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1Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted]  Empty Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted] on 26/09/16, 01:25 am

Lagi

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Name: Oriana Zetel *Orie Awakened*
Tier: B-Tier
Type: Symbiotic
Species: Amoeba Rukh Slime [Legend]
Appearance: Orie is 130 cm tall, and 25 cm wide. She changed considerably  and has apparently evolved to take the form of a dark purple looking sprite with blue eyes and a white iris. Her markings contain an ancient writing of old times, with the marking resembling a strange looking triangle shaped dot in her forehead which symbolism matches the dark hand. She still takes on a unique amoeba like form, with the hair texture being darker and her shape apparently forming some sort of clothing now. Orie was originally a failed magical experiment that was performed by the Dark Hand; one that was supposed to create an artificial life-form. However, being with Lagi and the changes he's went through in life and a  body experience, she's become something much more by *Completing herself* and regains the ability as an amoeba form to assimilate itself with other living beings. As an amoeba, Orie's volume never changes, but she is able to control her shape since she has no defined spine or bone structure.

Drawback: If Orie dies, the host can get knocked out from shock. Along with the host sharing pain senses with Orie, severed limbs would experience the same kind of intensity, but only temporarily.
Beast Traits:

Trait Name: Host Body Manipulation
Trait Tier: [B-Tier]
Trait Requirement: Body Manipulation
Trait Description: Orie can choose to have parts of its body, such as the appendages, exist outside of the host body while its core temporarily assimilates with the host body. When host and symbiotic are combined in such a fashion, the host has perfect control over the limbs as they are 'one'.
Trait Effect:Body manipulation techniques can now be made in such a fashion that utilizing the goop can allow for a move set with more variety  and size/range/density with appendage creation that can freely mutate already existing limbs or pop out through the body/pores. Orie can also easily coat over one of lagi's limbs for a base damage equivalent to her rank.

Trait Name: Healing Factor
Trait Tier:  B-Tier
Trait Requirement: N/A
Trait Description: Healing Factor -Orie can  rapidly regenerate, in other words, she can recreate lost or damaged tissues, organs and limbs, restoring herself or the host to optimal health. This also includes poison and abnormalities such as blindness by abilities.
Trait Effect:Orie can allow for the creation of regeneration abilities that can heal damage.



Last edited by Lagi on 30/09/16, 08:17 pm; edited 9 times in total


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2Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted]  Empty Re: Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted] on 26/09/16, 11:35 am

Diligence

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Please provide a Drawback for your beast. This being a Parasite/Symbiote a drawback is needed, make sure it's coencides with its Tier.

Healing Factor: Allowing you access to healing abilities is perfectly fine. This trait of course will need to be fleshed out in a ability, it currently looks like it'll allow you to instantly heal from A tier Damage for no cost once a thread.


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3Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted]  Empty Re: Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted] on 26/09/16, 12:04 pm

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ok fixed and edited


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4Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted]  Empty Re: Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted] on 26/09/16, 08:02 pm

Duquin

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Drawback:
This is a really weak drawback for an A-tier symbiote. If you just want stamina cost penalties then it should be more like +20 to the cost. Also, sustains are always half of the initial cost so just don't even mention em.

To be honest, instead of cost increases, I'd prefer to see something more dangerous. Like if Orie dies, the host dies or gets knocked out from shock. Along with the host sharing pain senses with Orie so if your beast is making it like you have extra limbs and one gets severed, Lagi would feel like one of his own arms got severed and be temporarily crippled by the pain(assuming he doesn't have a trait for ignoring pain).

Healing Factor:
This is too powerful varied even for an a-tier trait. You've got healing damage, healing status effects, and purging poisons. You'd need to cut it down to like one of these. If it's healing damage that you go with, the healing should take place slowly over time and not be instant.

ZETAL Authority:
Staff actually makes your free Omega trait based on your input. Sadly, magic is no longer granted to legend beasts nor can it be accessed through a trait.

That being said, magic resistance or absorbing magoi could be potential directions we could take the omega trait in. Do you have any other preferences with that being said?


