Sara Mcdonald -Reim Empire

Name: Sara Mcdonald
Tier: D
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Pansexual except to full Fanalis
Age + Birthdate:18 December 7
Nationality: Reim
Race: Fanalis
Specialization: Body Manipulator

Personality:
Her personalty varies based on the race of the people she speaks to if non Fanalis she will be quiet but always watching their actions. Once she gets to know someone she will open up more and become more cheerful around them she will seem like any normal girl. However around full Fanalis she will display a deep racial hate and show little to no respect for them. She considers them a weak and feeble minded species compared to what she believes is her human race. She has a great hatred as she was brainwashed to despise this race and only wishes for their utter destruction from this world. With her parents influence she is violent toward her own race a hatred so deep nothing will likely ever change her mind.

In combat she is a very strategical she will always think before simply leaping in a very different side for her race but she was raised to believe she was human. All her actions will be calculated and calm except when she faces one of her own race against them she acts instinctual and will do things in a much less calculated way. She simply cannot get over her hatred for her own kind. She will often sit in the back during fights using her beasts and commanding them with order numbers this makes it harder for her enemies to calculate what she is doing unless they can decode her numbering system for combat.

Love is something she always dreams to find however it would certainly never be with someone from her race, however a halfing could be possible depending on how she views their minds sit on. If she feels they are more like her race she will hate them but if they are more human in nature she could fall in love with one of them. She would also do things with other races or creatures to her love can be with anyone but a   of her own race. She views sex as just that sex nothing emotional and with no strings attached she feels you do not need to love someone to have physical attraction to them.

Likes:
Nature:She feels a deep connection with nature as she is a beast tamer she feels she can connect to it more than the world of man.
Singing:She has always loved to sing and her voice is considered to be quite amazing however she does not like to do it in front of large crowds as she gets to nervous.

Dislikes:
Fanalis: She absolutely despises her own race with the massive amount of brain washing from her parents she hates them to the very core of her being.
Fire:Due to a incident in her past she hates fire as to her it reminds her of a sad and terrible time in her life.

Phobias:
Fire: She has a deep fear of fire her fear is so bad she will run at the sight of any fire larger than a torch level light. She will run until she cannot see the fire any longer and curl up it takes her several minutes to calm down. If she is unable to run from the source of the fire she will try with all of her might to destroy whoever or whatever is causing the fire this causes her to turn extremely violent and she will likely attack friend or foe alike to destroy it.

Aspirations:
Destroy the Fanalis: Her one true goal is to rid the world of this race forever. She will try to become powerful enough to one day order the mass extinction of this race, this drives her to become strong and seek out power by any means necessary. She has such a deep desire for this goal she would even give up her body and sell herself if it meant someone would order the execution of those of her own race.


Face-Claim: Shana -Shukun no Shana
Weight: 105 lbs
Hair Color: Red
Eye Color: Red
Height: 5'2"
Rukh Alignment: Black
Special Traits: A large burn mark scar down her back.
Appearance:
She has what one would call a petite body she is very flat chested and if brought up she will get mad at the person and yell at them. She is also rather short for her age and race. She has very long red hair, it is quite silky and smooth as she was raised by noble parents. She often will be seen wearing a skirt underneath that however she always wears shorts as she doesn't want perverts to see her panties if she is in a fight. She can also often be seen wearing a ribbon in her hair she changes it out often so the colors vary but she feels this is something her human mother gave her before she died.  She wears knee high socks and seems much younger than her actual age many people mistake her for a young teen when she is out doing various things.


History:
Her life started with loving Fanalis parents she had a quiet life early however this all changed when her village was attacked. The invaders attacked her village and killed many of the parents including her father before taking the children to sell as slaves to other lands. Sara was taken and sold to the family she believes is her true family in the empire of Reim. She was raised by her mother and father to believe she was experimented on to become a human as strong as the Fanalis and to be able to destroy this race as it tainted the world of true perfection. Her parents deeply hated the Fanalis however they took her under their wing hoping to turn her into a weapon to destroy her own kind, they made sure to show her anything violent her race had done. Consistently drilling it into her head that this race means the destruction of their wonderful life and world.

