Bianca [5pelsl]

Name:Double Barrage
Tier: C
Cost: 20
Weapon Type:Bow
Class Offensive
Range: 30 meters
Duration: Instant
Cool-Down: 3 post
Description:Bianca fires 10 arrows in quick succession, all arrows traveling at 20m/s to inflict a total of C-tier damage to an opponent within 30 meters.
Note: Unless all 10 hit only D damage is Dealt

Name: Explosive shot
Tier: D
Cost: 10
Weapon Type: Bow
Class Offensive
Range: 20meters
Duration: Instant
Cool-Down: 2 posts
Description:Bianca shoots an arrow with a Exsplosive arrowhead at 15 m/s to a point within 20 meters of herself that, on impact, will unleash a small explosion 5 meters across, Burning anyone within the area for D rank damage..

Name: Barrage Relay
Tier: D
Cost: 10 + 5 per post
Weapon Type: Bow
Class Offensive
Range: 20meters
Duration: Sustain
Cool-Down: 2 posts or Sustain + 1
Description:Bianca fires 5 arrows in quick succession at 15m/s to inflict a total of D-tier damage to an opponent within 20 meters. This ability may be sustained to fire off another Barrage Relay again.

Name: Smoking Volly
Tier: D
Cost:10
Weapon Type: Bow
ClassSupplyment
Range: 20meters
Duration: Instant
Cool-Down: 2 post
Description:Bianca fires 5 arrows in quick succession, all arrows traveling at 15m/s to different points within 20 meters of herself that, on impact, eacg arrow will unleash a cloud of smoke 5 meters across, obscuring the vision of anyone in the cloud of smoke for 2 posts.

Double Barrage: Please note that if less than all ten hit, D-tier damage is dealt.

Poison Shot: Only poison mages or stealth users may have poison abilities.

Explosive shot: Please remove the "anyone hit will be knocked down" as this would be a supplementary effect and this is a D-tier spell, meaning it can only be offensive or supplementary, not both.

Barrage Relay: Cool-down would be "2 posts or Sustain+1". Consider rewording the description as follows:

:Bianca fires 5 arrows in quick succession at 15m/s to inflict a total of D-tier damage to an opponent within 20 meters. This ability may be sustained to fire off another Barrage Relay again.

Done all editeds
1. Fixed
2. Removed Completely
3. Fixed
4. Fixed.

Thanks for being ninja fast staff

Approved for training~

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[b]Name:[/b]Double Barrage
[b]Tier:[/b] C
[b]Cost:[/b] 20
[b]Weapon Type:[/b]Bow
[b]Class[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] 30 meters
[b]Duration:[/b] Instant
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 3 post
[b]Description:[/b]Bianca fires 10 arrows in quick succession, all arrows traveling at 20m/s to inflict a total of C-tier damage to an opponent within 30 meters. If less than 10 hit only D damage is dealt.

[b]Name:[/b] Explosive shot
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10
[b]Weapon Type:[/b] Bow
[b]Class[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] 20meters
[b]Duration:[/b] Instant
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts
[b]Description:[/b]Bianca shoots an arrow with a Exsplosive arrowhead at 15 m/s to a point within 20 meters of herself that, on impact, will unleash a small explosion 5 meters across, burning anyone within the area for D rank damage.

[b]Name:[/b] Barrage Relay
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 + 5 per post
[b]Weapon Type:[/b] Bow
[b]Class[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] 20meters
[b]Duration:[/b] Sustain
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts or Sustain + 1
[b]Description:[/b]Bianca fires 5 arrows in quick succession at 15m/s to inflict a total of D-tier damage to an opponent within 20 meters. This ability may be sustained to fire off another Barrage Relay.

[b]Name:[/b] Smoking Volly
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b]10
[b]Weapon Type:[/b] Bow
[b]Class[/b]Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] 20meters
[b]Duration:[/b] Instant
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 post
[b]Description:[/b]Bianca fires 5 arrows in quick succession, all arrows traveling at 15m/s to different points within 20 meters of herself that, on impact, eacg arrow will unleash a cloud of smoke 5 meters across, obscuring the vision of anyone in the cloud of smoke for 2 posts.

Trained https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t3367-bianca-training#16831

Double Barrage approved.

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[b]Name:[/b]Double Barrage
[b]Tier:[/b] C
[b]Cost:[/b] 20
[b]Weapon Type:[/b]Bow
[b]Class[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] 30 meters
[b]Duration:[/b] Instant
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 3 post
[b]Description:[/b]Bianca fires 10 arrows in quick succession, all arrows traveling at 20m/s to inflict a total of C-tier damage to an opponent within 30 meters. If less than 10 hit only D damage is dealt.

Your other abilities are not yet approved for the following reason:

Solomon's Proxy wrote:
Wordcounts cannot merge with other wordcounts. This means that you must have a distinction in where the word count for the ability starts and ends. The most popular method used is dedicating the post to the ability. Another method is using the 'hr' code:

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[hr]

This splits a post into multiple parts. Any ability trained in a post must be used in that post, and should be in bold lettering so that those who are grading it can see when and where the ability was used.

https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t2486-ability-guidelines-important#11809

i Absolutely hate this, with a passion, and it really makes training here a massive pain, and from now on, i am not going care what i write and in off chance i actually get into what i am writing. Not being able to just flow from one, training to the next, is not a positive environment for Creative Writing. For missons this was fine, but for training its not logical, Some moves might be aimed to worked together.. yet you can't train them together.

Anyway thats how i feel, and fixed.

Questions and Suggestions/feedback for improvements can go here:
https://magiworld.forumotion.com/f4-questions-and-suggestions

See what other people think as well, if you would like to provide feedback. I never had an issue with my flow in the 50+ abilities I've trained, so I'm interested in seeing where we can improve based on feedback from the forum members.

The following abilities are approved:

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[b]Name:[/b] Explosive shot
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10
[b]Weapon Type:[/b] Bow
[b]Class[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] 20meters
[b]Duration:[/b] Instant
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts
[b]Description:[/b]Bianca shoots an arrow with a Explosive arrowhead at 15 m/s to a point within 20 meters of herself that, on impact, will unleash a small explosion 5 meters across, burning anyone within the area for D rank damage.

[b]Name:[/b] Barrage Relay
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 + 5 per post
[b]Weapon Type:[/b] Bow
[b]Class[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] 20meters
[b]Duration:[/b] Sustain
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts or Sustain + 1
[b]Description:[/b]Bianca fires 5 arrows in quick succession at 15m/s to inflict a total of D-tier damage to an opponent within 20 meters. This ability may be sustained to fire off another Barrage Relay.

[b]Name:[/b] Smoking Volly
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b]10
[b]Weapon Type:[/b] Bow
[b]Class[/b]Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] 20meters
[b]Duration:[/b] Instant
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 post
[b]Description:[/b]Bianca fires 5 arrows in quick succession, all arrows traveling at 15m/s to different points within 20 meters of herself that, on impact, eacg arrow will unleash a cloud of smoke 5 meters across, obscuring the vision of anyone in the cloud of smoke for 2 posts.