Natalia's Starting Abilities

I see thanks for the responses just wondering at Omega-tier it says the whole body can be manipulated so would the fluid thing change or would it have to be something like "You tightend the muscle around your eye to shoot it for D-tier damage. Cost one eye.)

Name: Skin Graft
Tier: C-Tier
Cost: 20 stamina/10 stamina
Class: Offensive
Range: 20 meters
Cool-Down: 3 posts (sustain+1)
Limbs: Arm
Description: The user expands the muscles in their finger at 15 m/s until a piece of skin is lanched from thier from their index finger. This is shaped like a sphere with a diameter of .01 meters.This does C-tier damage on impact and can fbe sustained to Fire again.

I'm Assuming Footwork is fine but I removeded the some flavor text.
Name: Footwork
Tier: D-tier
Cost: 10 Stamina/ 5 Stamina
Class: Supplementary
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 2 posts (sustain+1)
Limbs: Leg
Description: The user balances on either leg and alters dexterity of their toes to allow for movement speeds of up to 10 m/s in a combination of horizontal directions.Can be sustained to maintain buff.

Name: Golden Thread-Azrael
Tier: D-tier
Cost: 10 stamina/ 5 stamina
Class: Supplementary
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 2 posts (sustain+1)
Limbs: Head
Description: The user wraps a quarter of their hair around their body to form a skintight suit at 10 m/s. They can function normally in the suit and it is a requirement for more complex hair abilities.

Stop me if this isn't allowed but, what I meant by cut is that if the arm is the first part the contacts a radial attack that didn't break it then a "safe space" would be made in a clear zone around the arm. I intended This would not be a active "bootleg borg" instead the block cancels out enough energy to result in a 5 diameter sphere blank space if it's succesful. If another attack was sent in the sphere it's self doesn't do anything and the arm still has to contact and succesfully block to do it.



Name: RTB-Real Time Blocking
Tier: D-Tier
Cost: 10 stamina/ 5 stamina
Class: Defensive
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 2 post (sustain+1)
Limbs: Arm
Description: The user oscillates either arm at 10 m/s in such a way to create an force negating effect on its surface.Upon contact with the arm physical attacks will be repelled while radial attacks will have a 5 meter diameter sphere centered on the users arm "cut" into them if it does not overpower the block.This ability can block up to C-tier damage.

Name: Flick
Tier: D-tier
Cost: 10 stamina/ 5 stamina
Class: Supplementary
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 2 post (sustain+1)
Limbs: Arm
Description: The user increase the elasticity and extension force of the muscles near the hand and flicks the with a single finger at 10 m/s.This cause D-tier knockback sending the target back 5 meters at 10 m/s.Can be sustained to flick again.

Thanks in advance.

For the most part, you have all of the basics down pretty good. There are a few things that do need editing, however.

A large number of your abilities have a lot of flavor text/explanation text involved. Abilities should only contain the requirements to activate the ability and the direct effect of the ability (including scale, speed, trajectory -if it has a predetermined trajectory-, and weight of its effect such as D-Tier damage or x status effect for x posts if relevant) within it.


Stingy eyes: Body Manipulation is the manipulation of the muscles and the bones, and does not include a manipulation of bodily fluids. This ability would not be possible, unfortunately.

Golden Thread-Azreal: The longest any single strand of hair can be at D-Tier is 5 meters in length. To wrap around a 1.7 meter tall body, it would have a surface area of about 11236cm (going off of average surface area of a woman being 1.6m²). Divide that by 500cm (5 meters, the longest 1 hair can be), you would need a minimum of 23 hairs to cover your entire body. If you had simply said 'the user's hair covers their body at 10 m/s, forming a skin-tight suit that they can function normally within, and covers their true appearance.' it would have been just fine.

As your ability is right now, even though you say they should be able to see and hear normally, there is just spaces 1 micrometer in between each wrap-around of the hair. There is no way that you can see normally with just 1 micrometer of free space, and you are definitely going to have muffled sounds with that. Your clothing wouldn't disappear, either. The hair isn't eating away at it or anything.

RTB-Real Time Blocking: This ability looks strange. There is a specific portion I am talking about:
"attacks will be repelled while radial attacks will have a 5 meter diameter sphere centered on the users arm "cut" into them if it does not overpower the block."
Are you trying to say that this block creates a sphere larger than both yourself and another humanoid opponent and cuts them?

Flick: Looks pretty good to go as-is.

Edited the post. Hope there is less flavor.

Yupyup, no worries ^_^. We always allow the member to do the first few sets of edits (depending on how close they are to completed) so they can get more used to the systems rules.

For Omega-Tier, it means all of the limbs of the body when it says 'whole body.' If you are really interested in projectile attacks, it has been determined okay to use hair (fires out of the body, not just extends) or fingernails and the like. I wouldn't be against removing fluids for supplementary effects, such as induced vomiting to remove x-tier poison or the like, but not for attacks.


I made the necessary edits because you did pretty well with them and it only needed a few touch-ups. With the blocking, you could do a 'pushes everything outside of x-range' but that would be a defensive/supplementary ability, so I simply changed it to a full defensive as it is a D-Tier ability.

Since all abilities can inherently be sustained, I removed mention of sustain from the abilities. Below is approved as written:

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[b]Name:[/b] Skin Graft
[b]Tier:[/b] C-Tier
[b]Cost:[/b] 20/10 stamina
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] 20 meters
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 3 posts (sustain+1)
[b]Limbs:[/b] Arm
[b]Description:[/b] The user expands the muscles in their finger at 15 m/s until a piece of skin is launched from their index finger. This is shaped like a sphere with a diameter of .01 meters and deals C-Tier damage.
 
[b]Name:[/b] Footwork
[b]Tier:[/b] D-tier
[b]Cost:[/b] 10/5 Stamina
[b]Class:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts (sustain+1)
[b]Limbs:[/b] Leg
[b]Description:[/b] The user balances on either leg and alters dexterity of their toes to allow for movement speeds of up to 10 m/s in a combination of horizontal directions.

[b]Name:[/b] Golden Thread-Azrael
[b]Tier:[/b] D-tier
[b]Cost:[/b] 10/5 stamina
[b]Class:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 posts (sustain+1)
[b]Limbs:[/b] Head
[b]Description:[/b] The user wraps a quarter of their hair around their body to form a skintight suit at 10 m/s. They can function normally in the suit and perform other hair abilities.

[b]Name:[/b] RTB-Real Time Blocking
[b]Tier:[/b] D-Tier
[b]Cost:[/b] 10/5 stamina
[b]Class:[/b] Defensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 post (sustain+1)
[b]Limbs:[/b] Arm
[b]Description:[/b] The user oscillates either arm at 10 m/s in such a way to create an force negating effect on its surface. This ability can block up to C-tier damage.

[b]Name:[/b] Flick
[b]Tier:[/b] D-tier
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 stamina/ 5 stamina
[b]Class:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 post (sustain+1)
[b]Limbs:[/b] Arm
[b]Description:[/b] The user increase the elasticity and extension force of the muscles near the hand and flicks the with a single finger at 10 m/s. This cause D-tier knockback sending the target back 5 meters at 10 m/s.