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1Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 02/02/15, 05:28 pm

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Name: Aengar(First Name) Mithrandir Mythos          
Nationality: Immuchakk      
Race: Immuchakk Pure Blood        
Tier: D
Specialization: Intelligence( Magic: Life)
Age + Birth date: 23 years old / December 17
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Hetrosexual
Personality: Aengar is an Immuchakk Pure Blood and his physique reflects it. But how he acts doesn’t he isn't largely territorial and he hates battle. Aengar is extremely shy and he doesn’t like humans he prefers to stay by himself. Meaning that Aengar is more of a person who prefers solitude.  Aengar hopes to be acknowledged after being reborn as the worlds first Immuchakk Magi he forges his own fate. He refuses to have people do work for him, he tries to do his own work so that as he grow older he knows that he can do whatever he wishes without the excuse that he’s never done it and that he needs someone to do it for him because he cannot do it himself. Aengar is the type of person who wishes to see the world and it’s full light not only by seeing the darkness. He believes that it will allow him to be more at peace with the worlds creations and rukh and have an understanding of how everything works. Aengar believes  that connections are not a necessary in-order to survive and thrive. Even though when needed Aengar will make connections to succeed. Aengar is also extremely self-conscious he has to know that when someone thinks of him it’s what he wants them to think.
Likes: Aengar has multiple likes:
Magic: Aengar is a prodigy at magic he is very good at it. So the very fact that he excels at it causes him to have a deep and passionate love of magic.
Knives: Aengar is not that much a fan of swords because they slow him down and cause him to think in  a slow manner.
Staffs: Aengar also has a deep love of staves he has multiple each having a different purpose.
Dislikes:  Aengars dislikes vary from all different types of things

Swords: Aengar has a large dislike of swords due to the fact that they come along with things like honor and loyalty when used in the service of someone. Aengar does not like loyalty because it usually means you're working in a team and Aengar is a drastic loner and largely independent.

Fanalis: Fanalis people are strong but they are stupid and lack the common sense necessary to live in a manner that the Immuchakk live.

Aspirations: Aengar’s is to reborn as a Magi. He hopes that the way he lives his life will allow for whoever, wherever to deem and see him as a worthy person to be a Magi. Aengar also hopes to master the art of spiritual silence. For a long time as a child Aengar would keep to himself and read his books so he prefered to speak to the rukh. But he needs to learn that he must be sound and collective within himself.

Phobias/fears: As a wizard Aengar fears few things, but Aengar's ultimate fear is not being able to succeed he lived his entire life with the phobia that he would not be able to live to his fullest ability. Aengar believes that goals are meant to achieve and in the entirety Aengar is scared of disappointment from himself and others. Aengar was always self-conscious but now being Chief it scares him even more. Aengar also fears other Magicians within his tribe Aengar believes he’s the most talented magician in his tribe but out in the world it is an entirely different story.
His second fear is that the world will never know his power.
Face-Claim: Alvis(No Last Name)|MAR|http://ts1.mm.bing.net/th?&id=HN.607990000308256851&w=300&h=300&c=0&pid=1.9&rs=0&p=0
Hair Color: Immuchakk Blue
Eye Color: Gold
Height:335.28 cm
Weight: 347 lbs / 157kg
Appearance: Aengar is an Immuchakk meaning he has a more built physique but his muscle definition is slightly less than the rest of the Immuchakk’s. Aengar prefers tight robes one for his upper body and some tight pants for his legs, but the most noticeable apparel is his shoes and gauntlets these both made out of leather. The shoes were painted blue and included fur inside for warmth. When seeing Aengar any human for the most part would not be able to see his face. But Aengar has extremely long hair for a male it’s around 4 to 5 feet long. But for the most part Aengars’ clothes were blue and white mostly Immuchakk colors.
Rukh Alignment: White
Special Traits: NA
History: Aengar grew up in an Immuchakk village outside of the Asisiak united tribes. The village was one of the villages that was farther off more in the heart of the Northern Continent, there his people were judgemental they followed the laws and lives of their ancestors to the book. But Aengar had chosen a different path for himself. At the age of 21 Aengar had become an adult his father so proud his mother disappointed his mother saw his ability for magic. She knew that her people were going to waste his prodigy on things like tribal feuds and power grabs and large hunts. So she told him that she would get work for him a years work in the village collecting things that would worth value in the Mainland like Reim and Balbadd.
  So Aengar traveled  around the Northern Continent doing work for people and at the same time his prowess over magic grew an old Immuchakk sorcerer wanted to have these demons banished from his land so he had Aengar come in and banish them so from that Aengar received a Staff and a pair of 2 magic knives, knives were hand crafted and enchanted so that they would always land there mark. After Aengar traveled home his mother reassured him that he was ready so he walked away from Immuchakk and traveled the Northern Continent but he’s come back to manage the village after his fathers’ death. Coming back he feels is a large mistake but he knows that his father would not want to leave his village to his corrupt elders. So Aengar came back and being the sole-elder he declared a celebration  of a new generation. Aengar then dealt with all his village problems. Then elders were replaced and new elders were found to replace them. But the people still didn’t see what Aengar would change so Aengar took it upon himself to change the rule that discouraged him he made 3 new rules.
1.Magic was now allowed and he built a facility devoted to the study and use of it.
2.Everyone was required to learn a profession
3.Leaving the village was now allowed
Role-Play Sample: Aengar’s people grew restless the village was finally peaceful but it was to peaceful these people only knew a life of combat and joy. Not peace and tranquility so Aengar took it upon himself to organize an event the great warriors of the tribe together tracked down a sea beast and the town was going to watch as their Chief Aengar killed it and spilt the food amongst the town. The day was breaking the warriors told Aengar that the beast was about an hour away so he prepared himself. He put on his normal attire and equipped his weapons. As he walked out of his home his guard came up to him and asked “ Chief what if the beast overpowers you?.... what will we do then?” * Aengar puts his hand on his friends shoulder and says “ The wants it nothing no matter how powerful can stop it.* The beast finally here on the edge of a cliff is where Aengar stood and that is where it all happened. The beast rose out of the waters with it’s head prepared to strike. So Aengar took to the air with the spell Gravitas Liftus and he chanted * “Air of the world, take hold of me for the worlds land shall hold no dominion over me”*  this allowed for Aengar to float not fly but float. Then he made sure to immobilize his target with a field of gravity that would make it so he won’t be able to move so he used Sinking Stone *” May the air bind you so that you may always be constricted to the ground”* Then he negotiated his levitation spell and went in with his knife and cut the head off of his foe.



