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1Edoras Morack Empty Edoras Morack on 05/04/14, 11:55 pm

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Name: Edoras Morack
Tier: D
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Heretosexual He is turned on by women with fair skin, a medium to large bust, and long hair.
Age + Birthdate: 13 Born: 10/5
Nationality: Magnostadt
Race: Human
Specialization: Intelligence (Lightning)



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Personality: Edoras is eccentric and seems crazy enough that it looks like he's aligned with the Black Rukh, but he is truly aligned with the White Rukh. He likes tinkering with machines, but he is best at his lightning magic. He doesn't give a care what other people think and thinks of nothing but himself. He is naturally smart and strong. He is one of the best in his classes. He has a natural aura of superiority and doesn't care for people who don't try to talk to him, infact he thinks of anyone who does talk to him as a friend. He's ruthless no matter what the conditions are in a fight and no one suspects him to hold back. He doesn't give a care about the past and hates God. He will not give dominance to anyone else believing he is number 1. He thinks all of those who oppose him, except for teachers, as enemies. People say he has the eyes of a hawk and wolf combined. He has a natural talent for figuring things out. His motto is, "If there is no evidence make some." He has a natural sense of luck at the gambling tables. He feels that if he were ever to meet God he would question God because he is curious at why God left the world the way it is. He believes he has the right to question anything even God.

Likes: Edoras likes all machines and likes to tinker with them. This is because of the sounds machines make that's all. He also likes meat for blatant reason, his reasoning, everything tastes better with meat.

Dislikes: Endoras dislikes God for leaving the world in this state and tends to question God. This is because he believes God is at somewhat at fault for the worlds problems. He believes he has the right to question everything and anything and God is no exception, with the knowledge he'll use it to change the world. He also dislikes all people who oppose his power. This is because after a few years of him being the leader he grew to like it that way and intends to keep it that way.

Phobias: Edoras has a natural fear of spiders, this is due to his family being killed by people who used spiders to kill them. It grew larger due to Ephraim using the Black Rukh to mess around with his memory by making the spiders scarier to hide the fact that Ephraim was there. It grows larger every time he sees a spider nowadays.

Aspirations:  His goal is to find the truth about everything. He wants to use this truth to erase his memories of his family. He is also driven by seeing women the get him aroused, which is normal for teenagers. His one main goal though is to talk t this so God, because he is curious at why God doesn't help the world he created.


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Face-Claim:  Character: Add, Origin: Elsword
Weight: 138 lbs
Hair Color:  Silver
Eye Color: Pinkish Purple
Height: 5'09"
Rukh Alignment: White Rukh
Special Traits: Edoras is classified as eccentric on his school file. He can also naturally see Rukh.
Appearance: Edoras has silver hair and and purple eyes. He is usually wearing the school uniform, but on days he get's off he wears white and purple pants, gloves, shoes, and hoodie along with a black and purple shirt, headphones, and belt. He keeps his staff on his back in a white holder. His staff looks like a lightning rod that has veins running through it. All of his clothes adorn a purple circle with a line that goes from the center to past the top of the circle. He usually has his hood on and will also have bracelets on both hands.


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History: Edoras was the son of researchers who had little but some magic whatsoever but researched it looking for how Goi could use magic tools, but not magic it’s self. They had meet in school and then became  part of Magnostadt's research facility. They were allowed to be part of the Second Kodor so they could go to the Library of Merlin for their research there they continued researching the subject even though most unapproved of it. Then Ephraim set up something to lead their research to their demise because the way he saw it they were in the wrong because of what he thought the true research was for. A few months later Edoras’s mother was pregnant and Edoras was in her womb and around the same time they stumbled across the first step of the trap. They halted their research due to Edoras’s mother being pregnant and they decide to continue after Edoras had turned three months old. Ephraim agreed to this even though he thought it a waist because he wanted to have them killed for trying to give magic to goi, this was how he saw the experiment not as research for telling why but research to give goi magic which he thought as evil.

After Edoras was born they did as they said, they spent all the time they had with Edoras.