They made sure they would cement this into her mind but setting up a very diabolical plan her parents hated the race so much that they would even die if it would convince her that her own race was terrible. The plan was set into motion as her father held several Fanalis families hostage and ordered them to attack his house, they had very specific orders one would be to kill his wife and the other was to make sure they got his daughter to hate their race forever. They attacked in the middle of the night as Sara would awaken to a nightmare her house was being brutally attacked by several Fanalis as she would rush to find her mother however as she entered the room of her mother what she saw caused her to scream out her mothers body left split wide open as she reached out to Sara. She rushed to her mothers side as she motioned for Sara to get close whispering into her ear please kill this terrible race, this is the things they always do to ruin the world. Before they left however one of the men grabbed Sara by her nightgown before throwing her to the floor grabbing a nearby torch he would set the room on fire. He knew Sara could escape as the mans orders were only to make sure his daughter lived she tried her hardest to save her mother as the room continued to catch on fire trying to drag her to the window but she simply could not do it as the roof collapsed on the two striking her with the burning roof. She tried her hardest to get her out however she eventually realized it was not possible before leaping out of her house. Her back badly burned as she would faint her father would pick her up and make sure she was treated so she was not to die.

After this attack her hatred was now set she despised this race and began to train the hardest she could. She discovered she was very talented on talking to beasts, it was a natural for her as it seemed this was what her natural talent was. She began to train hard as she looked for just the right beast for herself, she finally found it as she began to train hard she had to become someone powerful in the empire she had to find a way to destroy all the Fanalis tainting this land.

Role-Play Sample:
Sara smiled as she was about to met a few of her friends, she had many friends that were nobles like herself that her father had approved for her to hang out with. She was always watched to make sure people did not expose her secret to her when she was young still, her father had to make sure her mind would always remain full of hatred for her own race. As she met with them she smiled looking over at a Fanalis that happened to be selling some goods close by. She glared at the man as she moved to grab a nearby rock before throwing it hard at the mans head smacking him directly in the head. He looked over angrily at her before realizing she was that mans daughter, he would simply look down and say no words fearing for his families life.

"See how pathetic that race is they wont even fight back, they only attack those that are innocent killing their families and terrorizing the world. I will someday make sure all of that filthy race dies, I wont let a single full blooded one live."

She glared at the man as the group would giggle and move on they were all aware she was a Fanalis but were told by their parents to never mention it or something bad could happen to their families.[/b]

-Looks like you accidentally deleted the "Age + Birthdate:" part, though you do have the numbers and month listed there. Just make sure to re-add that.
-Due to the accidental deletion of that, your coding is slightly broken.
-Part of the downside to Fanalis is that they have a feral nature which causes them to get angered easily. While it's fine that she thinks before leaping into battles, please keep in mind that she will still be quick to anger. (I like how you explain how she will be less calm against something she hates (A Fanalis), which does show this stipulation of the race)
-Remove the part with the Rukh being good at helping you tame beasts. Beast Tamers don't use Rukh, nor do they use Magoi. It would be fine to mention that she just had a natural affinity to beast taming.

I edited the mentioned things and ready for it to be checked again

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[b]Name:[/b] Sara Mcdonald
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Gender:[/b] Female
[b]Sexuality:[/b] Pansexual except to full Fanalis
[b]Age + Birthdate:[/b]18 December 7
[b]Nationality:[/b] Reim
[b]Race:[/b] Fanalis
[b]Specialization:[/b] Body Manipulator

[b]Personality:[/b]
Her personalty varies based on the race of the people she speaks to if non Fanalis she will be quiet but always watching their actions. Once she gets to know someone she will open up more and become more cheerful around them she will seem like any normal girl. However around full Fanalis she will display a deep racial hate and show little to no respect for them. She considers them a weak and feeble minded species compared to what she believes is her human race. She has a great hatred as she was brainwashed to despise this race and only wishes for their utter destruction from this world. With her parents influence she is violent toward her own race a hatred so deep nothing will likely ever change her mind.

In combat she is a very strategical she will always think before simply leaping in a very different side for her race but she was raised to believe she was human. All her actions will be calculated and calm except when she faces one of her own race against them she acts instinctual and will do things in a much less calculated way. She simply cannot get over her hatred for her own kind. She will often sit in the back during fights using her beasts and commanding them with order numbers this makes it harder for her enemies to calculate what she is doing unless they can decode her numbering system for combat.

Love is something she always dreams to find however it would certainly never be with someone from her race, however a halfing could be possible depending on how she views their minds sit on. If she feels they are more like her race she will hate them but if they are more human in nature she could fall in love with one of them. She would also do things with other races or creatures to her love can be with anyone but a   of her own race. She views sex as just that sex nothing emotional and with no strings attached she feels you do not need to love someone to have physical attraction to them.

[b]Likes:[/b]
Nature:She feels a deep connection with nature as she is a beast tamer she feels she can connect to it more than the world of man.
Singing:She has always loved to sing and her voice is considered to be quite amazing however she does not like to do it in front of large crowds as she gets to nervous.

[b]Dislikes: [/b]
Fanalis: She absolutely despises her own race with the massive amount of brain washing from her parents she hates them to the very core of her being.
Fire:Due to a incident in her past she hates fire as to her it reminds her of a sad and terrible time in her life.

