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1|Queen Emma Gero's Pet| Empty |Queen Emma Gero's Pet| 06/06/23, 02:11 pm

Gero Gu

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|Queen Emma Gero's Pet| Queen_10
Name: Emma, Pill
Tier: C
Type:Normal
Species: The Calamity Ant {Insect Queen}
Appearance: Emma's apart of the special bread known from ancient times as The Calamity Ant. Due to her unique story her size isn't normal of that of normal ant. Emma's exoskeleton is a chitinous white
elegant armor, and pale lavender eyes.Emma's appropriate size is 1.7 meters long, with the traditional six insectoid limbs, three on each side of her body. On top of her head is her  two antenna, which is used to talk with her kind and her tamer.

Due to Emma being a Calamity Ant Queen she have the natural ability to birth an ant colony. These ants are separate into three different castes The Calamity Ant Workers, The Calamity Ant Knight, and The Calamity Ant Soldiers Ants. At this time only Emma can only birth according to her respected class and conditions being met.

Beast Traits:

Trait Info:



Last edited by Gero Gu on 15/06/23, 06:24 pm; edited 6 times in total

2|Queen Emma Gero's Pet| Empty Re: |Queen Emma Gero's Pet| 07/06/23, 08:02 am

Solomon's Proxy

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-Type:
The beast you have presented is not a swarm type as it is a single beast. While you have a trait that would pair with/create a swarm, this would be a normal type beast and you must register the swarm itself as a separate beast that you would then replenish the numbers of via the trait.

-Pheromones:
Anything within 1.6 km (1 mi) radius the ant  can leaves a distinct trail behind until the end of the topic.
You won't be approved at 1mi effectiveness for anything on the forum. The absolute largest range I think anyone has ever gotten was 500m and that was on an Extreme Magic which is basically an Omega tier attack. But more importantly, please reword this as it isn't really clear. It seems to suggest all things leave trails for the ant to follow but that doesn't make sense.

-Formic Acid:
This is written as though it were an ability. You want to make this trait one that enables you to create abilities based on formic acid for the best return on your TP investment. It is really a waste of a trait points otherwise.

-Dig:
Again, you've written this like an ability. Write the trait as a general enabler of the ability to burrow. Ignore things like range and the specifics that would be required for abilities and instead focus on how the trait expands your movement options.

-Reproduce:
Until you make a swarm beast registered for the ants you produce, I can't approve the amounts as even 1500 is unlikely to pass unless your ants are tiny as normal irl ants.

But anything below the tier of this trait must be removed. You can't get A-tier effects from a C-tier trait. You also may not use wordcount to variably scale the amount produced.

The trait should produce a flat amount and that amount should be less than the swarm you are trying to replenish as you should not be able to use the trait to spawn an entire whole new swarm. No using word counts or huang to alter or inflate numbers.

3|Queen Emma Gero's Pet| Empty Re: |Queen Emma Gero's Pet| 07/06/23, 11:44 am

Gero Gu

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Solomon's Proxy wrote:-Type:
The beast you have presented is not a swarm type as it is a single beast. While you have a trait that would pair with/create a swarm, this would be a normal type beast and you must register the swarm itself as a separate beast that you would then replenish the numbers of via the trait.

-Pheromones:
Anything within 1.6 km (1 mi) radius the ant  can leaves a distinct trail behind until the end of the topic.
You won't be approved at 1mi effectiveness for anything on the forum. The absolute largest range I think anyone has ever gotten was 500m and that was on an Extreme Magic which is basically an Omega tier attack. But more importantly, please reword this as it isn't really clear. It seems to suggest all things leave trails for the ant to follow but that doesn't make sense.

-Formic Acid:
This is written as though it were an ability. You want to make this trait one that enables you to create abilities based on formic acid for the best return on your TP investment. It is really a waste of a trait points otherwise.

-Dig:
Again, you've written this like an ability. Write the trait as a general enabler of the ability to burrow. Ignore things like range and the specifics that would be required for abilities and instead focus on how the trait expands your movement options.

-Reproduce:
Until you make a swarm beast registered for the ants you produce, I can't approve the amounts as even 1500 is unlikely to pass unless your ants are tiny as normal irl ants.

