Lagi's Tamer Abilities [V3]

Name: Shimmering Storm
Tier: B
Cost: Activation/30 Stamina- 15 Stamina afterwards
Beast Type: Archer
Range: 30 Meters
Duration: 5 Post
Cool-Down: 5 Posts
Description: Zygus flaps his wings intensively to create a massive tornado that spreads out about 30 meters from where the technique is launched. The actual size of the tornado is 15 meters in scale.  Within the contents of the tornado, there are metallic shimmer shards that  9 meters in length and 4 meters in width. The tornado can pull in those with c rank strength or lower to none within that meter range, where they will be sucked in and take damage periodically. The wind moves at the speed of 25/m's, and those sucked in would be spinning around at 25 m/s. Cuts tear straight through muscle and are able to nick the bone, each post that they're inside the tornado. Zygus is at the epicenter of the tornado, those riding on his back will be free from harm. Those who somehow make it to the eye of the storm is also free from harm.  If Zygus is dealt C-Tier damage the tornado stops no matter what.  Contact with the blades leaves metallic particles that are hardly noticeable and embedded in the skin, hair, or clothing if possible for the rest of the thread.   The eye of the storm is 5 meters in radius.



Name: Magnetic Push
Tier: B
Cost: 30 Stamina/ 15 Stamina
Beast Type: Archer
Range: 30 Meters
Duration: 3 Post
Cool-Down: 5 Posts
Description: Zygus sends out a magnetic pulse at a targeted area that repels all forms of metal that's B rank or lower.  In addition, for whatever metal source that was magnetized with this ability can't come within 30 meters of Zygus  because  of the opposite magnetic pulse for the duration of the ability.  The largest scale of metals that can be moved with this ability is 15 meters max. When emitting this pulse, all forms  of metal that's affected and magnetized is sent  flying at the speed of 20 m/s, the damage to the opponent varies between blunt and cutting depending on the material, but is B-tier in severity.

Shimmering Storm: You do get the additional speed as you are an archer type. However there are a couple issues with this ability.

Scale & Range - The tordado's size should be lowered to fit the proper scale for B-tier. The range of 30m would be how far that tordado could move after being cast

Suction Strength - The strength of the ability should be dropped to C tier.

Multi Hits - You can't deal full damage 15 times in a single post. You would need to split all the C-tier damage over those 15 hits.

Eye of the Storm - If there is a save spot in the center of the tornado then it should apply to anyone in the eye of the storm. Not just to those riding on your beast's back.

Magnetic Push: This needs a sustained cost. Also please not that the largest scale of metal things you could move to be up to 15m in size.

bump

Shimmering Storm: You still mention doing full C tier damage despite splitting the damage into 3 hits. If you are going to have multiple hits per turn then damage needs to be split up accordingly.

Fixed it

Approved for training.

https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t658-lagi-el-nagi-black-ghospel-s-goop-training#2698
Trained

Also, edited the shimmering storm after talking it over with jael. This is what he had to say about the move.

Anywho, I can see where Yak thought of the sum thing from, however PERSONALLY I would count the tornado as a single entity which deals B-Tier damage for however long its active. I mean your paying stamina for an extended period of time, so while you deal passive damage you're still losing a ton of strength yourself.

Just state that if Zygus is dealt C-Tier damage the tornado stops no matter what, because it is fairly powerful imo.

So ya, everything should be well in order. The move has two clauses of being within the eye of the storm and hitting Zygus with a C rank. On Top of the fact that you can practically kill my bird with that C rank move, so three... with the third really screwing me over.

An item can be destroyed by an attack equal to it's tier, two below it's tier, four below that, and so on and so forth. Eg. A B-Tier Beast can be killed by 1 B-Tier attack, 2 C-Tiers, and 4 D-Tiers. "

So ya

Post back when training is complete.

https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t658-lagi-el-nagi-black-ghospel-s-goop-training#2698

Trained

Approved & Moved

Moved from the approved section because Magnetic Push would not be able to work on people via the iron in their blood.

Quick research reveals the following:

The iron in blood is in the form of individual iron atoms complexed to heamagoblin. Magnetism (strictly speaking ferro or ferrimagnetism) is a bulk event, requiring lots of irons atom very close together "talking" to each other. The iron in blood is too far apart.

edited

Shimmering Storm
-The eye is 5m what? In diameter? Radius?

Magnetic Push
-You're gonna have to choose between firing your own metal projectiles. Or firing a wave of magnetism that affects objects. You can't do both in one ability. What I suggested to you in the chat was mentioning damage dealt upon impact of any metal objects the pulse sends flying.
-Remove the line about "Affected individuals" being unable to approach during the ability. The individuals aren't being affected. Only any metal objects on their person. It's a given that they would be unable to approach and would get sent flying as well if they don't let go of said metal objects.

Fixed, headache

Made some edits for you. Look over them and tell me if you approve through pms:

Name: Magnetic Push
Tier: B
Cost: 30 Stamina/ 15 Stamina
Beast Type: Archer
Range: 30 Meters
Duration: 3 Post
Cool-Down: 5 Posts
Description: Zygus sends out a magnetic pulse at a targeted area that repels all forms of metal that's B rank or lower.  In addition, for whatever metal source that was magnetized with this ability can't come within 30 meters of Zygus  because  of the opposite magnetic pulse for the duration of the ability.  The largest scale of metals that can be moved with this ability is 15 meters max. When emitting this pulse, all forms  of metal that's affected and magnetized is sent  flying at the speed of 20 m/s, the damage to the opponent varies between blunt and cutting depending on the material, but is B-tier in severity.

If so, consider these approved once more. If not, pm me and I'll pull this from the approved section once more.

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Name: Shimmering Storm
Tier: B
Cost: Activation/30 Stamina- 15 Stamina afterwards
Beast Type: Archer
Range: 30 Meters
Duration: 5 Post
Cool-Down: 5 Posts
Description: Zygus flaps his wings intensively to create a massive tornado that spreads out about 30 meters from where the technique is launched. The actual size of the tornado is 15 meters in scale.  Within the contents of the tornado, there are metallic shimmer shards that  9 meters in length and 4 meters in width. The tornado can pull in those with c rank strength or lower to none within that meter range, where they will be sucked in and take damage periodically. The wind moves at the speed of 25/m's, and those sucked in would be spinning around at 25 m/s. Cuts tear straight through muscle and are able to nick the bone, each post that they're inside the tornado. Zygus is at the epicenter of the tornado, those riding on his back will be free from harm. Those who somehow make it to the eye of the storm is also free from harm.  If Zygus is dealt C-Tier damage the tornado stops no matter what.  Contact with the blades leaves metallic particles that are hardly noticeable and embedded in the skin, hair, or clothing if possible for the rest of the thread.   The eye of the storm is 5 meters in radius.



Name: Magnetic Push
Tier: B
Cost: 30 Stamina/ 15 Stamina
Beast Type: Archer
Range: 30 Meters
Duration: 3 Post
Cool-Down: 5 Posts
Description: Zygus sends out a magnetic pulse at a targeted area that repels all forms of metal that's B rank or lower.  In addition, for whatever metal source that was magnetized with this ability can't come within 30 meters of Zygus  because  of the opposite magnetic pulse for the duration of the ability.  The largest scale of metals that can be moved with this ability is 15 meters max. When emitting this pulse, all forms  of metal that's affected and magnetized is sent  flying at the speed of 20 m/s, the damage to the opponent varies between blunt and cutting depending on the material, but is B-tier in severity.