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2Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 02/02/15, 07:13 pm

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Specialization: You may only choose a single specialization to begin with, so please choose either Intelligence or Strength.

Personality: This needs to be 200 words, it is 110. When you say "But how he acts doesn’t. Aengar is extremely shy and he doesn’t like humans he prefers to stay by himself. Meaning that Aengar is more of a person who prefers solitude." The Imuchakk are known to be a solitary people, not particularly friendly with humans. As far as the Magi aspect, Magi are BORN into the world (meaning he would have to die doing something heroic enough to draw attention to himself and be reborn as a Magi)


Aspirations: One does not TRAIN to become a magi, they are born or reborn that way. You can still use this as an Aspiration, as he might simply be uneducated on the topic. (The source of Magi is not something widely known)

Phobias/Fear: This needs to be 75 words long, it is 49.

Height: Per the Race page, "The average male adult stands at a height range of 213 cm to 274 cm". You have your height at almost double that (a whopping 15 feet tall)

Weight: If he is as tall as you say, he should probably be a bit heavier, as at 15 feet tall, only 200 pounds, he would literally be skin and bones, pretty much.

Special Traits: You cut off in the middle of this and special traits are for things like glowing tattoos, animal ears, missing limbs, things that make him physically stand out beyond the norm.

History: Is this tribe not following Asisiak (who united all of the Imuchakk tribes)? If no one is alowed to leave the village, does that mean your character will be solely based in the village?

Aside from this, please go through and clean up your spelling, grammar and sentence structure a bit, please.


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3Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 04/02/15, 12:55 am

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4Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 04/02/15, 02:25 am

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You did not address the discrepancies for the personality (You claim he is UNLIKE the imuchakk in personality, when the imuchakk are isolationists and not friendly towards anyone outside of their tribe.

For dislikes, this one makes no sense:
Swords: Aengar has a large dislike of swords due to the fact that they come along with things like honor and loyalty when used in the service of someone.

You did not address the height issue (a small variation from the norm is fine, but you have a MASSIVE difference)

You have a face-claim for a character with blonde hair but say he has blue hair.

You give no indication of WHY his ears are a "special trait." you do not need a special trait but if you have one listed, you need to include an explanation.

How does your character have so much information on magi, as it is not a widely known topic on how/why they are created and at this point in the forum, no one knows the name Solomon, let alone the spell Solomon's Wisdom.


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5Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 04/02/15, 08:36 am

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6Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 04/02/15, 09:40 am

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Please go through and use the template so everything is formatted properly and we should be good to go. The template, with coding, can be found here. (Simply copy and paste what is located in the code box)

I do want to stress again that information on Magi is NOT widely known to anyone, including how they are born/reborn. While desiring to be a Magi is fine, the likeliness of him finding someone that knows that Magi are only born/reborn, not created or trained is HIGHLY unlikely, unless he has connections to other Magi somehow.


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7Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 04/02/15, 04:26 pm

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Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Th?&id=HN.607990000308256851&w=300&h=300&c=0&pid=1
Name: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos
Country Affiliation: Immuchakk
Race: Immuchakk
Tier: D
Specialization: Intelligence(Magic Life)
Age + Birthdate:  23/ December 17
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Hetrosexual
Personality:. Aengar is an Immuchakk Pure Blood and his physique reflects it. But how he acts doesn’t he isn't largely territorial and he hates battle. Aengar is extremely shy and he doesn’t like humans he prefers to stay by himself. Meaning that Aengar is more of a person who prefers solitude.  Aengar hopes to be acknowledged after being reborn as the worlds first Immuchakk Magi he forges his own fate. He refuses to have people do work for him, he tries to do his own work so that as he grow older he knows that he can do whatever he wishes without the excuse that he’s never done it and that he needs someone to do it for him because he cannot do it himself. Aengar is the type of person who wishes to see the world and it’s full light not only by seeing the darkness. He believes that it will allow him to be more at peace with the worlds creations and rukh and have an understanding of how everything works. Aengar believes  that connections are not a necessary in-order to survive and thrive. Even though when needed Aengar will make connections to succeed. Aengar is also extremely self-conscious he has to know that when someone thinks of him it’s what he wants them to think.
Likes:. Likes: Aengar has multiple likes:
Magic: Aengar is a prodigy at magic he is very good at it. So the very fact that he excels at it causes him to have a deep and passionate love of magic.
Knives: Aengar is not that much a fan of swords because they slow him down and cause him to think in  a slow manner.
Staffs: Aengar also has a deep love of staves he has multiple each having a different purpose.
Dislikes:Aengars dislikes vary from all different types of things

Swords: Aengar has a large dislike of swords due to the fact that they come along with things like honor and loyalty when used in the service of someone. Aengar does not like loyalty because it usually means you're working in a team and Aengar is a drastic loner and largely independent.

