Ptolemy's Starting abilities

Name: Deserts Glare
Tier: D
Cost: 10
Beast Type: Tactician
Class: Supplementary
Range: 7 Meters
Duration: Instant
Cool-Down: 2
Description: By reflecting and directing ambient light Aten can create a bright flash that blinds those within a 3 meter area around the point of focus for one post. He can focus the light at a speed of 15m/s.

Name: Heat Shimmer
Tier: D
Cost: 10/5 To sustain
Beast Type: Tactician
Class: Offensive
Range: Close
Duration:Sustained
Cool-Down: 2-7 posts
Description: Aten allows some of his absorbed heat escape his body. This deals D tier damage.

Name: Poison Mist
Tier: D
Cost: 10
Beast Type: Tactician
Class: Offensive
Range: 7 Meters
Duration: 1
Cool-Down: 2-posts
Description: Aten expels a cloud of poison gas with a diameter of 3 meters at a speed of 15m/s. This cloud deals D tier damage to all caught within.

Name: Serpents Strike
Tier: D
Cost: 10
Beast Type: Tactician
Class: Offensive
Range: 7 Meters
Duration: Instant
Cool-Down: 2-posts
Description: Aten coils and strikes, moving at a speed of 15m/s dealing D tier damage. During this attack Aten can spring up to 7 Meters away.

Name: Cobra's Bite
Tier: C
Cost: 20/10
Beast Type: Tactician
Class: Offensive
Range: Close
Duration: Sustained
Cool-Down: Sustained+1
Description: Aten strikes at 20 m/s, dealing D-Tier damage and causing headaches and reducing ability speed by half for 2 posts. This can be sustained to use the ability again in a subsequent post.'

Ready me thinks.

Just a few overall mentions I would like to make:

Durations:

Spoiler:

Cool-downs:

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Range:

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Class:

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Poison guidelines:
Poison Guidelines can be found near the bottom of the Status Effects found at this post.

Desert Glare and Heat Shimmer need a bit of discussion. These both seem to be using elemental abilities, like Light magic for the glare, or Heat magic for the shimmer. Normally, when a beast has such abilities assigned to them they would require a passive of theirs to correspond with such an ability. Like how you have a poison passive, allowing your beast to have abilities that act with poisons. I would like Ariella's input on this as well.

Poison Mist: This has both the offensive and supplementary effects of Poison associated with it. D-Tier can only have one, which means you can have the damage or the special effect of poison.

Cobra's Bite:
This was briefly alluded to in my mention of what the Poison passive does, as well as the link to how Ability Classes work in regards to each portion of the ability taking a 1 tier nerf to their effect if you split it into Offensive/Supplementary. As such, the ability should look more like the following:

'Aten strikes at 20 m/s, dealing D-Tier damage and causing headaches and reducing ability speed by half for 2 posts. This can be sustained to use the ability again in a subsequent post.'


Approved:
(I made a minor change, switching the 'range' to 'close', as is appropriate for a Melee attack)

Code:

[b]Name:[/b] Serpents Strike
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10
[b]Beast Type:[/b] Tactician
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Duration:[/b] Instant
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2-posts
[b]Description:[/b] Aten coils and strikes, moving at a speed of 15m/s dealing D tier damage.

For the blinding techs, you would need a passive that stated his scales held reflective properties. You could replace your first passive trait with this, if you would like, as it is not really necessary to have his ability to coil around your stump as a passive.

Edited, pending the change to Aten's passives.

Deserts Glare: This ability needs the speed at which he is able to redirect the light, for D-tier, this would be 15 m/s.

Heat Shimmer: D-tier abilities cannot be offensive/supplementary, they can only have a single tech type. You would need to choose either offensive or supplementary. Range would be 'close'. Cool-down would be "2 posts or Sustain+1".

Poison Mist: You only specify that he is venomous meaning via bite, you do not indicate that he has a way of expelling poisons in a gas cloud. He would need an organ capable of producing a gas cloud of some sort.

Serpents Strike: Aten would not be able to leap away if the range is "close". You could have the range as 7 meters and word the description to say "Aten lunges and strikes at an opponent within seven meters, moving at 15m/s to inflict D-tier damage via bite."

Cobra's Bite: Cool-down needs to be "3 posts or Sustain+1"

Lets try this again!

Your cool-downs still aren't following the guidelines, and Ariella was thinking something different with your Serpent strike (I spoke to her about it and we're on the same page now).

I have made the necessary edits to your abilities below. Simply bump and let me know if you approve of them or not, and we will be all set.

Code:


[b]Name:[/b] Deserts Glare
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10
[b]Beast Type:[/b] Tactician
[b]Class:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] 7 Meters
[b]Duration:[/b] Instant
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts
[b]Description:[/b] By reflecting and directing ambient light Aten can create a bright flash that blinds those within a 3 meter area around the point of focus for one post. He can focus the light at a speed of 15m/s.

[b]Name:[/b] Heat Shimmer
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10/5 To sustain
[b]Beast Type:[/b] Tactician
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Duration:[/b] Sustained
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts or sustain+1
[b]Description:[/b] Aten allows some of his absorbed heat to escape his body. This deals D tier damage to whatever is touching its body.

[b]Name:[/b] Poison Mist
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10
[b]Beast Type:[/b] Tactician
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] 7 Meters
[b]Duration:[/b] 1 post
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts
[b]Description:[/b] Aten expels a cloud of poison gas with a diameter of 3 meters at a speed of 15m/s. This cloud deals D tier damage to all caught within.

[b]Name:[/b] Serpents Strike
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10
[b]Beast Type:[/b] Tactician
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Duration:[/b] Instant
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts
[b]Description:[/b] Aten coils and strikes, moving at a speed of 15m/s dealing D tier damage. This attack can reach any target that is within the full distance of Aten's body length (Ex. 5 meters away from the tip of its tail, since Aten is 5 meters long).

[b]Name:[/b] Cobra's Bite
[b]Tier:[/b] C
[b]Cost:[/b] 20/10
[b]Beast Type:[/b] Tactician
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive/Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Duration:[/b] Sustained
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 3 posts or sustained+1
[b]Description:[/b] Aten strikes at 20 m/s, dealing D-Tier damage and causing headaches and reducing ability speed by half for 2 posts. This can be sustained to use the ability again in a subsequent post.

Such a simple thing confused the hell out of me xD Sorry bout that and thank you.

No worries, the systems can be pretty involved at times ^_^.