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1Zakad the Echo Wolf Empty Zakad the Echo Wolf on 13/12/16, 09:23 am

Nahvi

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Zakad the Echo Wolf Esper-Fenrir-2
Name: Zakad
Tier: D
Type: Normal
Species: Echo Wolf
Appearance: Zakad is 198.12 centimeters tall, and fur as free as the wind itself. A large Blue and While wolf.
Beast Traits:



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2Zakad the Echo Wolf Empty Re: Zakad the Echo Wolf on 13/12/16, 10:25 am

Noir Ecryola

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You havent put the image for the beast
Change the 6'6" to use metric measurement in meter or centimeter
Give more words for the beast description, like how wide is it, is it furry or not, color of the eyes and those kind of stuffs.



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3Zakad the Echo Wolf Empty Re: Zakad the Echo Wolf on 02/02/17, 06:05 am

Nahvi

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Converted


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4Zakad the Echo Wolf Empty Re: Zakad the Echo Wolf on 02/02/17, 10:58 am

Diana Corvus

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The description seems unfinished and you're missing an image. I feel like the trait could also be worded a lot better / more efficiently.

Since there isn't a D Tier camouflage value, perhaps this lower tier trait would require Zakad to stay still while camouflaging and in a certain environment. If someone saw Zakad camouflaging, they would see him. I'm basing these suggestions off of how camouflage for Ranger's work.

Other than that, this was good. :D


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5Zakad the Echo Wolf Empty Re: Zakad the Echo Wolf on 05/01/18, 01:36 pm

Nahvi

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Sorry @diana I changed the trait so I could create moves for Zakad


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6Zakad the Echo Wolf Empty Re: Zakad the Echo Wolf on 05/01/18, 02:26 pm

Diana Corvus

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The Appearance isn't descriptive enough and if I remember correctly, describes your old picture.

Call of the Wild should state in the trait effect that the beast can create howl based abilities and then state what kind of effects this howl can deal to people.


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7Zakad the Echo Wolf Empty Re: Zakad the Echo Wolf on 06/01/18, 01:44 am

Nahvi

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Edited. Can I add more or is that all I can put on for Commands?


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8Zakad the Echo Wolf Empty Re: Zakad the Echo Wolf on 06/01/18, 06:39 pm

Ariel

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Ah hah hah hah... You have way too much going on here. You need to narrow down your effects types. You have both healing, defense, mind alterations (like induced sleepiness or induced craze), and attacks going on here. Traits like these generally only allow you to have one type.

For example, Jingyi's beast, Dullahan has a trait which allows her to register healing-based abilities and another trait which allows her to register static-based abilities. They're not compiled into the same trait, even though you could argue electricity accelerates bone healing.


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9Zakad the Echo Wolf Empty Re: Zakad the Echo Wolf on 06/01/18, 06:48 pm

Nahvi

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Hows that?


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10Zakad the Echo Wolf Empty Re: Zakad the Echo Wolf on 06/01/18, 06:53 pm

Ariel

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Hmm. I'm kind of afraid/super afraid you're dipping a little too close into light magic territory. Illusions are sort of... well, they are light magic's staple (along with invisibility). You need to explain the whole illusions and things.


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11Zakad the Echo Wolf Empty Re: Zakad the Echo Wolf on 06/01/18, 09:24 pm

Nahvi

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changed it


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12Zakad the Echo Wolf Empty Re: Zakad the Echo Wolf on 06/01/18, 10:14 pm

Ariel

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You seem to have listed Zakad in your new thread before he was approved. While I will let it go this time, I do ask you to be patient next time.
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[b]Name:[/b] Zakad
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Type:[/b] Normal
[b]Species:[/b] Echo Wolf
[b]Appearance:[/b] Zakad is 198.12 centimeters tall, and fur as free as the wind itself. A large, blue and white wolf.


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