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Theos Moveset 1 [Dynatos Abilities Resubmit]

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Name: Hawk Eyes
Tier: B
Cost: 30 Stamina | 15 Stamina
Weapon Type: Hand
Class: Defensive
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 5 posts
Description: Theos focuses on the opponent’s movements. He then moves at speeds of 20 m/s parrying whatever attack they launch at him with his weapon. This technique can parry up to 1 A tier amount of damage..

Name: Flame Bite
Tier: B
Cost: 30 Stamina | 15 Stamina
Beast Type: Brute
Class: Supplementary
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 5 posts
Description: Ares bites the opponent tearing through their muscle at the same time he bites the opponent and tears into their muscle he produces fire from his mouth into the torn muscle/wound at 20m/s. The opponent suffers 2nd degree burns while the flame from the attack itself lasts for 2 posts and deals additional D-tier  damage per  post of actual flames.  

Name: No Name
Tier: C
Cost: 20 | 10 Stamina
Weapon Type: Hand
Class: Offensive
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 3 Posts + 1 if sustained
Description: Theos rushes at his opponent at speeds of 15 m/s. He then quickly bear hugs them. clinging tightly he jumps 10 M into the air. He spins multiple times before launching them at the ground to deal C-tier damage.

Name: Flame Breath
Tier: C
Cost: 20 | 10
Beast Type: Brute
Class: Supplementary
Range: 10 M
Cool-Down: 3 posts + 1 if sustained
Description: Ares opens his mouth and releases a stream of fire that travels up to 10 meters at 15 m/s. The opponent hit with this technique suffers 2nd degree burns.


Name: Comet Strike Lv 1
Tier: D
Cost: 5 Stamina | 10 Stamina
Weapon Type: Sword
Class: Offensive
Range: 5 m
Cool-Down: 2 posts + 1 if sustained
Description: Theos changes the way he holds the Moon Peircer it appears as if he was holding a spear and is about to throw it. He then rears back and launches his sword lance at the opponent up to 5 meters away at 10 m/s, dealing D-tier damage to anything it strikes. He then quickly pulls the weapon back by the threads attached to the moon piercer.

Name: Speed Boost Lv 1
Tier: D
Cost: 10|5 Stamina
Weapon Type: Magoi Manipulation
Class: Supplementary
Range: Self
Cool-Down: 4 posts
Description: Theoos focuses his energy into his legs allowing him to move at 10 m/s for the remainder of the post. This technique allows him to move at 10m/s instantly from a standing position.

Name: Hard Body Lv 1
Tier: D
Cost: 10 Stamina
Weapon Type: - Body
Class: Defensive
Range: Self
Cool-Down: 2 posts + 1 if sustained
Description: Theos focuses his energy into hardening his muscles at 10 m/s, allowing him to deflect up to C-tier damage.. This increases the amount of damage his body can withstand, but it all causes him to be implanted into the ground where he is standing.

Name: Gaia Devestation Lv
Tier: C
Cost: 20 Stamina | 10 Stamina
Weapon Type:Hand
Class: Offensive
Range: 10 M
Cool-Down: 3 Post +1
Description: Theos clenches his fist; quickly rearing back Theos slams his clenched fist into the ground cause a crater to form in the ground around the point of impact. The area in a 10 M range is destroyed and sunk in. There becomes a lot of deformities in the ground due to the technique. Debris goes flying out in a 10 M range as well. The ruble from the technique lasts for the thread but only in the 10 M range of the move. The debris sent flying moves 15 m/s and will do C tier damage.



Last edited by Diligence on 18/01/22, 05:40 am; edited 1 time in total

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So am I not looking at the spoiler technique or I'm looking at everything here? I'll add corrections for it anyway, but first, might I recommend you to use the actual template of the abilities and stick to the current rules in regards to making them. M/s usage was phased out a long time ago. Yeah, you need to clean up the templates for your abilities man. You also need your vault in spoilers, things like your beast producing the heat or fire, we would want to reference that so we should have easy access to the vault in order to do so.

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Here is an example of one of my abilities for my beast as a reference for you. Your formatting is off so I'm not sure how you were able to make the spells like that in the first place.

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Shut down: Right idea, a pinpoint strike at a pressure point that can immobilize three limbs for three post. The strike itself also deals B-tier ability damage. However, speed should not be mentioned in the ability. Cooldown is 4, range should be close.

Hawkeye: is a b tier parry, so it should be parrying b tier abilities. Without the protection against magic, it would only parry certain things that aren't powered by magic, "like a sword/spear/arrow etc..fist..you understand. " you need to be mindful of this if you try to parry a flamethrower blast or something, some things are better left for magoi manipulation or something that allows you to interact with the magic without using your bare body. In some calls, it'll just bypass the parry and that could kill you. cooldown is 3


Flame bite: I'm assuming this is the beast. ditch the speed, decide whether you want a B-tier heat bite or a c tier heat bite with a c tier Burn status effect. cooldown is 3

No name: You could make a dash with up a few meters before the grab. There will be a strength check and in fairness, you should put that in because the grab won't be an instant success. The whole spin is theatrical, id settle with a german suplex but do you. Cooldown is 3, it's within the rule that if a person sustained an ability those sustains adds on to the cd, you won't have to mention it in that fashion with the +1.


