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Shabdiz, A Horse tier Beast)

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Gilles

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Shabdiz, A Horse  tier Beast) Downlo17
Name: Shabdiz
Tier: D
Type: Normal
Species: just a horse of course
Appearance: Shabdiz is a 2 meter high and 3 meters long and weighs 590 kilograms. He has a pale, sickly color of gray with a white mane of hair. He is thinner than most horses and you can see ribs showing. Most would think that this horse is near death but it moves and acts just like any other horse despite its sickly demeanor.
Beast Traits:

Trait Name:Horse Power
Trait Tier:d
Trait Requirement:Be a horse with legs
Trait Description:It has the speed and jumping power of a horse. This means that it can move as fast as a horse and jump as high as one.
Trait Effect:Shabdiz is capable of moving at d tier speeds and can jump easily over fences.

Trait Name: Mr Ed's voice
Trait Tier:D
Trait Requirement:Shabdiz Horse
Trait Description:This horse has a strange vocal system that is similar to parrots. It can mimic up to 5 short sentences or sounds a thread Just like a parrot but can not actually talk like people do however just mimmic what it hears also doesnt understand the meaning of what it mimics



Last edited by Gilles on 23/04/21, 02:51 am; edited 4 times in total

Merrze

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Horse Power should say d-tier movement speeds, the other traits are fine but you could register them as traits to make abilties using similar effects. If not you don't have to, but at higher levels you could have effects and abilties.

Area should say limb or that should be added to clarify what an area is on a target.

Lagi

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The stench of death: For stench of death, you have two choices as a D-tier with the content that I see here. You can either make it a gateway (using the D-tier trait to have the option to build beast tamer techniques based on the decaying odor.) Or two, you can have a proc attack that won't be free (you would have to pay some stamina to activate it). As a c tier, you can leave it like it is after adding a price to using the stench for the nausea status effect on command, but not both of them as a D-tier.

Pestilence bite- it's doing too many things as a D-tier, with the lower bit of the trait not matching with the fact that it's a diseased animal. I don't see how a disease could give it a boost, what boost? How is it actually possible? Pestilence bite in flavor gives a disease, but just so you know, It only affects one limb per bite, it has no cost linked to it, and the status effect in simple terms is technically immobilization. This trait has to stick with the theme of the animal, and there has to be a cost with the actions related to using certain abilities that are considered offensive in nature.

Julius Plageuis

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1/2

Merrze

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2/2 Approved, 10k Huang, to purchase the horse

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[b]Name:[/b] Shabdiz
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Type:[/b] Normal
[b]Species:[/b] just a horse of course
[b]Appearance:[/b] Shabdiz is a 2 meter high and 3 meters long and weighs 590 kilograms. He has a pale, sickly color of gray with a white mane of hair. He is thinner than most horses and you can see ribs showing. Most would think that this horse is near death but it moves and acts just like any other horse despite its sickly demeanor.
[b]Beast Traits:[/b]

[b]Trait Name:[/b]Horse Power
[b]Trait Tier:[/b]d
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b]Be a horse with legs
[b]Trait Description:[/b]It has the speed and jumping power of a horse. This means that it can move as fast as a horse and jump as high as one.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b]Shabdiz is capable of moving at d tier speeds and can jump easily over fences.

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Mr Ed's voice
[b]Trait Tier:[/b]D
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b]Shabdiz Horse
[b]Trait Description:[/b]This horse has a strange vocal system that is similar to parrots. It can mimic up to 5 short sentences or sounds a thread Just like a parrot but can not actually talk like people do however just mimmic what it hears also doesnt understand the meaning of what it mimics

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