far she can smell the scent of a certain object/person.

Beast strength: You can state that she is capable to deal C-tier damage with physical strength alone, no stronger than this though for this trait's level. It is not strong enough to be able to easily compete with most of the animals in the animal kingdom in this level of tier, so it is better to just give it strength buff rather than giving abstract measurement. Please reword the description.

Dashing Speed: It says it moved faster than the owner. What if the owner has A tier speed? It is better to state that it has C-tier speed and can maintain the speed for several minutes.




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5Beast submission. Empty Re: Beast submission. on 12/09/16, 04:51 pm

JerichoRogers

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Hows that look? AS for the range if thats not what you mean do you have any possible examples? I was intending it to be the way he'd track people down or find them again after seperating sort of deal. Like as much of a attack wolf she's also a tracker given his profession.


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6Beast submission. Empty Re: Beast submission. on 12/09/16, 05:53 pm

Duquin

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I've made some edits to the enhanced senses trait. I removed hearing(should be its own trait) and focused on the scent based sense. I lowered the number of targets, made a note of some logical weaknesses, and gave more detailed information on what its capable of. As you rank up this trait you can narrow down the area she can pinpoint, increase the range, and increase the number of targets. If are okay with it, edit it in and bump the thread letting us know:

Trait Name: Enhanced Sense of Smell
Trait Tier: D
Trait Requirement: Canine Nose
Trait Description: The ability to use the natural animal senses trained and tuned even farther for tracking benefits.
Trait Effect:
Can track up to one person at one time by remembering scents and trails. Daisy can lead Jericho to them rather easily if they evade or escape his grasp, or if he simply gets lost from his allies later and needs to locate them quickly.  Daisy can pinpoint the location of a target by smell down to a 30m area and can pick up a trail up to 250m away. Heavy rain or pungent smells can temporarily block Daisy's tracking senses.

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[b]Trait Name:[/b] Enhanced Sense of Smell
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] D
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Canine Nose
[b]Trait Description:[/b] The ability to use the natural animal senses trained and tuned even farther for tracking benefits.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b]
Can track up to one person at one time by remembering scents and trails. Daisy can lead Jericho to them rather easily if they evade or escape his grasp, or if he simply gets lost from his allies later and needs to locate them quickly.  Daisy can pinpoint the location of a target by smell down to a 30m area and can pick up a trail up to 250m away. Heavy rain or pungent smells can temporarily block Daisy's tracking senses.




EDIT: Just for clarification, I'd like to mention two points. The range for picking up a trail doesn't mean you have to be that close to the target. If you use your ability to make them bleed, then the start of the blood trail would be the start of the "trail" even if the target somehow got out of the 250m range, so long as the blood trail was still within the range you could effectively track them.

Also, you could make an ability to "mark" someone with Daisy's urine. This could allow you to increase your tracking range, decrease the pinpointed area size, or even negate the weakness of heavy rain/pungent smells.(You could get one of those effects for said ability, not all three)


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7Beast submission. Empty Re: Beast submission. on 12/09/16, 07:52 pm

JerichoRogers

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Sounds good. Bumping and the alterations you suggested look great to me. ^^


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8Beast submission. Empty Re: Beast submission. on 12/09/16, 08:13 pm

Duquin

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[b]Name:[/b] Daisy
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Type:[/b] Normal
[b]Species:[/b]Wolf
[b]Height:[/b] 91.4 cm Tall, 168 cm in length. {Roughly standing 3 foot tall, and 5 and a half foot in length. when stretched out.}
[b]Weight:[/b] 43Kg  {95lbs}
[b]Appearance:[/b] A medium to large sized wolf with black sleek fur. eyes of mismatching color as well. His fangs are sharp and the creature offten carries a heavy growl to try and intimidate its foes. Its flesh under the fur when petted can let someone feel the rough patches from several past wounds or scars.
[b]Beast Traits:[/b]

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Enhanced Sense of Smell
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] D
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Canine Nose
[b]Trait Description:[/b] The ability to use the natural animal senses trained and tuned even farther for tracking benefits.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b]
Can track up to one person at one time by remembering scents and trails. Daisy can lead Jericho to them rather easily if they evade or escape his grasp, or if he simply gets lost from his allies later and needs to locate them quickly.  Daisy can pinpoint the location of a target by smell down to a 30m area and can pick up a trail up to 250m away. Heavy rain or pungent smells can temporarily block Daisy's tracking senses.

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Beast Strength
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] D
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Animal strength and finesse.
[b]Trait Description:[/b] The power the wolf holds in its small but agile body. Trained and the image of fitness for one of her kind.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] The wolf has great strength given its training and harsh life style even that a little beyond of your average black wolf. [can deal up to C tier damage with physical strength alone .]

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Dashing Speed
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] D
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Animal reflexes
[b]Trait Description:[/b] The quick movements of a hunter. Able to move faster then her master and move ahead along if needed.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Allows hr to break speeds normally that wouldn't be as easily achieved to one of her kind. [Allows her to achiever C-tier speed and can hold it for up to several minutes.]


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Thank you all, for everything.

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