Speed Link:
Beast speed isn't set by its rank anymore, so this would actually limit lagi's speed if he ever got speed based traits lol. I suggest rethinking this to simply buff Orie's speed.

If you do go that route, then use text to describe the speed or compare it to the generic/racial speed traits.


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5Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted]  Empty Re: Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted] on 29/09/16, 03:32 pm

Lagi

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edited,

Well, she plays a great deal in lagi's development over to a more darker side of his life since the incident with his dragon...so having him seem strong and whatnot would be cool

Well anyway, for zetal authority the floor is yours, i guess instead of 5 A ranks, im going for the big 4 omega moves... so edit as you wish

p.s, can i have orie's abilities reflect the ability slots i have?


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6Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted]  Empty Re: Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted] on 29/09/16, 08:00 pm

Duquin

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I thought something was fishy when I saw Orie set to Omega despite remembering it being A-tier when you posted this so I looked in your vault.

Orie is only B-tier. You only have 10 trait points to spend and she would not be Legend beast level. If you are trying to "replace" El Drago as part of the revamp allowed due to systems then that means you are retconning El Drago out of existence. Something I'm sure you don't want considering your plot.

That said, Orie should be B-tier right now, not Omega. Please edit accordingly.


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7Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted]  Empty Re: Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted] on 30/09/16, 12:27 pm

Lagi

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Well before i do, you already know what im doing, cant i just switch out her rank for el dragos so she would be A instead or is that adjustment period well over

if it is thats cool, i'll just be without el drago for a while.


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8Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted]  Empty Re: Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted] on 01/10/16, 10:28 am

Lagi

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ok bump


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9Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted]  Empty Re: Lagi's Beasts [Resubmitted] on 01/10/16, 06:25 pm

Duquin

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[b]Name:[/b] Oriana Zetel *Orie Awakened*
[b]Tier:[/b] B-Tier
[b]Type:[/b] Symbiotic
[b]Species:[/b] Amoeba Rukh Slime [Legend]
[b]Appearance:[/b] Orie is 130 cm tall, and 25 cm wide. She changed considerably  and has apparently evolved to take the form of a dark purple looking sprite with blue eyes and a white iris. Her markings contain an ancient writing of old times, with the marking resembling a strange looking triangle shaped dot in her forehead which symbolism matches the dark hand. She still takes on a unique amoeba like form, with the hair texture being darker and her shape apparently forming some sort of clothing now. Orie was originally a failed magical experiment that was performed by the Dark Hand; one that was supposed to create an artificial life-form. However, being with Lagi and the changes he's went through in life and a  body experience, she's become something much more by *Completing herself* and regains the ability as an amoeba form to assimilate itself with other living beings. As an amoeba, Orie's volume never changes, but she is able to control her shape since she has no defined spine or bone structure.

[b][u]Drawback[/u]:[/b] If Orie dies, the host can get knocked out from shock. Along with the host sharing pain senses with Orie, severed limbs would experience the same kind of intensity, but only temporarily.
[b]Beast Traits:[/b]

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Host Body Manipulation
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] [B-Tier]
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Body Manipulation
[b]Trait Description:[/b] Orie can choose to have parts of its body, such as the appendages, exist outside of the host body while its core temporarily assimilates with the host body. When host and symbiotic are combined in such a fashion, the host has perfect control over the limbs as they are 'one'.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b]Body manipulation techniques can now be made in such a fashion that utilizing the goop can allow for a move set with more variety  and size/range/density with appendage creation that can freely mutate already existing limbs or pop out through the body/pores. Orie can also easily coat over one of lagi's limbs for a base damage equivalent to her rank.

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Healing Factor
[b]Trait Tier:[/b]  B-Tier
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] N/A
[b]Trait Description:[/b] Orie can  rapidly regenerate the hosts soft tissues such as skin and muscle and repair fractured bone. However, broken bones and lost limbs cannot be repaired.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Orie can register abilities to heal up to B-tier damage.


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