Rewording "Soul Gaze"

Original wrote:Name: Soul Gaze
Tier: D
Cost: N/A
Element: Clairvoyance Magic
Class: Social
Range: 1 Meter
Duration: Instantaneous
Cool-Down: 2 Posts
Description: This spell gives one the ability to peer into the path of fate that is affecting them. This takes the form of a vision, and lasts only for a moment in real time, while the vision itself could take up to three minutes. The visions are never explicit, and show only vague ideas of what the future could hold for the individual, in the form one might expect of an actual dream ie: very representational, using bared related thoughts and images. These are based on how the Individual acted in the past, and how they currently view the world. The user is also included in the spell, and gives an equal vision back to the person they are viewing. Both Participants can only be a maximum of 1 meter away from each other. Both parties must be willing for the effect to work.

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[b]Name:[/b] Soul Gaze
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] N/A
[b]Element:[/b] Clairvoyance Magic
[b]Class:[/b] Social
[b]Range:[/b] 1 Meter
[b]Duration:[/b] Instantaneous
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 Posts
[b]Description:[/b] By peering into the stream of fate, one can analyze a person's true nature.  In the form of a poetic and dreamlike vision, each participant sees a three part vision focusing on first the past events of their youth (How well did you grow up?  Was life tough?  Were you persecuted?), then looking at their current actions (What important actions have you taken?  Who have you made ties with?), before finally looking towards a possible future (What are you capable of?  What are your big plans?).  These visions are all of a fantastic nature, using barely related images to tell the story.  Both the caster and the target are included in the spell.  This spell requires eye contact at a range of no more than 1 meter.  Both parties must be willing for this effect to work.