Fanalis: Fanalis people are strong but they are stupid and lack the common sense necessary to live in a manner that the Immuchakk live.
Aspirations: Aengar’s is to reborn as a Magi. He hopes that the way he lives his life will allow for whoever, wherever to deem and see him as a worthy person to be a Magi. Aengar also hopes to master the art of spiritual silence. For a long time as a child Aengar would keep to himself and read his books so he prefered to speak to the rukh. But he needs to learn that he must be sound and collective within himself.
Phobias/fears:As a wizard Aengar fears few things, but Aengar's ultimate fear is not being able to succeed he lived his entire life with the phobia that he would not be able to live to his fullest ability. Aengar believes that goals are meant to achieve and in the entirety Aengar is scared of disappointment from himself and others. Aengar was always self-conscious but now being Chief it scares him even more. Aengar also fears other Magicians within his tribe Aengar believes he’s the most talented magician in his tribe but out in the world it is an entirely different story.
His second fear is that the world will never know his power.
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Hair Color:Immuchakk Blue
Eye Color:. Gold
Height: 335.28 cm
Weight:347 lbs / 157kg
Appearance:Aengar is an Immuchakk meaning he has a more built physique but his muscle definition is slightly less than the rest of the Immuchakk’s. Aengar prefers tight robes one for his upper body and some tight pants for his legs, but the most noticeable apparel is his shoes and gauntlets these both made out of leather. The shoes were painted blue and included fur inside for warmth. When seeing Aengar any human for the most part would not be able to see his face. But Aengar has extremely long hair for a male it’s around 4 to 5 feet long. But for the most part Aengars’ clothes were blue and white mostly Immuchakk colors.
Rukh Alignment:White
Special Traits:
History:Aengar grew up in an Immuchakk village outside of the Asisiak united tribes. The village was one of the villages that was farther off more in the heart of the Northern Continent, there his people were judgemental they followed the laws and lives of their ancestors to the book. But Aengar had chosen a different path for himself. At the age of 21 Aengar had become an adult his father so proud his mother disappointed his mother saw his ability for magic. She knew that her people were going to waste his prodigy on things like tribal feuds and power grabs and large hunts. So she told him that she would get work for him a years work in the village collecting things that would worth value in the Mainland like Reim and Balbadd.
 So Aengar traveled  around the Northern Continent doing work for people and at the same time his prowess over magic grew an old Immuchakk sorcerer wanted to have these demons banished from his land so he had Aengar come in and banish them so from that Aengar received a Staff and a pair of 2 knives, knives were hand crafted and extremely beautiful. After Aengar traveled home his mother reassured him that he was ready so he walked away from Immuchakk and traveled the Northern Continent but he’s come back to manage the village after his fathers’ death. Coming back he feels is a large mistake but he knows that his father would not want to leave his village to his corrupt elders. So Aengar came back and being the sole-elder he declared a celebration  of a new generation. Aengar then dealt with all his village problems. Then elders were replaced and new elders were found to replace them. But the people still didn’t see what Aengar would change so Aengar took it upon himself to change the rule that discouraged him he made 3 new rules.
1.Magic was now allowed and he built a facility devoted to the study and use of it.
2.Everyone was required to learn a profession
3.Leaving the village was now allowed
Role-Play Sample: Aengar’s people grew restless the village was finally peaceful but it was to peaceful these people only knew a life of combat and joy. Not peace and tranquility so Aengar took it upon himself to organize an event the great warriors of the tribe together tracked down a sea beast and the town was going to watch as their Chief Aengar killed it and spilt the food amongst the town. The day was breaking the warriors told Aengar that the beast was about an hour away so he prepared himself. He put on his normal attire and equipped his weapons. As he walked out of his home his guard came up to him and asked “ Chief what if the beast overpowers you?.... what will we do then?” * Aengar puts his hand on his friends shoulder and says “ The wants it nothing no matter how powerful can stop it.* The beast finally here on the edge of a cliff is where Aengar stood and that is where it all happened. The beast rose out of the waters with it’s head prepared to strike. So Aengar took to the air with the spell Gravitas Liftus and he chanted * “Air of the world, take hold of me for the worlds land shall hold no dominion over me”*  this allowed for Aengar to float not fly but float. Then he made sure to immobilize his target with a field of gravity that would make it so he won’t be able to move so he used Sinking Stone *” May the air bind you so that you may always be constricted to the ground”* Then he negotiated his levitation spell and went in with his knife and cut the head off of his foe.



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8Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 04/02/15, 06:32 pm

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Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Th?&id=HN.607990000308256851&w=300&h=300&c=0&pid=1
Name: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos
Country Affiliation: Immuchakk
Race: Immuchakk
Tier: D
Specialization: Intelligence(Magic Life)
Age + Birthdate:  23/ December 17
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Hetrosexual
Personality:. Aengar is an Immuchakk Pure Blood and his physique reflects it. But how he acts doesn’t he isn't largely territorial and he hates battle. Aengar is extremely shy and he doesn’t like humans he prefers to stay by himself. Meaning that Aengar is more of a person who prefers solitude.  Aengar hopes to be acknowledged after being reborn as the worlds greatest magician and spell forger he forges his own fate. He refuses to have people do work for him, he tries to do his own work so that as he grow older he knows that he can do whatever he wishes without the excuse that he’s never done it and that he needs someone to do it for him because he cannot do it himself. Aengar is the type of person who wishes to see the world and it’s full light not only by seeing the darkness. He believes that it will allow him to be more at peace with the worlds creations and rukh and have an understanding of how everything works. Aengar believes  that connections are not a necessary in-order to survive and thrive. Even though when needed Aengar will make connections to succeed. Aengar is also extremely self-conscious he has to know that when someone thinks of him it’s what he wants them to think.
Likes:. Likes: Aengar has multiple likes:
Magic: Aengar is a prodigy at magic he is very good at it. So the very fact that he excels at it causes him to have a deep and passionate love of magic.
Knives: Aengar is not that much a fan of swords because they slow him down and cause him to think in  a slow manner.
Staffs: Aengar also has a deep love of staves he has multiple each having a different purpose.
Dislikes:Aengars dislikes vary from all different types of things

Swords: Aengar has a large dislike of swords due to the fact that they come along with things like honor and loyalty when used in the service of someone. Aengar does not like loyalty because it usually means you're working in a team and Aengar is a drastic loner and largely independent.