After two months Edoras’s parents rebooted their research and discarded the trap saying it made absolutely no sense whatsoever. They continued their research and acted like a normal family at the same time. Edoras’s happiness lasted for five years. On his fifth birthday tragedy struck, Ephraim and his men raided their house and killed Edoras’s parents without mercy by using large poisonous spiders for trying to give goi magic. Ephraim decided to leave Edoras alive, but moved him to the Third Kodor and started changing Edoras’s mental state. Ephraim used Black Rukh to alter Edoras’s memory and made his dreams into gruesome nightmares of horror and murder so that way Edoras would have no reason to start a rebellion Ephraim because of him murdering his parents. He also made extra protection for himself by making Edoras from a sweet boy to a crazy person in a few years.

Edoras started to go to the academy at the age of seven, but he wasn’t allowed to go up in Kodors untill his thirteenth birthday. That’s when he could start taking that path and that leads to were he is know in life.

Role-Play Sample: Edoras was now starting his one hundred twenty eighth fight in the last two years. He was facing a blue magician, easy prey for him with his yellow magician class. He silently liked his lips waiting for the teacher to signal the start. He observed the blue magician, the way he looked, the way he stood and held his staff, everything he could in the matter of thirty seconds. The teacher finally signaled the start and Edoras blasted off like a speeding bullet. He wiped out his staff and got close to the enemy in a matter of ten seconds. He juked around the enemy and hit the blue magician in the back with his staff and then sprinted in front of the enemy and hit a knockout blow to the head.



Last edited by JackMoon on 06/04/14, 11:31 am; edited 3 times in total

2Edoras Morack Empty Re: Edoras Morack on 06/04/14, 09:48 am

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You have some coding errors. Please end the bold tags before your input. Bolding everything defeats the purpose of bolding things in the first place which is to visually set input fields apart from input itself for easy navigation through an app.

Personality/Rukh Alignment:
He feels that if he were ever to meet God he would hit God in the face for leaving the world the way it is.

That sentence right there? Yeah, regardless of what you WANT for the character, that makes him a black rukh character. Black rukh comes from cursing/going against your fate or the fate of the world and there is no greater extreme towards that end than resenting god for the way the world is. That is text book black rukh conditions.

Either adjust the sentence to be less extreme or change your alignment to black please.

Likes/Dislikes: You have the minimum two sentences, but you aren't really explaining WHY these are liked or disliked which is part of the required template. Please expand on these a bit.

Phobias: Black rukh can't just invade your dreams randomly. It doesn't work that way v.v Although you can still have nightmares which in turn put you into the fate/god hating mindset required to produce black rukh.

History: You'll need to rewrite much of this.

-Goi aren't allowed into Magnostadt on this forum unless they were born there to magician parents and even then they would be kicked out once they are old enough to show signs of magic but fail to do so.

-It is even less likely Ephraim would make them 2nd Kodor or allow them to access the library just to pull some drawn out trap towards the end of killing them.

-Magician's are also born to goi parents all the time so acting like this is a super big deal in your history isn't really valid.

-Ephraim loves magicians, so even if your parent's were goi, he would NEVER torture you with nightmares.

There are just too many key plot points here that don't make sense or fit with the world.

Please make the updates and then bump when this is ready for another look over.


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3Edoras Morack Empty Re: Edoras Morack on 06/04/14, 10:16 am

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I have a hard time with coding but I'll try meeting the changes you want.

4Edoras Morack Empty Re: Edoras Morack on 06/04/14, 11:25 am

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[12:18:08] @ Yakuroro : Jack, only thing I'd ask you to change now is your dislike of god and all that. Add in some note that you believe it is your rightful place in the world to question everything, including god.
[12:18:16] @ Yakuroro : That puts a less depraved spin on it

Last change and I'll approve. I still don't like that you have Ephraim seeping one of his beloved magicians in black rukh though. This is a personal request and not required, but please change his name to say it was one of his professors acting on their own.


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5Edoras Morack Empty Re: Edoras Morack on 06/04/14, 11:32 am

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I made the edit you asked for Yakuroro

6Edoras Morack Empty Re: Edoras Morack on 06/04/14, 11:34 am

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