Comet strike: Switch the price, 10 stamina / 5 sustain. ditch the speed, these "strings" sounds like a trick weapon attached to it. If so, this would be a stealth technique and without the stealth classification or some supporting trait, you houldn't use trick weapons in such a manner with warrior based abilities alone.

flame breath: ranges are classified as close, mid, or long. Settle with the C-tier burn status effect alone, or C-tier ability fire damage.

Speed boost: If you want to use your magoi manipulation slot for this...okay. But ditch the speed and lower the cooldown to 2. The way you have it right now, you can move up to a certain meter distance at C-tier fanalis speeds due to the enhancement of magoi manipulation. If that's what you want, then fine, just have to clean up the template.

Hard body: Without body manipulation? Denied. I'd recommend a shield if you want a block your entire body in such a manner.

Gaia's devastation: clean it up, ditch the m/s , change the range. The size of the rocks here matter but in regards to debris, I'm assuming it's just a wave of rocks that resulted in you smashing the ground and ending it towards the target, as if you dragged your fist upward like an uppercut on the ground "which would make more sense btw" , the rubble existing mention is redundant, 10 meter range is fine "with me" , and the c-tier ability damage is fine.



Please make corrections and let us know.

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Last edited by Diligence on 23/01/22, 05:22 pm; edited 28 times in total

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Moon's Orbit: Damage deflected needs to be listed, should be D-tier damage

Veil of the Heavens: How is this blocking? Is it creating a magnetic or static barrier? is the lighting burning up projectiles, need a clearer understanding.

Gaia Devastation: Too broad, is this done with your body, a heavy weapon or object? Should have a focus on how the ability is used, including in requirements to get a better understanding. Range is how far an object flies, an Easier way to say this would be "the impact sounds out shards of rock in a 10m diameter from the impact point in all directions.

Fanalis Roar: Racials automatically go in your vault

Name: Stance 1: Spider Bite: You can dislocate the arm and disable it for two posts and do damage but you cannot paralyze, that is something available upon traits, for assassins and mages. Need to include supplementary in the ability type

Torrent of the Heavens: This is past amount rules and goes past the damage, should only be B-tier damage in total, ability parts work as D-tier: 1 part C-tier: 2 Parts B-tier: 4 parts and A-tier: 8 parts. They can be up to the max number based on rank, each projectile and action are 1 part. This is also a higher rank ability, requirements are the actions to set up abilities as well, you should include more requirements or descriptors. Stunning is also not possible unless you split the tier of the ability as all hybrid abilities do

Stance 2: Meteor Shower- Damage not listed for strikes, each should be D-tier adding up to B-tier in total, weapon is also missing please include that in the ability and requirements

Nameless B-tier abilities: There is no name for this move, clearing out gasses is a defensive ability, actions can produce winds but if you want to be able to blow away gasses, smoke screens, and debris that would be the function of the ability if you wished to do damage you would need to split the damage.



Wrath of Zeus: This seems to be a copy of the beast passive, if two bolts each should only do B-tier damage, range is listed but seems to be the size of the bolts. please explain the range and size so we can better understand how big the bolts are, how far they travel and so forth.

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All abilities: All of your cooldowns and costs are wrong it seems, please double check the systems and make sure your costs are all accurate, D-tier: 10 C-tier: 20: B-tier: 30 and A-tier: 40 splitting in half for sustains. Your beast should be using stamina as well


Name: Stance 1: Broken Orbit: Still says B-tier damage, that would be if its offensive only, I think it would be best to say something like "by striking the upper body with two strikes to the shoulder blades the user dislocates the targets arms dealing C-tier damage to the impact point"

Torrent of the Heavens: No range, need to know how far they are traveling, still says stun despite being offensive, if you want to stun you need to say two do D-tier damage for a total of C-tier and the other two each stun 1 limb for 2 posts

Wrath of Zeus: I'm still not sure the range on this, it seems you're looking to say something similar to "Zeus drops two lightning bolts which split into two more upon impact, the bolts are 7m long and 1m in diameter dropping 80m, each bolt does C-tier damage and explodes outwards into 10m explosion" that is one suggestion

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For the record: All spells involving electricity should have wrath of the heavens as one of the requirements.

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Theos, fanalis roar should be removed from here. We only grade abilities in this regard, not the racial. You said you edited it about twice but it's still there, please remove it.




Comet Strike: Remove the last bit about doing it in the air. It's a given since your requirements don't say you have to be flatfooted to throw it.


