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1Nuro Empty Nuro on 07/11/16, 10:13 am

Ammon

Ammon
C-Tier
C-Tier
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Name: Nuro
Tier: C
Type: Normal
Species: Sethept
Appearance:

The Sethept is naturally nocturnal; but decades of breeding has given rise to the non nocturnal version. Their eyes are smaller than a normal Sethept and their fur shorter as well. They range in colors from brown to grey. Their claws are meant for uprooting brush so they can eat every part of the plant. Their sharp teeth meant for breaking apart thick wood and self protection. In the back however they have large molars to chew the softer parts of a plant to a nice pulp.

This beast is naturally docile. However is protective of its young. In the wild they roam in large herds of ten to twenty. The eldest being the largest since they do not stop growing. However due to average life spans from working they normally do not out grow camels.

The largest ever recorded was the size of an elephant. They guessed it to be nearly one hundred. It did not live much longer after being spotted however. It died most likely from its inability to find enough food for its size as well as age.

Nuro is an average sized Sethept. Standing at 2.15m at the shoulder and weighing 1,300kg. He is a light grey in color.

Beast Traits:

Trait Name: Burden
Trait Tier: C
Trait Requirement: Must be as large as a horse.
Trait Description: Due to years of hauling supplies through the desert this beasts muscles are thick. This thickness is exceptional in this hind quarters and pectorals creating a natural "armor" of sorts.
Trait Effect: Damage dealt to the hind quarters and pectorals is reduced by C-tier. Ineffective against A-tier damage and above.

Trait Name: Weight Lifter
Trait Tier: C
Trait Requirement: Must be as large as a horse.
Trait Description: Due to years of hauling supplies through the desert this beasts muscles have been strengthened.
Trait Effect: Thanks to it's strong muscles it is like an Ox. It can haul up to 1.5x its own body weight.



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2Nuro Empty Re: Nuro on 07/11/16, 12:17 pm

Diligence

Diligence
A-Tier
A-Tier
Appearance: Add the beasts weight and height.
Burden / Trait Effect: Just saying "Defense" doesn't explain the traits effects good enough. It's more along the lines of "Increases Damage the beast can take by a tier." or something along those lines.
Weight Lifter / Trait Effect: Same as above, except in this case you could say that Niro has the strength of a C Tiered Fanalis or something along those lines.


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3Nuro Empty Re: Nuro on 07/11/16, 02:57 pm

Ammon

Ammon
C-Tier
C-Tier
Fixed


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4Nuro Empty Re: Nuro on 07/11/16, 04:30 pm

Duquin

Duquin
A-Tier
A-Tier
I understand it's just flavor text, but please remove the part about this beast being favored by Heliohaptan's and gods riding them. Heliohaptan's only have an affinity towards snakes lore-wise. Any other creatures you make might be part of the ecosystem and have a role in their daily lives, but snakes are the only creatures with cultural significance lore-wise.

Burden:
There is no "defense" stat, nor is there a damage threshold which could be increased since beasts die only when logically lethal injuries are sustained just like player characters do.

That said, you can't just have a blanket defense boost. If you want to say that specific areas of your beast are protected by thick muscles reducing damage to those locations by C-tier, that is fine. But it can't be the entire body. There must be weak points.


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5Nuro Empty Re: Nuro on 07/11/16, 06:23 pm

Ammon

Ammon
C-Tier
C-Tier
Fixed, hope that is better.


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6Nuro Empty Re: Nuro on 07/11/16, 06:29 pm

Duquin

Duquin
A-Tier
A-Tier
"Two additional hits" doesn't really make sense considering one hit might be D-tier and the other might be A-tier. I've revised that trait for you, if you're satisfied with this then edit it in and I'll approve your app.

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[b]Trait Name:[/b] Burden
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] C
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Must be as large as a horse.
[b]Trait Description:[/b] Due to years of hauling supplies through the desert this beasts muscles are thick. This thickness is exceptional in this hind quarters and pectorals creating a natural "armor" of sorts.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Damage dealt to the hind quarters and pectorals is reduced by C-tier. Ineffective against A-tier damage and above.


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Thank you all, for everything.

7Nuro Empty Re: Nuro on 07/11/16, 06:39 pm

Ammon

Ammon
C-Tier
C-Tier
Fixed, thank you.


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8Nuro Empty Re: Nuro on 07/11/16, 06:41 pm

Duquin

Duquin
A-Tier
A-Tier
Looks like you edited the wrong trait my friend D:


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9Nuro Empty Re: Nuro on 07/11/16, 06:54 pm

Ammon

Ammon
C-Tier
C-Tier
Dunce mode has struck again XD


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10Nuro Empty Re: Nuro on 07/11/16, 06:56 pm

Duquin

Duquin
A-Tier
A-Tier
Approved and priced at 20,000 huang:

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[b]Name:[/b] Nuro
[b]Tier:[/b] C
[b]Type:[/b] Normal
[b]Species:[/b] Sethept
[b]Appearance:[/b]

The Sethept is naturally nocturnal; but decades of breeding has given rise to the non nocturnal version. Their eyes are smaller than a normal Sethept and their fur shorter as well. They range in colors from brown to grey. Their claws are meant for uprooting brush so they can eat every part of the plant. Their sharp teeth meant for breaking apart thick wood and self protection. In the back however they have large molars to chew the softer parts of a plant to a nice pulp.

This beast is naturally docile. However is protective of its young. In the wild they roam in large herds of ten to twenty. The eldest being the largest since they do not stop growing. However due to average life spans from working they normally do not out grow camels.

The largest ever recorded was the size of an elephant. They guessed it to be nearly one hundred. It did not live much longer after being spotted however. It died most likely from its inability to find enough food for its size as well as age.

Nuro is an average sized Sethept. Standing at 2.15m at the shoulder and weighing 1,300kg. He is a light grey in color.

[b]Beast Traits:[/b]

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Burden
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] C
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Must be as large as a horse.
[b]Trait Description:[/b] Due to years of hauling supplies through the desert this beasts muscles are thick. This thickness is exceptional in this hind quarters and pectorals creating a natural "armor" of sorts.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Damage dealt to the hind quarters and pectorals is reduced by C-tier. Ineffective against A-tier damage and above.

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Weight Lifter
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] C
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Must be as large as a horse.
[b]Trait Description:[/b] Due to years of hauling supplies through the desert this beasts muscles have been strengthened.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Thanks to it's strong muscles it is like an Ox. It can haul up to 1.5x its own body weight.

Would you like to make the purchase now?


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11Nuro Empty Re: Nuro on 07/11/16, 07:12 pm

Ammon

Ammon
C-Tier
C-Tier
Sure thing ^^


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12Nuro Empty Re: Nuro on 07/11/16, 07:14 pm

Duquin

Duquin
A-Tier
A-Tier
Purchase approved~ Huang deducted~


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