Karada Tatakai [Move Set]

Tier: B-Tier
Class: Body Manipulator
Type: Supplementary
Range: Long
Requirements/Drawbacks: User must inhale, hold it, and then exhale loudly.
Scaling: Duration
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 3 Posts
Cost: 30 to use and 15 to sustain
Description:

The user is capable of blowing air from his mouth at far distances. When done with intangible and feather-light targets or Abilities, it can cause the targets or abilities to travel up to 30m away from the user. The user must inhale, hold it, then exhale loudly when blowing out the air. It does not stack with the ranges of the target or ability but simply makes it travel 30m away from the user as fast at whatever tier the target or ability is in damage. This lasts for a total of 3 posts. Kasai Tori lasts for a total of 3 posts. It travels 30m far and is 5m wide and tall in wind force.

Tier: B-Tier
Class: Warrior
Type: Offensive
Range: Close
Requirements/Drawbacks: The user raises their sword quickly in the air before performing the attack.
Scaling: Hits
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 3
Cost: 30 to use and 15 to sustain
Description:

The user slashes at their opponent a total of 4 times, one after another, in a diagonal to a vertical pattern. Each slash performed does D-Tier damage, though, it scales depending if the weapon used is a tier higher than D-Tier.

Suimin Gasu Nagaidesu

This needs dimensions for the gas. You can't put people to sleep but maybe minor damage or disorientation.

Kasai Tori

This needs dimensions for the gas. You could just say it's highly flammable, and that if it ignites, the entire cloud becomes ignited.

Overall, all of these abilities need to have a little bit more for their requirements as well.

Edited.

Kasai tori: For this move since you're letting out a massive breath of oxygenated air your requirement should be a bit more. You would need the breathing action, to hold and produce that much air then let it out. It should require you to do an intesne breathing action. Describe how youre doing it to make it more convincing.

[B]Tori Mure[b] Need to bold requirements and drawbacks, bottom text about weapon damage through abilties is a given No need ro include that part.

Edited again.

For the first one, it would be easier to say the oxygenated cloud turns into a fireball or the entire object turns to fire capable of doing damage to its tier if it strikes anyone. At the end of the day, it wouldn't be just extending your attacks, it would be igniting an ability to get an increased fire effect. It's fine it's just don't think you could blow on some A-tier ability and expect the oxygen cloud to bump up to A-tier.

You have my sincerest apologies, can you maybe help me out here with what I want to do here?   I am not trying to make a fire ball. Simply, Kasai Tori is an Ability used to scale Range for fire and that is all I want it to do, how should I achieve this?

I get what you're trying to do here, if you want to just extend attacks I would just do a huge gust of wind or breath to blow it or extend it. But what you're doing is using oxygenated air which would ignite. So you could make a move that blows things away, and when in contact with fire it bursts into a flame cloud or such that does damage. Personally I think the latter would help you more in the long run but it depends your intentions.

Edited. If Kasai Tori is not approvable yet, I am dropping it for now.

Tori Mure is approved, we can discuss and fix the other one when you have time. I get what you're going for and that you just want a range extension but in my opinion you could utilize it more as supplementary that can turn into an offensive. If you just wanted to make an extension ability just say you create a strong oxygenated cloud of wind that can push or extend the range of less physical things like fire and gas a certain distance instead of saying the cloud sets on fire and extends the range.

As I just said in my previous post, I edited to fix Kasai Tori but have not gotten a reply from you yet on its new description. Basically, I edited Kasai Tori to do what you just said above on making it a gust of wind instead of a gas.

Anyway, I am paying for Tori Mure here: https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t2277p325-ability-vouchers#55304

Both approved for training, voucher is also approved

Payed for Kasai Tori here: https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t2277p325-ability-vouchers?nid=85#55341

Approved

Here's Code for both

Code:

[center][b]Kasai Tori[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] B-Tier
[b]Class:[/b] Body Manipulator
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Long
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] User must inhale, hold it, and then exhale loudly.
[b]Scaling:[/b] Duration
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 3 Posts
[b]Cost:[/b] 30 to use and 15 to sustain
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
The user is capable of blowing air from his mouth at far distances. When done with intangible and feather-light targets or Abilities, it can cause the targets or abilities to travel up to 30m away from the user. The user must inhale, hold it, then exhale loudly when blowing out the air. It does not stack with the ranges of the target or ability but simply makes it travel 30m away from the user as fast at whatever tier the target or ability is in damage. This lasts for a total of 3 posts. Kasai Tori lasts for a total of 3 posts. It travels 30m far and is 5m wide and tall in wind force.[/list]

[center][b]Tori Mure[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] B-Tier
[b]Class:[/b] Warrior
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] The user raises their sword quickly in the air before performing the attack.
[b]Scaling:[/b] Hits
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 3
[b]Cost:[/b] 30 to use and 15 to sustain
[b]Description:[/b]

The user slashes at their opponent a total of 4 times, one after another, in a diagonal to a vertical pattern. Each slash performed does D-Tier damage, though, it scales depending if the weapon used is a tier higher than D-Tier.