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2Jahingir Nikator Empty Re: Jahingir Nikator 18/10/14, 06:14 pm

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-Your personality Word Count comes out to 171 and the template calls for 200. Please elaborate on it further. One easy way to do this is to think of a situation in which your character would get angry or excited and then talk about that and why they would react that way. But feel free to use other things to get the required word count, that's just a suggestion~ Another suggestion is that you could talk about his ADHD.

-The special traits should just be made blank. It's for appearance type stuff and having ADHD or wearing a Bindi aren't all that "special" nor are they "traits." This section is for things like if you want to give your character elf ears, an animal tail, or some other unusual trait not typically found in the world. It exists to let people have a bit more creative freedom with their face claims. As you'll notice in the other two points I am commenting on, there are more appropriate places where you can mention the ADHD and the bindi.

-If your character wears a bindi, you should mention it in your appearance. Although you already met the word count there so feel free to just add a single sentence. Doesn't need to be much.

-Your history came out to 318 words but the required is 350. One again, you aren't off by much and it should be fairly easy to make the word count. One suggestion for how to meet that count is for you to talk about where he got the purple bindi and why he wears it. You could also add in a bit at the end talking about where he is today, what he does for a living, and what his plans for the future are.


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4Jahingir Nikator Empty Re: Jahingir Nikator 18/10/14, 06:50 pm

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[b]Name:[/b] Jahangir Nikotor (Also responds to Jahan or Niko)
[b]Tier:[/b] D [Novice].
[b]Gender:[/b] Male
[b]Sexuality:[/b] Heterosexual
[b]Age + Birthdate:[/b]  19 yrs old born  December 12th
[b]Nationality:[/b] Reim
[b]Race:[/b] Halfing: Human/Fanalis. Born of Mix Blood between a Heliohapt human women and a Finalis of Reim.
[b]Specialization:[/b] Strength.

[b]Personality:[/b]

Carefree and adventurous. Jahangir is not a man known for being serious. If anything he hates complexities in the world and would rather keep everything straight forward. Jahangir is easy going, sly, calm and charming, yet and still he is lazy and hot tempered by nature. His behavior can often be called ludicrous if not childish many if not all of his decisions are done by sheer whim and impulse.

Jahangir has a kingly demeanor and handles himself as if he were one of high class, while this is less than true people are often fooled by it. Materialistic as he is he often spends his money on gold or clothing.

Jahangir was born with ADHD as a child he was always hyperactive, his guardians focusing that energy on training him. As an adult it has settled a bit allowing him to have moments where he lazes around or even prefers to be inactive. One case of this is with lovers, Yes ladies, he's a cuddler.

Other than that Jahangir is highly competitive and an seeks adrenaline. He loves the thrill of battle and teasing his enemies as he does so, so much to the point to he often toys with the idea of conquering a country. None the less if you can get passed his antics he can be quite the friend, rival or lover.

[b]Likes:[/b] Jahangir, Likes gold, for aesthetic reasons of coarse and how it reminds him of his dreaded past. He also loves the idea of taking gold as loot from fallen countries.

Jahangir likes nature, which is an odd thing for a person of his personality to find interesting but he is drawn to the adventure of the unknown. He longs to enter a dungeon at some point.

[b]Dislikes: [/b]School, Jahangir hates schools and orderly class room environments with a passion. He finds them all to be a system of keeping people unimaginative and in "the system".

Prisons, Jahangir hates prisons just as passionately as he hates schools if not more. From his time in them, which have been far too many, he has learn they are some of the most boring places to go. Completely Dull and lacking adventure, if he were to spend any hard time there he may very well go insane.

[b]Phobias:[/b] Fear is a rarity in Jahangir, This is the same guy that seeks adrenaline like a child seeks sweets after all. Though he does have one very large fear. Losing another loved one, its to the point to where he hesitates at friendships and romances. The memory of losing his mother and father is subtly haunting.

It gives him nightmares of having his family taken away from him, he often has nightmares of his friends dying.




[b]Aspirations:[/b]Impulse. Almost anything Jahangir does is done on a whim. The problem with this is beyond heavy spending, lives are put at risk when Jahangir gets an idea. He may very well start a war if he could, not alone the countless "mistakes" he has done in the past. He seeks adventure and his own morale implications, while existent are often looked over in favor of a short term goal.

However Jahangir does seriously want to conquer one day, he envisions himself on the throne often. He simply doesn't have the right convictions to do so at the moment, not to mention the means. He has a long ways to go before he can rule anything.


