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1Redoing Starters for Sara Mcdonald Empty Redoing Starters for Sara Mcdonald on 06/06/17, 05:29 pm

Sara Mcdonald

Sara Mcdonald
C-Tier
C-Tier
Hammering Blows
Tier: D
Class: Body Manipulation
Type: Offensive
Range: Close
Requirements/Drawbacks: Can only be used with her arms and no other limbs.
Scaling: She will increase the damage when more Stamina is added to the attack.
Sustain: 1
Cool Down: 1 Post
Cost: 10 Stamina/5 Stamina
Description:

    She will turn her arm into a sort of jack hammer and charge the enemy. When she nears them she will fire a  blow using that arm. This attack will aim mostly for the body or large targets. This will be 2 meters in length with the head of the hammer being 1 meter wide.



Shield
Tier: D
Class: Body Manipulation
Type: defensive
Range: Close
Requirements/Drawbacks: Can only block the direction she is facing leaving her side back above and below vulnerable.
Scaling: By adding more Stamina it lets the shields also extending its range providing more protection.
Sustain: 10/5 Sustain
Cool Down: 1 Post
Cost: 10 Stamina/5 Stamina
Description:

    She will turn her arm into a large shield to shield her from attacks from the enemy. This is capable of blocking a D-Tier of damage before her arm reverts back to normal. The Size of the shield is 2 meters wide and tall enough to cover her body. This blocks most weapon attacks as well as solid attacks however it lacks ability to block things like air, fire or gas types



Finger Gun
Tier: D
Class: Body Manipulation
Type: offensive
Range:  Medium 10 Meters
Requirements/Drawbacks: She must focus for a moment to be able to form the bullet this can leave a chance someone might avoid attack.
Scaling: The Damage will increase if she uses extra Stamina
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 1 Post
Cost: 10 Stamina/5 Stamina
Description:

    She will point her finger at her foe before firing a bullet shaped object at them. This is actually hardened calcium  she formed as it will fly at a rapid speed towards the enemy. If it hits it will cause D-Tier damage to the opponent.



Sword Kick
Tier: D
Class: Body Manipulation
Type: Supplementary
Range: Close
Requirements/Drawbacks: She can only use her legs for this attack, it also makes it hard to run around with her leg shaped like a sword.
Scaling: Increases the Distance she knocks them away with the more Stamina she uses.
Sustain: 1
Cool Down: 1 Post
Cost:10 Stamina/5 Stamina
Description:

    She will rush her opponent aiming a kick toward them as her leg will change shape into the shape of a sword. She will strike with a hard kick, if the kick lands it has the ability to knock her opponents to the ground up to 1 meter away from her.



Chomper
Tier: C
Class: Body Manipulation
Type: offensive
Range: Close
Requirements/Drawbacks: She must be rather close to be able to bite someone, she also can only make her mouth so big so larger creatures or people may be hard to bite.
Scaling: She will increase the size of her mouth and the length of teeth she has when adding more Stamina.
Sustain: 1
Cool Down: 2 Posts
Cost: 20/10 Stamina
Description:

    She will  shift her head and mouth to act like a sharks by creating razor sharp teeth and allowing her jaw a wider range of movement. She bites down upon a target delivers C-Tier damage. She makes her mouth 60 centimeters wide and her teeth up to 18 centimeters long.



Last edited by Sara Mcdonald on 07/06/17, 11:21 am; edited 6 times in total

Rima Fahim

Rima Fahim
A-Tier
A-Tier
Alright, I’m going to work with you one-step at a time. Just so neither of us get mixed up/lost when fixing up these abilities. The first thing you need to do is remove anything that involves m/s. When the combat system was reworked, it got removed with a couple of other things. Along with that, you need to also fix-up your cooldowns.

  • D-Tier = 1 Post
  • C-Tier = 2 Posts
  • B-Tier = 3 Posts
  • A-Tier = 4 Posts


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Sara Mcdonald

Sara Mcdonald
C-Tier
C-Tier
alright got that fixed

Rima Fahim

Rima Fahim
A-Tier
A-Tier
Alright, next up on the list. I’ve noticed that you talk about “adding more magoi” when it comes to scaling abilities. This is wrong, the base cost / scaling cost for Body Manipulator abilities will always be based off of stamina. Just remove the magoi part in all of you're scalings, and also state that your using stamina in the cost. Such as; 10 Stamina/5 Stamina or something along those lines.


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Sara Mcdonald

Sara Mcdonald
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C-Tier
Alright fixed that


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Rima Fahim

Rima Fahim
A-Tier
A-Tier

  • Hammering Blows - I think this one is fine, but like with most things, if another member of staff is against it, we’ll need to re discuss this.