But anything below the tier of this trait must be removed. You can't get A-tier effects from a C-tier trait. You also may not use wordcount to variably scale the amount produced.

The trait should produce a flat amount and that amount should be less than the swarm you are trying to replenish as you should not be able to use the trait to spawn an entire whole new swarm. No using word counts or huang to alter or inflate numbers.

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edits made.

4|Queen Emma Gero's Pet| Empty Re: |Queen Emma Gero's Pet| 11/06/23, 06:15 am

Zion

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1/2 Approved with the following edits:

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[center][img]https://i.servimg.com/u/f66/19/09/70/53/queen_10.png[/img]
[b]Name:[/b] Emma, Pill
[b]Tier:[/b] C
[b]Type:[/b]Normal
[b]Species:[/b] The Calamity Ant {Insect Queen}
[b]Appearance:[/b] Emma's apart of the special bread known from ancient times as The Calamity Ant. Due to her unique story her size isn't normal of that of normal ant. Emma's exoskeleton is a chitinous white
elegant armor, and pale lavender eyes.Emma's appropriate size is 1.7 meters long, with the traditional six insectoid limbs, three on each side of her body. On top of her head is her  two antenna, which is used to talk with her kind and her tamer.

Due to Emma being a Calamity Ant Queen she have the natural ability to birth an ant colony. These ants are separate into three different castes The Calamity Ant Workers, The Calamity Ant Knight, and The Calamity Ant Soldiers Ants. At this time only Emma can only birth according to her respected class and conditions being met.

[b]Beast Traits:[/b]

[spoiler="Trait Info"]
[b]Trait Name:[/b] Colony Growth
[b]Trait Tier:[/b]|D - Tier-|
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b]|Calamity Ant Queen|
[b]Trait Description:[/b] The queen relies are her many brood to do most of the work of the colony. From labor to defense, her children tend to her and while she continues to grow her brood.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Allows D-tier swarms be registered for approval as offspring of the queen. A swarm takes time to grow and so one is unable to be produced in the middle of battle. But by dedicating a thread towards keeping the queen fed and linking it to the Swarm registration, a swarm will gain the benefit of Devour.

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Devour
[b]Trait Tier:[/b]|C - Tier-|
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b]|Calamity Ant Queen|
[b]Trait Description:[/b] An extremely adaptive species, the Calamity Ant queen is capable of stripping DNA from its prey and after digestion, may incorporate the genetic information into the next generation.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Letting the queen devour an enemy that possess a non-racial trait and pass on a C-tier version of it. To the next egg produced the following turn OR the next swarm registered, will grant the resulting Worker/ Swarm the trait if it matures to adulthood. If the target food has no traits one may be derived from its primary biological method of attack.

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Brood
[b]Trait Tier:[/b]|C - Tier-|
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b]|Calamity Ant Queen|
[b]Trait Description:[/b] The Calamity Ant Queen is constantly producing new workers and will prioritize finding the ideal place to give birth. As long as a good environment can be found, she will continue to produce brood.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Brood allow the queen to continuously produce new workers once per post. Restrictions on location(needs to be in a moist underground chamber) and the effort of labor forces her to have slow movement. The eggs are vulnerable to even D-tier basic attacks, but after a 3 posts they hatch into a worker ant that acts as an individual ant from the worker/knight swarms that can survive C-tier damage.[/spoiler][/center]

5|Queen Emma Gero's Pet| Empty Re: |Queen Emma Gero's Pet| 11/06/23, 07:22 am

Gero Gu

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ready for the 2/2 thx solomon

6|Queen Emma Gero's Pet| Empty Re: |Queen Emma Gero's Pet| 15/06/23, 06:16 pm

Lagi

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devour isnt for free, make sure that it's known that you would be using the particular trait points for that swarm beast when it comes to the registry for those traits. Put that edit in. if you run out of points for the creature, you cant register anything new without dropping something else you registered previously. that's all.

7|Queen Emma Gero's Pet| Empty Re: |Queen Emma Gero's Pet| 15/06/23, 06:24 pm

Gero Gu

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Done

8|Queen Emma Gero's Pet| Empty Re: |Queen Emma Gero's Pet| 16/06/23, 08:19 am

Lagi

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Alright you put it word for word but w.e it's fine then 2/2

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