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1Ares; Dynatos's Beast Empty Ares; Dynatos's Beast on 23/03/14, 01:57 pm

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Name: Ares | God of War
Tier: C
Type: Brute
Species: Canine
Speed: 15 m/s
Passive Specials:

  • Flame Breath ~ Breaths in Carbon Dioxide and Oxygen which causes a chemical reaction in his body that allows him to produce fire. Much like the venom of a snake this fire is used in defence, but can be used in a offensive way.Ares mostly produces the flame when he feels like he is in danger.
  • Heightened Senses ~ Due to its unique color and marking, hunting in the wild was hard the senses of the breed of canine became heightened. Ares can see up to 137 meters in the light and 46 meters in the dark. He can hear up to 16094 meters.



Active Specials:

  • N/A



Appearance:
Ares has orange fur with black stripes along its back and legs. The fur on its muzzle, chest, belly, and tail is cream-colored, as well as an additional tuft of fur on top of its head. Ares's coat is noticeably longer on its chest and tail. It has gray eyes, a black nose, and large, round ears. Its forepaws have two visible claws, while its hind paws have three toes each. Each paw has a brown pad. Ares is 4 ft while standing on all fours and weighs 83 pounds.



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2Ares; Dynatos's Beast Empty Re: Ares; Dynatos's Beast on 23/03/14, 02:32 pm

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Approved at a cost of 10,000 huang

EDIT: Apologies, secondary specs have double Huang costs so an addition 10k as been deducted for a total of 20,000.


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3Ares; Dynatos's Beast Empty Re: Ares; Dynatos's Beast on 15/04/14, 11:06 am

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Edited?


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4Ares; Dynatos's Beast Empty Re: Ares; Dynatos's Beast on 15/04/14, 11:45 am

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The active needs to be broken down like a skill that uses energy. What you have is more so a passive since it allows for elemental use which it will need if it wished to use any fire style techniques.


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5Ares; Dynatos's Beast Empty Re: Ares; Dynatos's Beast on 15/04/14, 12:45 pm

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"heightened senses" is also a bit vague. Which senses? How "heightened" are they? What does this mean in combat? At what range are these senses effective?

Please elaborate.


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6Ares; Dynatos's Beast Empty Re: Ares; Dynatos's Beast on 19/04/14, 01:41 pm

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Ok now i think it's ready


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7Ares; Dynatos's Beast Empty Re: Ares; Dynatos's Beast on 19/04/14, 03:11 pm

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Heightened Senses:
-Please convert the numbers to the metric system. We used meters for everything else on the forum and your opponents shouldn't have to do those conversions themselves.

Dying Will:
-This has the same problem your old active had. It should be like an extra ability which consumes magoi/stamina and has a cool down. What you have is more like another passive. Refer to the beast information in the systems page for more information on active abilities.

https://magiworld.forumotion.com/t899-dominance-beast-information


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8Ares; Dynatos's Beast Empty Re: Ares; Dynatos's Beast on 30/06/14, 10:27 am

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9Ares; Dynatos's Beast Empty Re: Ares; Dynatos's Beast on 30/06/14, 01:01 pm

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Active Traits
These traits are what beast use to hunt and kill their prey in the wild and give a major advantage in fights. These traits are skills that allow beast to use certain skills such as venom producing, camouflage, elemental based skills, healing skills, increase of speed/defense/strength (follow the restriction listed in passive), etc.. These skills will cost energy to use that is ½ the amount of a normal ability of that tier and have a duration last up to 3 post with a cooldown that is at least 5 post long, add an extra post for the cooldown for every post that it is continued on past the first. These skills will have fixed tiers 1 D, 1 B, 1 Omega, the omega tier skill can only be used once per thread like a normal omega tier skill.

You still aren't quite within the active trait requirements. Your duration and cool downs aren't listed and the cost is supposed to be half the amount of its normal tier.


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10Ares; Dynatos's Beast Empty Re: Ares; Dynatos's Beast on 30/06/14, 01:16 pm

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11Ares; Dynatos's Beast Empty Re: Ares; Dynatos's Beast on 30/06/14, 02:09 pm

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[b]Name:[/b] Ares | [color=#cc0000][i]God of War[/i][/color]
[b]Tier:[/b] C
[b]Type:[/b] Brute
[b]Species:[/b] Canine
[b]Speed:[/b] 15 m/s
[b]Passive Specials:[/b]
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[*][i]Flame Breath[/i] ~ Breaths in Carbon Dioxide and Oxygen which causes a chemical reaction in his body that allows him to produce fire. Much like the venom of a snake this fire is used in defence, but can be used in a offensive way.Ares mostly produces the flame when he feels like he is in danger.
[*][i]Heightened Senses[/i] ~ Due to its unique color and marking, hunting in the wild was hard the senses of the breed of canine became heightened. Ares can see up to 137 meters in the light and 46 meters in the dark. He can hear up to 16094 meters.
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[b]Active Specials:[/b]
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[*][i]N/A
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Appearance:[/b] Ares has orange fur with black stripes along its back and legs. The fur on its muzzle, chest, belly, and tail is cream-colored, as well as an additional tuft of fur on top of its head. Ares's coat is noticeably longer on its chest and tail. It has gray eyes, a black nose, and large, round ears. Its forepaws have two visible claws, while its hind paws have three toes each. Each paw has a brown pad. Ares is 4 ft while standing on all fours and weighs 83 pounds.

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