Fanalis: Fanalis people are strong but they are stupid and lack the common sense necessary to live in a manner that the Immuchakk live.
Aspirations: Aengar’s is to live his life and become a great magician and spell maker. He hopes that the way he lives his life will allow for whoever, wherever to deem and see him as a worthy person to be a great magician and spell maker. Aengar also hopes to master the art of spiritual silence. For a long time as a child Aengar would keep to himself and read his books so he prefered to speak to the rukh. But he needs to learn that he must be sound and collective within himself.
Phobias/fears:As a wizard Aengar fears few things, but Aengar's ultimate fear is not being able to succeed he lived his entire life with the phobia that he would not be able to live to his fullest ability. Aengar believes that goals are meant to achieve and in the entirety Aengar is scared of disappointment from himself and others. Aengar was always self-conscious but now being Chief it scares him even more. Aengar also fears other Magicians within his tribe Aengar believes he’s the most talented magician in his tribe but out in the world it is an entirely different story.
His second fear is that the world will never know his power.
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Hair Color:Immuchakk Blue
Eye Color:. Gold
Height: 335.28 cm
Weight:347 lbs / 157kg
Appearance:Aengar is an Immuchakk meaning he has a more built physique but his muscle definition is slightly less than the rest of the Immuchakk’s. Aengar prefers tight robes one for his upper body and some tight pants for his legs, but the most noticeable apparel is his shoes and gauntlets these both made out of leather. The shoes were painted blue and included fur inside for warmth. When seeing Aengar any human for the most part would not be able to see his face. But Aengar has extremely long hair for a male it’s around 4 to 5 feet long. But for the most part Aengars’ clothes were blue and white mostly Immuchakk colors.
Rukh Alignment:White
Special Traits:
History:Aengar grew up in an Immuchakk village outside of the Asisiak united tribes. The village was one of the villages that was farther off more in the heart of the Northern Continent, there his people were judgemental they followed the laws and lives of their ancestors to the book. But Aengar had chosen a different path for himself. At the age of 21 Aengar had become an adult his father so proud his mother disappointed his mother saw his ability for magic. She knew that her people were going to waste his prodigy on things like tribal feuds and power grabs and large hunts. So she told him that she would get work for him a years work in the village collecting things that would worth value in the Mainland like Reim and Balbadd.
 So Aengar traveled  around the Northern Continent doing work for people and at the same time his prowess over magic grew an old Immuchakk sorcerer wanted to have these demons banished from his land so he had Aengar come in and banish them so from that Aengar received a Staff and a pair of 2 magic knives, knives were hand crafted and enchanted so that they would always glow when dark rukh was near. After Aengar traveled home his mother reassured him that he was ready so he walked away from Immuchakk and traveled the Northern Continent but he’s come back to manage the village after his fathers’ death. Coming back he feels is a large mistake but he knows that his father would not want to leave his village to his corrupt elders. So Aengar came back and being the sole-elder he declared a celebration  of a new generation. Aengar then dealt with all his village problems. Then elders were replaced and new elders were found to replace them. But the people still didn’t see what Aengar would change so Aengar took it upon himself to change the rule that discouraged him he made 3 new rules.
1.Magic was now allowed and he built a facility devoted to the study and use of it.
2.Everyone was required to learn a profession
3.Leaving the village was now allowed
Role-Play Sample: Aengar’s people grew restless the village was finally peaceful but it was to peaceful these people only knew a life of combat and joy. Not peace and tranquility so Aengar took it upon himself to organize an event the great warriors of the tribe together tracked down a sea beast and the town was going to watch as their Chief Aengar killed it and spilt the food amongst the town. The day was breaking the warriors told Aengar that the beast was about an hour away so he prepared himself. He put on his normal attire and equipped his weapons. As he walked out of his home his guard came up to him and asked “ Chief what if the beast overpowers you?.... what will we do then?” * Aengar puts his hand on his friends shoulder and says “ The wants it nothing no matter how powerful can stop it.* The beast finally here on the edge of a cliff is where Aengar stood and that is where it all happened. The beast rose out of the waters with it’s head prepared to strike. So Aengar took to the air with the spell Gravitas Liftus and he chanted * “Air of the world, take hold of me for the worlds land shall hold no dominion over me”*  this allowed for Aengar to float not fly but float. Then he made sure to immobilize his target with a field of gravity that would make it so he won’t be able to move so he used Sinking Stone *” May the air bind you so that you may always be constricted to the ground”* Then he negotiated his levitation spell and went in with his knife and cut the head off of his foe.



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10Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 04/02/15, 07:32 pm

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11Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 04/02/15, 09:18 pm

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First, I just want to mention that you did copy and paste the code correctly. Your last post is just right.

