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Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1

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1Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1  Empty Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1 04/09/16, 03:58 am

Ramses

Ramses
D-Tier
D-Tier

D Tier:

C Tier:



Last edited by Ramses on 19/09/16, 07:37 pm; edited 2 times in total

2Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1  Empty Re: Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1 09/09/16, 11:41 am

Ramses

Ramses
D-Tier
D-Tier

Bump Sara

3Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1  Empty Re: Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1 10/09/16, 11:17 am

Farid Issah

Farid Issah
β-Tier
β-Tier

Ramses wrote:
D Tier:

C Tier:

You only get 5 starting abilities. 4 D tier and 1 C tier.
Also no more ability speeds.

Rupture.
I feel like the knockback is a second effect, so that would mean it would at least be C-tier. Range required.

Sunrise.
A range from where you can activate the spell, like how far can you be to activate the marker. Is the range a 10M radius? If so that is a 20m diamater way too big for a D tier spell. I would say a 10m diamater is still too large for a D-tier spell. Instead of an ability speed, how about a height?

Sunset
If you scale Sunrise AoE, I feel this shouldn't hit everyone affected by Sunrise, but I will let someone else judge that since it does make a good combo and there seems to be a new focus on combos.

Flutter
Dimensions for the platform. Range from you. How high off the ground. Can it be moved. I assumed it can be destroyed by D-tier.

Left Hand.
Range. Also long is too big, IMO but IDK.

4Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1  Empty Re: Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1 10/09/16, 11:31 am

Duquin

Duquin
A-Tier
A-Tier

Here are some general edits all your abilities need:

-We no longer use number values for speed. Remove all m/s and references to the speed of your abilities. Unless you want an ability that is focused on speed. In which case, it should have some kind of drawback to justify having a speed advantage. In that case, just use wording to describe that it is a fast attack. No numbers.

-Sustaining abilities no longer adds to the cool downs. Remove the sustain +1 stuff.


Tamazzuq:
Remove the knock back effect, reduce the size of the explosion to 50cm.

Add something to requirements that you must do to trigger the explosion.


Shuruq Alshshams:
Decrease radius to 2m, decrease height to 5m.

Same as above in needing a trigger action in requirements.


Ghrwb Alshshams:
Instead of needing sunrise to be cast, I suggest changing the requirement to needing your target to be airborne. This will make the move more useful.

Add aiming the spell into requirements.


Rafrifa:
Your description seems incomplete.

Also, how big is the platform? How far away can it be formed? How high does it lift you once you step on it?


Alyad Alyusraa:
The attack combined with grabbing and throwing is a bit too much complexity for a D-tier spell. Remove two of the three "actions" and keep just one.

Decease size of the hand to 1-2m.


5Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1  Empty Re: Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1 19/09/16, 07:38 pm

Ramses

Ramses
D-Tier
D-Tier

Bump

6Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1  Empty Re: Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1 20/09/16, 07:00 pm

Duquin

Duquin
A-Tier
A-Tier

The abilities are approved with the following edits. But one ability will only be approved for training since you have 5 D-tiers. You only get 5 starters total, one of which is C-tier. Bump stating which ability you'd like to train.

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[spoiler=D Tier]
[center][b]Tamazzuq[/b][/center]
[center][size=13]Rupture[/size][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Magician
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Medium
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Must say the name of the spell. Must point staff in the direction he wishes to attack.
[b]Scaling:[/b] Hits
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Magoi | Sustain 5 Magoi
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
The caster points their stave st the target and says the name of the spell. The ball is 235 mm in circumference and 76 mm in diameter. It is s clear ball made out of strength magic. The ball is barely visible to most, but is a smoky black color to those who can see it. The caster can decide when it detonates. The explosion radius is only 50 cm and deals D tier damage. The spell "pops" after the caster snaps their fingers.[/list]

[center][b]Shuruq Alshshams[/b][/center]
[center][size=13]Sunrise[/size][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Magician
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Long (10+ m)
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Must say the name of the spell, as well as place "marker" for the spell to be activated.
[b]Scaling:[/b] AoE
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Magoi | Sustain 5 Magoi
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
The caster touches the ground with their stave; the part of the stave that touches doesn't matter. The then must speak the name of the spell. A marker will be placed on the ground made out of strength magic, meaning very few people can see it. The marker has a 2m diameter. It is up to the caster to activate the spell, however someone must be standing within its radius. After the seal is activated it will propel whoever is within it up to 5 m into the air. The spell activates when the caster whistles.[/list]

[center][b]Ghrwb Alshshams[/b][/center]
[center][size=13]Sunset[/size][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Magician
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Long
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] The target must be airborne. Spell name must be said.
[b]Scaling:[/b] Damage
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Magoi | Sustain 5 Magoi
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
This spell only works if their target is airborne. After the caster says this spell name they must point their stave or wand at the target. The target is pressed down by utilizing gravity magic. For the spell to activate the caster must whistle. This spell deals D tier damage without scaling involved.[/list]

[center][b]Rafrifa[/b][/center]
[center][size=13]Flutter[/size][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D Tier
[b]Class:[/b] Magician
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Medium
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Must say spell name and stave must be in either hand.
[b]Scaling:[/b] Hits
[b]Sustain:[/b] 1
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Magoi | Sustain 5 Magoi
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
The caster recites the spells name and a thin layer of strength magic forms. It works as a sort of platform to lift the caster into the air. The platform is large enough for two people to stand on. It is a square shape, it is 4 m in size. The caster can form the platform up to 3m away. The caster must verbally say up for it to rise. The platform can only move upwards and moves 3m per turn/sustain.[/list]

[center][b]Alyad Alyusraa[/b][/center]
[center][size=13]Left Hand[/size][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Magician
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Long
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Must say spell name and swipe stave horizontal to the left.
[b]Scaling:[/b] Damage
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Magoi | Sustain 5 Magoi
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
The caster swipes their stave to the left while saying the spell name. This causes a giant left hand to slam into the target dealing D-tier damage. The hand is 2 m wide and 6 m from wrist to tip of middle finger.[/list]
[/spoiler]

[spoiler=C Tier][b]Name:[/b] Gravity Lift, Stage 1
[b]Tier:[/b] C
[b]Cost:[/b] 20 on cast; 10 sustain
[b]Element:[/b] Gravity
[b]Class:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Self
[b]Duration:[/b] Sustained
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 3 posts or Sustain+1
[b]Description:[/b] A magician lowers the influence of gravity around their body. This gives them the ability to lift off, hover, and soar through the sky at a maximum speed of 5m/s. They can control the force of gravity around their body at any given moment, able to slow down, speed up, or stop flying completely.
[/spoiler]

7Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1  Empty Re: Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1 20/09/16, 07:10 pm

Ramses

Ramses
D-Tier
D-Tier

Rafrifa Is the one I'm going to train

8Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1  Empty Re: Ramses Spell Book Vol. 1 20/09/16, 07:15 pm

Duquin

Duquin
A-Tier
A-Tier

Ok, moving this to the approved for training board. Bumpin with a link to your training once complete.

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