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1Koinu  Empty Koinu 01/08/20, 11:09 pm

Higanbana

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Name: Koinu
Tier: D
Type: Normal
Species: Inugami
Appearance: A floating, black dog head with transparent body, however instead of having a normal dog body, inugami type of beast's torso is as long as 3 meters. He has a red eyes and there is this red colored symbol on the head.

Beast Traits:
Trait Name: Manifested Paranoia
Trait Tier: D
Trait Requirement: Need to be this specific kind of beast
Trait Description:
Trait Effect: As a cursed being, Inugami type of beast has a unique effect on their saliva that would cause paranoia, every attacks delivered by using Koinu's sharp teeth, would inject a D-tier paranoia effect applied to them for 1 post.

Trait Name: Heightened Sense
Trait Tier: D
Trait Requirement: Need to be this specific kind of beast
Trait Description: Being a canine, Koinu has a heightened senses, he would be able to smell something up to 20km away. He will be able to hear sounds in much greater ranges,
Trait Effect: Able to smell and hear something up to 20km away, making Koinu as a reliable tracker/hunter.

Trait Name: Flight
Trait Tier: D
Trait Requirement: Need to be this specific kind of beast
Trait Description: The lightweight Koinu has a large, secondary bladder that can be filled with Helium from the atmosphere, allowing it to float in the air at any height. In combination, Koinu can use its tail as a rudder and propeller to control its flight.
Trait Effect: Can travel up to D-tier Fanalis speed



Last edited by Higanbana on 16/08/20, 12:38 pm; edited 3 times in total

2Koinu  Empty Re: Koinu 03/08/20, 05:28 pm

Diana Corvus

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Manifested Nightmare

Having it described as a 'nightmare' effect makes it seem more magic-like than it should. So I'll have to ask you to change that. I would suggest just changing it to either a paranoia or disorientation effect since that is what you seem to be going for.

I ask that you choose either paranoia or disorientation for at least this D tier trait because it can't be split into two effects at this tier. Once you upgrade the beast, you can feel free to add the other effect.

In addition to this, please specify, to the best of your ability, how this beast is inducing these effects. Such as, a poison in it's teeth or a disease it carries. Whatever makes sense for you.

Flight

Similar to above, please specify how this beast is capable of flight without wings.

3Koinu  Empty Re: Koinu 09/08/20, 10:24 am

Higanbana

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Bump

4Koinu  Empty Re: Koinu 09/08/20, 04:45 pm

Diana Corvus

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Overall

This beast can't be a spirit as a normal type. If you eventually wanted to make it a spirit, we would allow it later on when you're able to get a legend beast.

But right now, that's too otherworldly. I'm not sure if you want to change the entire beast or not but if you do keep it, you could do some sort of hot-air balloon type bladder to allow the flight, using it's tail as like a propeller- something to that effect.

5Koinu  Empty Re: Koinu 16/08/20, 12:41 pm

Higanbana

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bump

6Koinu  Empty Re: Koinu 17/08/20, 12:01 pm

Merrze

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Edits seem to be fine, starter beast approved!

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[b]Name:[/b] Koinu
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Type:[/b] Normal
[b]Species:[/b] Inugami
[b]Appearance:[/b] A floating, black dog head with transparent body, however instead of having a normal dog body, inugami type of beast's torso is as long as 3 meters. He has a red eyes and there is this red colored symbol on the head.

[b]Beast Traits:[/b]
[b]Trait Name:[/b] Manifested Paranoia
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] D
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Need to be this specific kind of beast
[b]Trait Description:[/b]
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] As a cursed being, Inugami type of beast has a unique effect on their saliva that would cause paranoia, every attacks delivered by using Koinu's sharp teeth, would inject a D-tier paranoia effect applied to them for 1 post.

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Heightened Sense
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] D
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Need to be this specific kind of beast
[b]Trait Description:[/b] Being a canine, Koinu has a heightened senses, he would be able to smell something up to 20km away. He will be able to hear sounds in much greater ranges,
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Able to smell and hear something up to 20km away, making Koinu as a reliable tracker/hunter.

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Flight
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] D
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Need to be this specific kind of beast
[b]Trait Description:[/b] The lightweight Koinu has a large, secondary bladder that can be filled with Helium from the atmosphere, allowing it to float in the air at any height. In combination, Koinu can use its tail as a rudder and propeller to control its flight.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Can travel up to D-tier Fanalis speed

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