I would like to highlight a few things that Ariella has been attempting to inform you of:

@Ariella Negri wrote:
As far as the Magi aspect, Magi are BORN into the world (meaning he would have to die doing something heroic enough to draw attention to himself and be reborn as a Magi)


Aspirations: One does not TRAIN to become a magi, they are born or reborn that way. You can still use this as an Aspiration, as he might simply be uneducated on the topic. (The source of Magi is not something widely known)

@Ariella Negri wrote:
How does your character have so much information on magi, as it is not a widely known topic on how/why they are created and at this point in the forum, no one knows the name Solomon, let alone the spell Solomon's Wisdom.

@Ariella Negri wrote:
I do want to stress again that information on Magi is NOT widely known to anyone, including how they are born/reborn. While desiring to be a Magi is fine, the likeliness of him finding someone that knows that Magi are only born/reborn, not created or trained is HIGHLY unlikely, unless he has connections to other Magi somehow.


So, she's tried to explain to you that you cannot have as much details as you do about Magi. I will post some quotes from your application that are violating what she requested:

1: Aengar hopes to be acknowledged after being reborn as the worlds first Immuchakk Magi he forges his own fate.
2: Aengar’s is to reborn as a Magi. He hopes that the way he lives his life will allow for whoever, wherever to deem and see him as a worthy person to be a Magi.


As an aside, you cannot have magical daggers that always hit the mark. The only spec that can design their own magical tools are Dex users, though Strength Users do have the capability of crafting a magic weapon.


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12Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 05/02/15, 10:29 am

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Name: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos
Country Affiliation: Immuchakk
Race: Immuchakk
Tier: D
Specialization: Intelligence(Magic Life)
Age + Birthdate:  23/ December 17
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Hetrosexual
Personality:. Aengar is an Immuchakk Pure Blood and his physique reflects it. But how he acts doesn’t he isn't largely territorial and he hates battle. Aengar is extremely shy and he doesn’t like humans he prefers to stay by himself. Meaning that Aengar is more of a person who prefers solitude.  Aengar hopes to be acknowledged after being trained as the worlds greatest magician and spell forger he forges his own fate. He refuses to have people do work for him, he tries to do his own work so that as he grow older he knows that he can do whatever he wishes without the excuse that he’s never done it and that he needs someone to do it for him because he cannot do it himself. Aengar is the type of person who wishes to see the world and it’s full light not only by seeing the darkness. He believes that it will allow him to be more at peace with the worlds creations and rukh and have an understanding of how everything works. Aengar believes  that connections are not a necessary in-order to survive and thrive. Even though when needed Aengar will make connections to succeed. Aengar is also extremely self-conscious he has to know that when someone thinks of him it’s what he wants them to think.
Likes:. Likes: Aengar has multiple likes:
Magic: Aengar is a prodigy at magic he is very good at it. So the very fact that he excels at it causes him to have a deep and passionate love of magic.
Knives: Aengar is not that much a fan of swords because they slow him down and cause him to think in  a slow manner.
Staffs: Aengar also has a deep love of staves he has multiple each having a different purpose.
Dislikes:Aengars dislikes vary from all different types of things

Swords: Aengar has a large dislike of swords due to the fact that they come along with things like honor and loyalty when used in the service of someone. Aengar does not like loyalty because it usually means you're working in a team and Aengar is a drastic loner and largely independent.

Fanalis: Fanalis people are strong but they are stupid and lack the common sense necessary to live in a manner that the Immuchakk live.
Aspirations: Aengar’s is to live his life and become a great magician and spell maker. He hopes that the way he lives his life will allow for whoever, wherever to deem and see him as a worthy person to be a great magician and spell maker. Aengar also hopes to master the art of spiritual silence. For a long time as a child Aengar would keep to himself and read his books so he prefered to speak to the rukh. But he needs to learn that he must be sound and collective within himself.
Phobias/fears:As a wizard Aengar fears few things, but Aengar's ultimate fear is not being able to succeed he lived his entire life with the phobia that he would not be able to live to his fullest ability. Aengar believes that goals are meant to achieve and in the entirety Aengar is scared of disappointment from himself and others. Aengar was always self-conscious but now being Chief it scares him even more. Aengar also fears other Magicians within his tribe Aengar believes he’s the most talented magician in his tribe but out in the world it is an entirely different story.
His second fear is that the world will never know his power.
Face-Claim:.http://ts1.mm.bing.net/th?&id=HN.60799000030825851&w=300&h=300&c=0&pid=1.9&rs=0&p=0
Hair Color:Immuchakk Blue
Eye Color:. Gold
Height: 335.28 cm
Weight:347 lbs / 157kg
Appearance:Aengar is an Immuchakk meaning he has a more built physique but his muscle definition is slightly less than the rest of the Immuchakk’s. Aengar prefers tight robes one for his upper body and some tight pants for his legs, but the most noticeable apparel is his shoes and gauntlets these both made out of leather. The shoes were painted blue and included fur inside for warmth. When seeing Aengar any human for the most part would not be able to see his face. But Aengar has extremely long hair for a male it’s around 4 to 5 feet long. But for the most part Aengars’ clothes were blue and white mostly Immuchakk colors.
Rukh Alignment:White
Special Traits:
History:Aengar grew up in an Immuchakk village outside of the Asisiak united tribes. The village was one of the villages that was farther off more in the heart of the Northern Continent, there his people were judgemental they followed the laws and lives of their ancestors to the book. But Aengar had chosen a different path for himself. At the age of 21 Aengar had become an adult his father so proud his mother disappointed his mother saw his ability for magic. She knew that her people were going to waste his prodigy on things like tribal feuds and power grabs and large hunts. So she told him that she would get work for him a years work in the village collecting things that would worth value in the Mainland like Reim and Balbadd.
So Aengar traveled  around the Northern Continent doing work for people and at the same time his prowess over magic grew an old Immuchakk sorcerer wanted to have these demons banished from his land so he had Aengar come in and banish them so from that Aengar received a Staff and a pair of 2 magic knives, knives were hand crafted and enchanted so that they would always glow when dark rukh was near. After Aengar traveled home his mother reassured him that he was ready so he walked away from Immuchakk and traveled the Northern Continent but he’s come back to manage the village after his fathers’ death. Coming back he feels is a large mistake but he knows that his father would not want to leave his village to his corrupt elders. So Aengar came back and being the sole-elder he declared a celebration  of a new generation. Aengar then dealt with all his village problems. Then elders were replaced and new elders were found to replace them. But the people still didn’t see what Aengar would change so Aengar took it upon himself to change the rule that discouraged him he made 3 new rules.
1.Magic was now allowed and he built a facility devoted to the study and use of it.
2.Everyone was required to learn a profession
3.Leaving the village was now allowed
Role-Play Sample: Aengar’s people grew restless the village was finally peaceful but it was to peaceful these people only knew a life of combat and joy. Not peace and tranquility so Aengar took it upon himself to organize an event the great warriors of the tribe together tracked down a sea beast and the town was going to watch as their Chief Aengar killed it and spilt the food amongst the town. The day was breaking the warriors told Aengar that the beast was about an hour away so he prepared himself. He put on his normal attire and equipped his weapons. As he walked out of his home his guard came up to him and asked “ Chief what if the beast overpowers you?.... what will we do then?” * Aengar puts his hand on his friends shoulder and says “ The wants it nothing no matter how powerful can stop it.* The beast finally here on the edge of a cliff is where Aengar stood and that is where it all happened. The beast rose out of the waters with it’s head prepared to strike. So Aengar took to the air with the spell Gravitas Liftus and he chanted * “Air of the world, take hold of me for the worlds land shall hold no dominion over me”*  this allowed for Aengar to float not fly but float. Then he made sure to immobilize his target with a field of gravity that would make it so he won’t be able to move so he used Sinking Stone *” May the air bind you so that you may always be constricted to the ground”* Then he negotiated his levitation spell and went in with his knife and cut the head off of his foe.