  • Shield - On scaling, just simply put range. Now then, this might be how defensive abilities used to work, but they’ve changed a bit since then. Instead of blocking up to a tier higher, they only block the tier of damage the ability is. So a D-Tier defensive ability will only block up to D-Tier damage. I would also suggest wording on what kind of damage this blocks (bladed weaponry, stuff like that.), and saying how it isn’t able to block intangible attacks (such as, fire, wind, gas, ect.)

  • Finger Gun - This one should be fine, but the concept of shooting “hardened calcium” from your finger tip seems a little strange to me. It kind of sounds like she’s shooting her entire finger off. I’m not really sure though. You can keep it as-is, but if you could also propose it in another way, that’d be great.

  • Sword Kick - I’m thinking this one should be fine, I’ll bring it back up if the others have any issues with it, though.

  • Chomper - You might be fully aware of this already, but you do realize 2-meters is quite literally the entire body length of a tall person. I’d suggest toning the mouth size down a bit.


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Sara Mcdonald

Sara Mcdonald
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C-Tier
fixed listed issues


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Rima Fahim

Rima Fahim
A-Tier
A-Tier
Oop, we're almost there. Just change the feet in your Chomper ability to 60 centimeters and I believe we're good to go!


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Sara Mcdonald

Sara Mcdonald
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Edited Chomper also what is this black magics centimeters/meters

Rima Fahim

Rima Fahim
A-Tier
A-Tier
It's a little bit on the strange side of things, but that's just how we've done things for a while. XD After using it for a bit, you'll finally get the hang of things sooner or later. Anywho, everything should be good to go, however, if another staff member is able to find something that I missed, please don't be too shocked/angry if you're needed to change something. ^.^

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[center][b]Hammering Blows[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Body Manipulation
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Can only be used with her arms and no other limbs.
[b]Scaling:[/b] She will increase the damage when more Stamina is added to the attack.
[b]Sustain:[/b] 1
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1 Post
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Stamina/5 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
She will turn her arm into a sort of jack hammer and charge the enemy. When she nears them she will fire a  blow using that arm. This attack will aim mostly for the body or large targets. This will be 2 meters in length with the head of the hammer being 1 meter wide.[/list]


[center][b]Shield[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Body Manipulation
[b]Type:[/b] defensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Can only block the direction she is facing leaving her side back above and below vulnerable.
[b]Scaling:[/b] By adding more Stamina it lets the shields also extending its range providing more protection.
[b]Sustain:[/b] 10/5 Sustain
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1 Post
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Stamina/5 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
She will turn her arm into a large shield to shield her from attacks from the enemy. This is capable of blocking a D-Tier of damage before her arm reverts back to normal. The Size of the shield is 2 meters wide and tall enough to cover her body. This blocks most weapon attacks as well as solid attacks however it lacks ability to block things like air, fire or gas types[/list]


[center][b]Finger Gun[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Body Manipulation
[b]Type:[/b] offensive
[b]Range:[/b]  Medium 10 Meters
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] She must focus for a moment to be able to form the bullet this can leave a chance someone might avoid attack.
[b]Scaling:[/b] The Damage will increase if she uses extra Stamina
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1 Post
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Stamina/5 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
She will point her finger at her foe before firing a bullet shaped object at them. This is actually hardened calcium  she formed as it will fly at a rapid speed towards the enemy. If it hits it will cause D-Tier damage to the opponent.[/list]


[center][b]Sword Kick[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Body Manipulation
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] She can only use her legs for this attack, it also makes it hard to run around with her leg shaped like a sword.
[b]Scaling:[/b] Increases the Distance she knocks them away with the more Stamina she uses.
[b]Sustain:[/b] 1
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1 Post
[b]Cost:[/b]10 Stamina/5 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
She will rush her opponent aiming a kick toward them as her leg will change shape into the shape of a sword. She will strike with a hard kick, if the kick lands it has the ability to knock her opponents to the ground up to 1 meter away from her.[/list]


[center][b]Chomper[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] C
[b]Class:[/b] Body Manipulation
[b]Type:[/b] offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] She must be rather close to be able to bite someone, she also can only make her mouth so big so larger creatures or people may be hard to bite.
[b]Scaling:[/b] She will increase the size of her mouth and the length of teeth she has when adding more Stamina.
[b]Sustain:[/b] 1
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 2 Posts
[b]Cost:[/b] 20/10 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
She will  shift her head and mouth to act like a sharks by creating razor sharp teeth and allowing her jaw a wider range of movement. She bites down upon a target delivers C-Tier damage. She makes her mouth 60 centimeters wide and her teeth up to 18 centimeters long.[/list]


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