Niala's Abilities

((Some of these abilities are based on others, so I don't want any approved until they are all ready & approvable. If that makes sense o.o))

Name: Like an eel
Tier: D
Cost: 10| 5
Weapon Type: Body
Class: Offensive
Range: Self
Duration: Sustained
Cool-Down: 2 posts or Sustained +1
Limbs: Arm
Description:The user manipulates an arm to form dense layer of muscles and nerve endings that extend from the user's forearm in the shape of a tentacle up to 5 meters long. The arm can be used as a whip to attack at 10 m/s, and squeeze to deal D-Tier damage. When deactivated the arm reforms to its natural state.

Name: Like a stingray
Tier: D
Cost: 10 |5
Weapon Type: Body
Class: Offensive
Range: Self
Duration: Sustained
Cool-Down: 2 posts or Sustained +1
Limbs: Torso
Description: The users manipulates the spine, muscles and skin of their torso to extend into a controllable tail of 3 meters long with a 2 meter long boney, pointed, and flat barbed tip. The tail can be used for cutting and piercing at D-Tier damage, moving at 10m/s. When deactivated the torso reforms to its natural state.

Name: Like a Bat
Tier: C
Cost: 20| 10
Weapon Type: Body
Class: Defensive, Supplementary
Range: Self
Duration: Sustained
Cool-Down: 3 posts or Sustained +1
Limbs: Arms
Description: The users manipulates the bones, skin, and muscle of their arms into leathery bat-like wings each 2.5 meters in length at 10m/s. The wings can be used to thrust, propel or glide the user up to 10 meters away and, using the toughened bones, defend against up to C-tier damage. When deactivated the arm reforms to its natural state.

Name: Like a Mongoose
Tier: D
Cost: 10 |5
Weapon Type: Body
Class: Supplementary
Range: Self
Duration: Sustained
Cool-Down: 2 posts or Sustained +1
Limbs: Torso
Description: The user buffs the torso muscles to increase the speed that which torso can naturally turn and contract equal to 10m/s speed buff, instead of the entire body for running speed or etc, allowing faster shifting and realigning of the individual's core.

Name: Like a crab
Tier: D
Cost: 10 |5
Weapon Type: Body
Class: Offensive
Range: Self
Duration: Sustained
Cool-Down: 2 posts or Sustained +1
Limbs: Arm
Description: The user manipulates their bones and muscles of an arm into forming a dense and cutting crab-like claw and exoskeleton-like arm. The claw itself is 1 meter in scale (about 3ft), but can stretch out up to 4 Meters. The claw can deal D-Tier damage when it snaps shut to anything within its clutches.

For any sustained ability, the cool-down should state "X posts or Sustained+1"

Weapon type for all of these would be "Body" and range would be "Self"

Like an eel: For this ability, because the scale is 5 meters, no one portion of the ability may extend beyond 5 meters. The conductivity line has been removed, but it will make sense soon. Consider rewording the description to state:

The user manipulates an arm to form dense layer of muscles and nerve endings that extend from the user's forearm in the shape of a tentacle up to 5 meters long. The arm can be used as a whip to attack at 10 m/s to deal D-Tier damage. When deactivated the arm reforms to its natural state.

Like Bio-electric: Class would be Supplementary. Due to awkward wording, consider rewording the description to state:

The user manipulates the muscles of their arm at 10m/s to overwork the natural chemical production of bio-electricity which can impair a struck target's nerves by touching them, numbing 1 limb for 2 Posts which reduces movement speed by 5m/s.

With this wording, whatever state your arm is in, you would be able to touch them and produce this reaction.

Like a Bat: Description needs to include speed, which would be 10m/s. Consider rewording the description to the following:

The users manipulates the bones, skin, and muscle of their arms into leathery bat-like wings each 2.5 meters in length at 10m/s. The wings can be used to thrust, propel or glide the user up to 10 meters away and, using the toughened bones, defend against up to C-tier damage. When deactivated the arm reforms to its natural state.

Like a crab: For this ability, because the scale is 5 meters, no one portion of the ability may extend beyond 5 meters.

All fixed! Changed Like a crab (the claw) 1m in scale but stretching up to 4m (totaling 5)

(Bump)

https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t2486-ability-guidelines-important#11811

The paralysis status effect is currently limited to Lightning Magicians and Stealth users. So, if you have magic you can use it or if you have knowledge of pressure points and stuff from stealth you can use it. By itself, Body Manipulation cannot.


Only other issues I see is your Cool-Downs for your sustained abilities, which should either be "2 posts or Sustained +1" for D-Tier abilities or "3 posts or Sustained +1" for C-Tier abilities.

Fixed.
I replaced the electric thing with like a stingray.
I also altered the Eel ability to note "The arm can be used as a whip to attack at 10 m/s, and squeeze to deal D-Tier damage.".

(Bump)

approved and added to your vault~

Code:


[b]Name:[/b] Like an eel
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10| 5
[b]Weapon Type:[/b] Body
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Self
[b]Duration:[/b] Sustained
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts or Sustained +1
[b]Limbs:[/b] Arm
[b]Description:[/b]The user manipulates an arm to form dense layer of muscles and nerve endings that extend from the user's forearm in the shape of a tentacle up to 5 meters long. The arm can be used as a whip to attack at 10 m/s, and squeeze to deal D-Tier damage. When deactivated the arm reforms to its natural state.

[b]Name:[/b] Like a stingray
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 |5
[b]Weapon Type:[/b] Body
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Self
[b]Duration:[/b] Sustained
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts or Sustained +1
[b]Limbs:[/b] Torso
[b]Description:[/b] The users manipulates the spine, muscles and skin of their torso to extend into a controllable tail of 3 meters long with a 2 meter long boney, pointed, and flat barbed tip. The tail can be used for cutting and piercing at D-Tier damage, moving at 10m/s. When deactivated the torso reforms to its natural state.

[b]Name:[/b] Like a Bat
[b]Tier:[/b] C
[b]Cost:[/b] 20| 10
[b]Weapon Type:[/b] Body
[b]Class:[/b] Defensive, Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Self
[b]Duration:[/b] Sustained
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 3 posts or Sustained +1
[b]Limbs:[/b] Arms
[b]Description:[/b] The users manipulates the bones, skin, and muscle of their arms into leathery bat-like wings each 2.5 meters in length at 10m/s. The wings can be used to thrust, propel or glide the user up to 10 meters away and, using the toughened bones, defend against up to C-tier damage. When deactivated the arm reforms to its natural state.

[b]Name:[/b] Like a Mongoose
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 |5
[b]Weapon Type:[/b] Body
[b]Class:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Self
[b]Duration:[/b] Sustained
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts or Sustained +1
[b]Limbs:[/b] Torso
[b]Description:[/b] The user buffs the torso muscles to increase the speed that which torso can naturally turn and contract equal to 10m/s speed buff, instead of the entire body for running speed or etc, allowing faster shifting and realigning of the individual's core.

[b]Name:[/b] Like a crab
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 |5
[b]Weapon Type:[/b] Body
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Self
[b]Duration:[/b] Sustained
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts or Sustained +1
[b]Limbs:[/b] Arm
[b]Description:[/b] The user manipulates their bones and muscles of an arm into forming a dense and cutting crab-like claw and exoskeleton-like arm. The claw itself is 1 meter in scale (about 3ft), but can stretch out up to 4 Meters. The claw can deal D-Tier damage when it snaps shut to anything within its clutches.