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13Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 05/02/15, 10:31 am

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Also the post above this is the right one with all the changes.

CollidingChaosGoesAtomic wrote:How do I copy the code?

14Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 05/02/15, 12:17 pm

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to copy to code, you highlight everything in the code box, for example

Code:
This it the text you would copy

And then paste this to use as your application. That way all the appropriate fields are have the bold tags. This will make it your app go from:

Name:

-to-

Name:

Please make all changes to the original post of this thread.




You state:
Aengar hopes to be acknowledged after being reborn as the worlds greatest magician and spell forger he forges his own fate.
-Why would he need to be reborn as a great magician? Magicians can be trained.


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15Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 05/02/15, 08:01 pm

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16Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 05/02/15, 08:51 pm

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Sir, you are very very close to being ready. The issue with you having magic knives wasn't because they had an OP ability on them (always hit their mark) but because they are magical in nature.

As stated above, there are 2 specs that can obtain magical items without buying them from the shop directly; Strength and Dexterity.

These are the only classes that can design their own magic items themselves. You will need to remove the magic ability from the knives, and keep in mind that the knives can't be used for combat purposes (only RP purposes).


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17Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 05/02/15, 09:39 pm

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Wait just did a few new changes *Hope this is the final bump* sorry for the inconvenience this is my first time creating an RP character.............. oh yeah *bump*


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18Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 05/02/15, 09:51 pm

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Sorry I fixed and I have noted that knives are only for RP purposes


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Name: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos
Country Affiliation: Immuchakk
Race: Immuchakk
Tier: D
Specialization: Intelligence(Magic Life)
Age + Birthdate: 23/ December 17
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Hetrosexual
Personality:. Aengar is an Immuchakk Pure Blood and his physique reflects it. But how he acts doesn’t he isn't largely territorial and he hates battle. Aengar is extremely shy and he doesn’t like humans he prefers to stay by himself. Meaning that Aengar is more of a person who prefers solitude. Aengar hopes to be acknowledged after being reborn as the worlds first Immuchakk Magi he forges his own fate. He refuses to have people do work for him, he tries to do his own work so that as he grow older he knows that he can do whatever he wishes without the excuse that he’s never done it and that he needs someone to do it for him because he cannot do it himself. Aengar is the type of person who wishes to see the world and it’s full light not only by seeing the darkness. He believes that it will allow him to be more at peace with the worlds creations and rukh and have an understanding of how everything works. Aengar believes that connections are not a necessary in-order to survive and thrive. Even though when needed Aengar will make connections to succeed. Aengar is also extremely self-conscious he has to know that when someone thinks of him it’s what he wants them to think.
Likes:. Likes: Aengar has multiple likes:
Magic: Aengar is a prodigy at magic he is very good at it. So the very fact that he excels at it causes him to have a deep and passionate love of magic.
Knives: Aengar is not that much a fan of swords because they slow him down and cause him to think in a slow manner.
Staffs: Aengar also has a deep love of staves he has multiple each having a different purpose.
Dislikes:Aengars dislikes vary from all different types of things

Swords: Aengar has a large dislike of swords due to the fact that they come along with things like honor and loyalty when used in the service of someone. Aengar does not like loyalty because it usually means you're working in a team and Aengar is a drastic loner and largely independent.