[b]Phobias:[/b]
Fire: She has a deep fear of fire her fear is so bad she will run at the sight of any fire larger than a torch level light. She will run until she cannot see the fire any longer and curl up it takes her several minutes to calm down. If she is unable to run from the source of the fire she will try with all of her might to destroy whoever or whatever is causing the fire this causes her to turn extremely violent and she will likely attack friend or foe alike to destroy it.

[b]Aspirations:[/b]
Destroy the Fanalis: Her one true goal is to rid the world of this race forever. She will try to become powerful enough to one day order the mass extinction of this race, this drives her to become strong and seek out power by any means necessary. She has such a deep desire for this goal she would even give up her body and sell herself if it meant someone would order the execution of those of her own race.


[b]Face-Claim:[/b] Shana -Shukun no Shana
[b]Weight:[/b] 105 lbs
[b]Hair Color:[/b] Red
[b]Eye Color:[/b] Red
[b]Height:[/b] 5'2"
[b]Rukh Alignment:[/b] Black
[b]Special Traits:[/b] A large burn mark scar down her back.
[b]Appearance:[/b]
She has what one would call a petite body she is very flat chested and if brought up she will get mad at the person and yell at them. She is also rather short for her age and race. She has very long red hair, it is quite silky and smooth as she was raised by noble parents. She often will be seen wearing a skirt underneath that however she always wears shorts as she doesn't want perverts to see her panties if she is in a fight. She can also often be seen wearing a ribbon in her hair she changes it out often so the colors vary but she feels this is something her human mother gave her before she died.  She wears knee high socks and seems much younger than her actual age many people mistake her for a young teen when she is out doing various things.


[b]History:[/b]
Her life started with loving Fanalis parents she had a quiet life early however this all changed when her village was attacked. The invaders attacked her village and killed many of the parents including her father before taking the children to sell as slaves to other lands. Sara was taken and sold to the family she believes is her true family in the empire of Reim. She was raised by her mother and father to believe she was experimented on to become a human as strong as the Fanalis and to be able to destroy this race as it tainted the world of true perfection. Her parents deeply hated the Fanalis however they took her under their wing hoping to turn her into a weapon to destroy her own kind, they made sure to show her anything violent her race had done. Consistently drilling it into her head that this race means the destruction of their wonderful life and world.

They made sure they would cement this into her mind but setting up a very diabolical plan her parents hated the race so much that they would even die if it would convince her that her own race was terrible. The plan was set into motion as her father held several Fanalis families hostage and ordered them to attack his house, they had very specific orders one would be to kill his wife and the other was to make sure they got his daughter to hate their race forever. They attacked in the middle of the night as Sara would awaken to a nightmare her house was being brutally attacked by several Fanalis as she would rush to find her mother however as she entered the room of her mother what she saw caused her to scream out her mothers body left split wide open as she reached out to Sara. She rushed to her mothers side as she motioned for Sara to get close whispering into her ear please kill this terrible race, this is the things they always do to ruin the world. Before they left however one of the men grabbed Sara by her nightgown before throwing her to the floor grabbing a nearby torch he would set the room on fire. He knew Sara could escape as the mans orders were only to make sure his daughter lived she tried her hardest to save her mother as the room continued to catch on fire trying to drag her to the window but she simply could not do it as the roof collapsed on the two striking her with the burning roof. She tried her hardest to get her out however she eventually realized it was not possible before leaping out of her house. Her back badly burned as she would faint her father would pick her up and make sure she was treated so she was not to die.

After this attack her hatred was now set she despised this race and began to train the hardest she could. She discovered she was very talented on talking to beasts, it was a natural for her as it seemed this was what her natural talent was. She began to train hard as she looked for just the right beast for herself, she finally found it as she began to train hard she had to become someone powerful in the empire she had to find a way to destroy all the Fanalis tainting this land.

[b]Role-Play Sample:[/b]
Sara smiled as she was about to met a few of her friends, she had many friends that were nobles like herself that her father had approved for her to hang out with. She was always watched to make sure people did not expose her secret to her when she was young still, her father had to make sure her mind would always remain full of hatred for her own race. As she met with them she smiled looking over at a Fanalis that happened to be selling some goods close by. She glared at the man as she moved to grab a nearby rock before throwing it hard at the mans head smacking him directly in the head. He looked over angrily at her before realizing she was that mans daughter, he would simply look down and say no words fearing for his families life.

[color=#339966]"See how pathetic that race is they wont even fight back, they only attack those that are innocent killing their families and terrorizing the world. I will someday make sure all of that filthy race dies, I wont let a single full blooded one live."[/color]

She glared at the man as the group would giggle and move on they were all aware she was a Fanalis but were told by their parents to never mention it or something bad could happen to their families.[/b]