Moons orbit: Elaborate requirements. Standing still? Not moving your lower body? Has to be more clear since standing completely still as a warrior requirement is odd. Also, the proper word is parry here since warriors have access to that, so you can add it in the description.


Veil of the heavens: Cost is incorrect, it's not as if stormwing is a magic tool hybrid beast. This isn't even magic. So the cost should be normal, costing 10 stamina. Veil of heavens should be linear in usage, Either it's coating itself or coating an object. It can't do both. In addition to that it's typing is purely supplementary so it shouldn't be dealing damage.


Gaia Devastation: approved



Broken Orbit: You need to decide whether you want 2 strikes that deal damage c-tier ability damage each or one strike that deals c-tier ability damage and immobilizes two limbs around the area that you striked for 2 posts.



Torrent of heavens: Should be no change in price. Once again, I read the data of the omega tier trait, it should be 30 stamina for cost. There is nothing that says your abilities registered will be at half cost. Remove any indication of speed for this ability. since you are using the max sum for the ability, they don't get to stun, only deal damage.



MEteor shower: there are no guarantees, you can't have an ability that dictates the loss of limb as part of its description. "delivers 4 attacks to a target, each strike deals D-tier ability damage" is good enough. You can remove everything else.



Gaia exhale: Make sure that put that the knock back of such things using the gust of wind from your has to be C-tier or lower. Damage is fine if a person gets hit, from how you worded this ability, it'll be offensive/supplementary, not defensive



wrath of zeus: 40 stamina, not really on part with an a tier ability. the lightning bolts shouldn't be changing it's form so frequently. You can increase the size of the lightning bolts, but they should turn around and then explode into an aoe afterwards, not unless the point is "wherever the lightning bolt hits, an aoe of electrical damage spreads" You need to decide on that. Also, B-tier ability damage for each lightning bolt.

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It's the third to last sentence.

This costs half cost the normal ability price.

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" As the storm wing casts abilities it builds up a charge of electricity in its body that can be expelled. For each ability used it builds C-tier damage capping at A-tier."

^ Outside of abilities you get this charge,  you can cap your charge out at A and it'll cost you 25 magoi to set it off  The charge itself has a cost, which is half the cost of abilities.  I think you misunderstood the interpretation, because it could have been written more clear if your abilities as a whole were half off.

It would simply say "This beast is capable of registering abilities that use the creatures natural electricity and manipulation over it, these registered abilities would be at half the normal stamina price. "

Not saying that you  can register, and go into the other ability the storm wing has.

So once again, please change it.




Comet strike: cooldown is 1 post



Moon's orbit: I requested that you should be more clear with your requirement here and you didn't do it.    Cooldown is 1 post



veil of zeus: denied



broken orbit: the second strike deals no damage, but dislocates the shoulder for 2 posts.  Have to be clear on that



Torrent of heavens: how long is the stun damage? Are you firing them all at once or are you firing them in order? How do you differentiate from which ones actually deal damage and which ones don't,  Is there an electrical charge on that specific feather? It's missing details



Meteor shower: approved



Gaia exhale: this is doing too much, it should only be able to deflect projectiles with that  little gust of wind. It's a feat of strength, not magic.



Wrath oF Zeus:  "Thunder and lightning rumble through them with no warning" - isn't the warning sign the sudden change of the cluuds being charged with electricity? Lowkey feels like storm magic but that's not the point.  they are dropping 80 meters from the cloud? Dos that mean the bolt can reach as far as 80 meters?  The bolts already come in a considerable size so they shouldn't be exploding into an aoe afterwards.

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Forgot to remove mention of coating objects for Veil.

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Name: Stance 3: Gaia Exhale: My only issue is it seems to knock players back which is normally an effect, while its fine to have fluff information to allow for such things you need to be clear on if you're wanting to focus to be defense from gas or knocking players back. Personally, I think just drop the 5m as it should be fluff of being able to push back as anyone with strength traits is gonna be able to resist it.

Name: Wrath of Zeus: Range should be medium if I'm correct

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Added to the requirements so you can get somewhat of an understanding of what you should have for more of your stuff, if you're fine that's my 1/2 gonna have other mods correct if there's anymore issue

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Name: Wrath of Zeus
Tier: A
Class: Beast Tamer | Zeus
Type: Offensive
Range: Medium
Requirements/Drawbacks: Wrath of Heavens, Zeus must be able to fly and drop it on a target
Scaling: Hits
Sustain: 0
Cooldown: 4 posts
Cost: 40 stamina
Description: Zeus' heart has been fully charged. Electricity naturally rolls across his entire body. Dark clouds begin to form even if there is no open sky above him. The electricity from his body begins to leak into the clouds. Thunder and lightning rumble through them with no warning a massive bolt of lightning explodes down from the clouds striking his target. Zeus drops two lightning bolts, the bolts are 10 m long and 5m in diameter and reach as far as 30 m, each bolt does B-tier damage and explodes outwards into 10m explosion of AoE electricity.

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2/2 good to go

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