Fanalis: Fanalis people are strong but they are stupid and lack the common sense necessary to live in a manner that the Immuchakk live.
Aspirations: Aengar’s is to reborn as a Magi. He hopes that the way he lives his life will allow for whoever, wherever to deem and see him as a worthy person to be a Magi. Aengar also hopes to master the art of spiritual silence. For a long time as a child Aengar would keep to himself and read his books so he prefered to speak to the rukh. But he needs to learn that he must be sound and collective within himself.
Phobias/fears:As a wizard Aengar fears few things, but Aengar's ultimate fear is not being able to succeed he lived his entire life with the phobia that he would not be able to live to his fullest ability. Aengar believes that goals are meant to achieve and in the entirety Aengar is scared of disappointment from himself and others. Aengar was always self-conscious but now being Chief it scares him even more. Aengar also fears other Magicians within his tribe Aengar believes he’s the most talented magician in his tribe but out in the world it is an entirely different story.
His second fear is that the world will never know his power.
Face-Claim:.http://ts1.mm.bing.net/th?&id=HN.60799000030825851&w=300&h=300&c=0&pid=1.9&rs=0&p=0
Hair Color:Immuchakk Blue
Eye Color:. Gold
Height: 335.28 cm
Weight:347 lbs / 157kg
Appearance:Aengar is an Immuchakk meaning he has a more built physique but his muscle definition is slightly less than the rest of the Immuchakk’s. Aengar prefers tight robes one for his upper body and some tight pants for his legs, but the most noticeable apparel is his shoes and gauntlets these both made out of leather. The shoes were painted blue and included fur inside for warmth. When seeing Aengar any human for the most part would not be able to see his face. But Aengar has extremely long hair for a male it’s around 4 to 5 feet long. But for the most part Aengars’ clothes were blue and white mostly Immuchakk colors.
Rukh Alignment:White
Special Traits:
History:Aengar grew up in an Immuchakk village outside of the Asisiak united tribes. The village was one of the villages that was farther off more in the heart of the Northern Continent, there his people were judgemental they followed the laws and lives of their ancestors to the book. But Aengar had chosen a different path for himself. At the age of 21 Aengar had become an adult his father so proud his mother disappointed his mother saw his ability for magic. She knew that her people were going to waste his prodigy on things like tribal feuds and power grabs and large hunts. So she told him that she would get work for him a years work in the village collecting things that would worth value in the Mainland like Reim and Balbadd.
So Aengar traveled around the Northern Continent doing work for people and at the same time his prowess over magic grew an old Immuchakk sorcerer wanted to have these demons banished from his land so he had Aengar come in and banish them so from that Aengar received a Staff and a pair of 2 knives, knives were hand crafted and extremely beautiful. After Aengar traveled home his mother reassured him that he was ready so he walked away from Immuchakk and traveled the Northern Continent but he’s come back to manage the village after his fathers’ death. Coming back he feels is a large mistake but he knows that his father would not want to leave his village to his corrupt elders. So Aengar came back and being the sole-elder he declared a celebration of a new generation. Aengar then dealt with all his village problems. Then elders were replaced and new elders were found to replace them. But the people still didn’t see what Aengar would change so Aengar took it upon himself to change the rule that discouraged him he made 3 new rules.
1.Magic was now allowed and he built a facility devoted to the study and use of it.
2.Everyone was required to learn a profession
3.Leaving the village was now allowed
Role-Play Sample: Aengar’s people grew restless the village was finally peaceful but it was to peaceful these people only knew a life of combat and joy. Not peace and tranquility so Aengar took it upon himself to organize an event the great warriors of the tribe together tracked down a sea beast and the town was going to watch as their Chief Aengar killed it and spilt the food amongst the town. The day was breaking the warriors told Aengar that the beast was about an hour away so he prepared himself. He put on his normal attire and equipped his weapons. As he walked out of his home his guard came up to him and asked “ Chief what if the beast overpowers you?.... what will we do then?” * Aengar puts his hand on his friends shoulder and says “ The wants it nothing no matter how powerful can stop it.* The beast finally here on the edge of a cliff is where Aengar stood and that is where it all happened. The beast rose out of the waters with it’s head prepared to strike. So Aengar took to the air with the spell Gravitas Liftus and he chanted * “Air of the world, take hold of me for the worlds land shall hold no dominion over me”* this allowed for Aengar to float not fly but float. Then he made sure to immobilize his target with a field of gravity that would make it so he won’t be able to move so he used Sinking Stone *” May the air bind you so that you may always be constricted to the ground”* Then he negotiated his levitation spell and went in with his knife and cut the head off of his foe.


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19Aengar Mithrandir Mythos Empty Re: Aengar Mithrandir Mythos on 06/02/15, 01:17 am

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Alrighty, this looks good~ I'll make the vault shortly.


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[b]Name:[/b] Aengar Mithrandir Mythos
[b]Country Affiliation:[/b] Immuchakk
[b]Race:[/b] Immuchakk
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Specialization:[/b] Intelligence(Magic Life)
[b]Age + Birthdate:[/b]  23/ December 17
[b]Gender:[/b] Male
[b]Sexuality:[/b] Hetrosexual
[b]Personality:[/b]
Aengar is an Immuchakk Pure Blood and his physique reflects it. But how he acts doesn’t he isn't largely territorial and he hates battle. Aengar is extremely shy and he doesn’t like humans he prefers to stay by himself. Meaning that Aengar is more of a person who prefers solitude.  Aengar hopes to be acknowledged after being reborn as the worlds first Immuchakk Magi he forges his own fate. He refuses to have people do work for him, he tries to do his own work so that as he grow older he knows that he can do whatever he wishes without the excuse that he’s never done it and that he needs someone to do it for him because he cannot do it himself. Aengar is the type of person who wishes to see the world and it’s full light not only by seeing the darkness. He believes that it will allow him to be more at peace with the worlds creations and rukh and have an understanding of how everything works. Aengar believes  that connections are not a necessary in-order to survive and thrive. Even though when needed Aengar will make connections to succeed. Aengar is also extremely self-conscious he has to know that when someone thinks of him it’s what he wants them to think.

