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1Sara's Starters Redone Empty Sara's Starters Redone on 24/07/15, 04:56 pm

Sara Mcdonald

Sara Mcdonald
C-Tier
C-Tier
Name: Hammering Blows
Tier: D
Cost: 10/5 Sustain
Class: Offensive
Range:Close
Cool-Down: 2 Posts/Sustain+1
Limbs: Arm
Description:
She will turn her arm into a sort of jack hammer and charge the enemy. When she nears them she will fire a  blow using that arm. This attack will aim mostly for the body, and move at a rate of 10 m/s. This will be 2 meters in length with the head of the hammer being 1 meter wide.

Name: Shield
Tier: D
Cost: 10/5 Sustain
Class: Defensive
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 2 Posts/Sustain+1
Limbs: Arm
Description:
She will turn her arm into a large shield to shield her from attacks from the enemy, which she uses to intercept at a speed of 10 m/s. This is capable of blocking 2 D-Tier of damage or 1 C-Tier of damage before her arm reverts back to normal. The Size of the shield is 2 meters wide and tall enough to cover her body.

Name: Finger Gun
Tier: D
Cost: 10/5 Sustain
Class: Offensive
Range: 10 Meters
Cool-Down: 2 Posts/Sustain+1
Limbs: Arm
Description:
She will point her finger at her foe before firing a bullet shaped object at them. This is actually hardened calcium  she formed as it will fly at a rapid speed of 10 m/s towards the enemy. If it hits it will cause D-Tier damage to the opponent.

Name: Sword Kick
Tier: D
Cost: 10/5 Sustain
Class: Supplementary
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 2 Posts/Sustain+1
Limbs: Legs
Description:
She will rush her opponent aiming a kick toward them as her leg will change shape into the shape of a sword. She will strike with a hard kick at a speed of 10 m/s, if the kick lands it has the ability to knock her opponents to the ground up to 1 meter away from her.

Name: Chomper
Tier: C
Cost: 20/10 Sustain
Class: Offensive
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 3 Posts/Sustain+1
Limbs: Head
Description:
She will  shift her head and mouth to act like a sharks by creating razor sharp teeth and allowing her jaw a wider range of movement. She bites down upon a target at a speed of 15 m/s and delivers C-Tier damage. She makes her mouth 2 meters wide and her teeth up to 18 centimeters long.



Last edited by Sara Mcdonald on 24/07/15, 07:16 pm; edited 5 times in total

2Sara's Starters Redone Empty Re: Sara's Starters Redone on 24/07/15, 06:21 pm

Ariella Negri

Ariella Negri
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Ω-Tier
all abilities need to include the sustain cost and sustain cool-down. Please add "or Sustain+1" to the cool-downs and the magoi/stamina cost for it to be sustained.

Hammering Blows: The amount rules limit it to one (1) attack for D-tier abilities. Total damage may only equal 1 D-tier. Please change this to say she strikes 1 time for D-tier damage.

Shield: This needs to include the size of the shield created.

Finger Gun: This needs to list the distance the projectile shoots. However, if you are shooting a portion of bone, it would also cause damage to you, as this is not something your body would naturally lose.

Sword Kick:  The amount rules limit it to one (1) attack for D-tier abilities. Please change this to say she strikes 1 time to knock the opponent back. This would also be supplementary, not offensive, as it does not deal damage, it only knocks them back.

Chomper: This needs to include how large she makes her mouth/teeth.


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3Sara's Starters Redone Empty Re: Sara's Starters Redone on 24/07/15, 06:40 pm

Sara Mcdonald

Sara Mcdonald
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C-Tier
I believe... I fixed everything and changed it finger gun to make it just hardened calcium don't want to hurt myself after all >.>

4Sara's Starters Redone Empty Re: Sara's Starters Redone on 24/07/15, 06:47 pm

Ariella Negri

Ariella Negri
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Ω-Tier
Hammering Blows: This also needs to give the size of the jackhammer.

You need to remove the "flurry of blows" from Hammering Blow and "several kicks" from Sword Kick. These can ONLY be a total of ONE hit or ONE kick.

As for sustain, you still needed the first part of "2 post" or "3 posts". Simply add the "or Sustain+1" to the end of it.

Chomper: I would like to just note here that you would ONLY be able to use this ability if an opponent is attacking you, meaning you will not be able to use this in any other situation. This is perfectly fine, but you are limiting yourself.


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5Sara's Starters Redone Empty Re: Sara's Starters Redone on 24/07/15, 06:57 pm

Sara Mcdonald

Sara Mcdonald
C-Tier
C-Tier
I edited Chomper to be able to use it at all times, also made the kick and her hammer form one punch/kick

6Sara's Starters Redone Empty Re: Sara's Starters Redone on 24/07/15, 07:14 pm

Merrze

Merrze
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A-Tier
The length of the teeth should be in centimeter not inches since we use the metric system.


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7Sara's Starters Redone Empty Re: Sara's Starters Redone on 24/07/15, 07:17 pm

Sara Mcdonald

Sara Mcdonald
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8Sara's Starters Redone Empty Re: Sara's Starters Redone on 24/07/15, 08:39 pm

Vardreth

Vardreth
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I added the damage to the Hammering Blows. Made some very minor grammar changes there.

Approved for use~

Code:
[b]Name:[/b] Hammering Blows
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10/5 Sustain
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 Posts/Sustain+1
[b]Limbs:[/b] Arm
[b]Description:[/b]
She will turn her arm into a sort of jack hammer and charge the enemy. When she nears them she will fire a  blow using that arm, dealing D-Tier damage. This attack will aim mostly for the body, and move at a rate of 10 m/s. This will be 2 meters in length with the head of the hammer being 1 meter wide.

[b]Name:[/b] Shield
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10/5 Sustain
[b]Class:[/b] Defensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 Posts/Sustain+1
[b]Limbs:[/b] Arm
[b]Description:[/b]
She will turn her arm into a large shield to shield her from attacks from the enemy, which she uses to intercept at a speed of 10 m/s. This is capable of blocking 2 D-Tier of damage or 1 C-Tier of damage before her arm reverts back to normal. The Size of the shield is 2 meters wide and tall enough to cover her body.

[b]Name:[/b] Finger Gun
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10/5 Sustain
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] 10 Meters
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 Posts/Sustain+1
[b]Limbs:[/b] Arm
[b]Description:[/b]
She will point her finger at her foe before firing a bullet shaped object at them. This is actually hardened calcium  she formed as it will fly at a rapid speed of 10 m/s towards the enemy. If it hits it will cause D-Tier damage to the opponent.

[b]Name:[/b] Sword Kick
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Cost:[/b] 10/5 Sustain
[b]Class:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 2 Posts/Sustain+1
[b]Limbs:[/b] Legs
[b]Description:[/b]
She will rush her opponent aiming a kick toward them as her leg will change shape into the shape of a sword. She will strike with a hard kick at a speed of 10 m/s, if the kick lands it has the ability to knock her opponents to the ground up to 1 meter away from her.

[b]Name:[/b] Chomper
[b]Tier:[/b] C
[b]Cost:[/b] 20/10 Sustain
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Cool-Down:[/b] 3 Posts/Sustain+1
[b]Limbs:[/b] Head
[b]Description:[/b]
She will shift her head and mouth to act like a shark's by creating razor sharp teeth and allowing her jaw a wider range of movement. She bites down upon a target at a speed of 15 m/s and delivers C-Tier damage. She makes her mouth 2 meters wide and her teeth up to 18 centimeters long.


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