[b]Likes:[/b]
Aengar has multiple likes:

Magic: Aengar is a prodigy at magic he is very good at it. So the very fact that he excels at it causes him to have a deep and passionate love of magic.

Knives: Aengar is not that much a fan of swords because they slow him down and cause him to think in a slow manner.

Staffs: Aengar also has a deep love of staves he has multiple each having a different purpose.

[b]Dislikes:[/b]
Aengars dislikes vary from all different types of things

Swords: Aengar has a large dislike of swords due to the fact that they come along with things like honor and loyalty when used in the service of someone. Aengar does not like loyalty because it usually means you're working in a team and Aengar is a drastic loner and largely independent.

Fanalis: Fanalis people are strong but they are stupid and lack the common sense necessary to live in a manner that the Immuchakk live.

[b]Aspirations:[/b] Aengar’s is to reborn as a Magi. He hopes that the way he lives his life will allow for whoever, wherever to deem and see him as a worthy person to be a Magi. Aengar also hopes to master the art of spiritual silence. For a long time as a child Aengar would keep to himself and read his books so he prefered to speak to the rukh. But he needs to learn that he must be sound and collective within himself.

[b]Phobias/fears:[/b]
As a wizard Aengar fears few things, but Aengar's ultimate fear is not being able to succeed he lived his entire life with the phobia that he would not be able to live to his fullest ability. Aengar believes that goals are meant to achieve and in the entirety Aengar is scared of disappointment from himself and others. Aengar was always self-conscious but now being Chief it scares him even more. Aengar also fears other Magicians within his tribe Aengar believes he’s the most talented magician in his tribe but out in the world it is an entirely different story.
His second fear is that the world will never know his power.

[b]Face-Claim:[/b]Alviss from Mar
[b]Hair Color:[/b]Immuchakk Blue
[b]Eye Color:[/b]. Gold
[b]Height:[/b] 335.28 cm
[b]Weight:[/b]347 lbs / 157kg
[b]Appearance:[/b]
Aengar is an Immuchakk meaning he has a more built physique but his muscle definition is slightly less than the rest of the Immuchakk’s. Aengar prefers tight robes one for his upper body and some tight pants for his legs, but the most noticeable apparel is his shoes and gauntlets these both made out of leather. The shoes were painted blue and included fur inside for warmth. When seeing Aengar any human for the most part would not be able to see his face. But Aengar has extremely long hair for a male it’s around 4 to 5 feet long. But for the most part Aengars’ clothes were blue and white mostly Immuchakk colors.

[b]Rukh Alignment:[/b]White
[b]Special Traits:[/b]

[b]History:[/b]Aengar grew up in an Immuchakk village outside of the Asisiak united tribes. The village was one of the villages that was farther off more in the heart of the Northern Continent, there his people were judgemental they followed the laws and lives of their ancestors to the book. But Aengar had chosen a different path for himself. At the age of 21 Aengar had become an adult his father so proud his mother disappointed his mother saw his ability for magic. She knew that her people were going to waste his prodigy on things like tribal feuds and power grabs and large hunts. So she told him that she would get work for him a years work in the village collecting things that would worth value in the Mainland like Reim and Balbadd.
 So Aengar traveled  around the Northern Continent doing work for people and at the same time his prowess over magic grew an old Immuchakk sorcerer wanted to have these demons banished from his land so he had Aengar come in and banish them so from that Aengar received a Staff and a pair of 2  knives, knives were hand crafted and extremely beautiful. After Aengar traveled home his mother reassured him that he was ready so he walked away from Immuchakk and traveled the Northern Continent but he’s come back to manage the village after his fathers’ death. Coming back he feels is a large mistake but he knows that his father would not want to leave his village to his corrupt elders. So Aengar came back and being the sole-elder he declared a celebration  of a new generation. Aengar then dealt with all his village problems. Then elders were replaced and new elders were found to replace them. But the people still didn’t see what Aengar would change so Aengar took it upon himself to change the rule that discouraged him he made 3 new rules.
1.Magic was now allowed and he built a facility devoted to the study and use of it.
2.Everyone was required to learn a profession
3.Leaving the village was now allowed

[b]Role-Play Sample:[/b] Aengar’s people grew restless the village was finally peaceful but it was to peaceful these people only knew a life of combat and joy. Not peace and tranquility so Aengar took it upon himself to organize an event the great warriors of the tribe together tracked down a sea beast and the town was going to watch as their Chief Aengar killed it and spilt the food amongst the town. The day was breaking the warriors told Aengar that the beast was about an hour away so he prepared himself. He put on his normal attire and equipped his weapons. As he walked out of his home his guard came up to him and asked “ Chief what if the beast overpowers you?.... what will we do then?” * Aengar puts his hand on his friends shoulder and says “ The wants it nothing no matter how powerful can stop it.* The beast finally here on the edge of a cliff is where Aengar stood and that is where it all happened. The beast rose out of the waters with it’s head prepared to strike. So Aengar took to the air with the spell Gravitas Liftus and he chanted * “Air of the world, take hold of me for the worlds land shall hold no dominion over me”*  this allowed for Aengar to float not fly but float. Then he made sure to immobilize his target with a field of gravity that would make it so he won’t be able to move so he used Sinking Stone *” May the air bind you so that you may always be constricted to the ground”* Then he negotiated his levitation spell and went in with his knife and cut the head off of his foe.


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