[b]Face-Claim:[/b] "Nue" by "RachityRach" (Drawing)
[b]Weight:[/b] 190 lbs.
[b]Hair Color:[/b] Black
[b]Eye Color:[/b] Lavender
[b]Height:[/b] 6 ft 1 in
[b]Rukh Alignment:[/b] White.
[b]Special Traits:[/b]
[b]Appearance:[/b] While he is Tall Jahangri sports almost no body fat, so it comes to a great surprised how muscular his body appears when unclothed. That is without a doubt the product of his heritage his father being a Fanalis he inherited the strength of one. Jahangri does however take on mainly his mothers appearance. Her deep black hair, lavender eyes and brown skin are all a product of his Heliohapt ancestry.

In battle he is stance-less, Jahangri having mastered the Long and Short sword finds using a stance to be near useless. He instead fools his opponents by taking use of his environment, often hiding his battle skills and switching between forms rhythms and intensity mid battle.

Jahangri has the body language of both a wanderer and a king. He walks with his head high up and his right foot forward, however skipping, twirling and dancing are not out of his day to day movement patterns. However he does get serious, and when he does its something akin to a lion. Another trait inherited from his father, as well as his hot blooded nature. Jahangri is known to snarl or roar even in a lion like fashion, the scrunching of his face in anger usually done before or after a fight is reminiscent of his father.


[b]History:[/b]

Jahangir is the product between the taboo relation between a Heliohapt and a finalis. One that ended in blood shed. Jahangir wasn't allowed time with his parents, not much at that. His nightmares also don't come from himself witnessing his parents deaths either. During some time Jahangir's parents started a relationship one way or another, his father being a military man and a Fanalis was woefully alleged to Reim. At the same time his mother was a citizen of Heliohapt making it impossible for Jahangir to have a "normal" life in his fathers eyes.

The couple were worried about Jahangirs fate. If allowed to stay in Heliohapt he would be forced to join the military at the age of 17. A thing that neither his father or mother wanted. So in order to avoid that his father planned to help his mother abandon Heliohapt without being persecuted. The result was less then desired. The night of the escape Jahangir and a few of his fathers military comrades made the necessary provisions to leave, but were caught unexpectedly and ambushed.

His mother and father died in the battle, however his fathers allies were able to escape with Jehangir. The boy was raised by his fathers team, them being a group of "uncle" like figures. Yet Jehangir was always...Different. His brown skin made his origins evident, but his insane strength and ability made him monstrous. He didn't have many friends his age to say the least. Any friends he did make were usually made in battle one way or another; rather that had been by saving their asses or impressing them is subjective.

The rest is simple history, Jehangir learned swordplay starting from the age of 10 and due to his military connections he had several mentors. He left his home to venture on his own at 17 however he still is often in his home country of Reim.

Jehangirs goals for now are to conquer a dungeon, he will hop at the first chance he gets to conquer. Of course he knows that for this to be possible he would need to grow in strength and power, which is why he's currently training away.

[b]Role-Play Sample:[/b] [i]Laughing[/i]. Jahangri burst into tears at the idiotic idea he would have to audition for something. Did they not know? He was a king. Well whatever, fools will always be fools. Jahangri stuck his tongue out playfully, a charming if not cute scene.

"Here this is my best effort"

They, however were not very amused. He was removed from the premises as usual. Though he may have a few more fans than usual. So it wasn't a complete failure. He furled his brow.

"Acting may not be my calling after all" Sighing he looked off into the distance. Something about how the colors melted into the sky gave him chills, he began walking towards it. Already finished with his acting endeavors.

"There's a Brand new world out there" he smiled devilishly. Time to make it mine.


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6Jahingir Nikator Empty Re: Jahingir Nikator 27/08/17, 08:57 pm

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[b]Name:[/b] Jahangir Nikotor (Also responds to Jahan or Niko)
[b]Tier:[/b] B [Novice].
[b]Gender:[/b] Male
[b]Sexuality:[/b] Heterosexual
[b]Age + Birthdate:[/b]  22 yrs old born  December 12th
[b]Nationality:[/b] Reim
[b]Race:[/b] Halfing: Human/Fanalis. Human dominant Born of Mix Blood between a Heliohapt human women and a Finalis of Reim: [url=http://magiworld.forumotion.com/t25-race-system][u]Races[/u][/url]
[b]Class:[/b]Warrior

[b]Personality:[/b]

Carefree and adventurous. Jahangir is not a man known for being serious. If anything he hates complexities in the world and would rather keep everything straight forward. Jahangir is easy going, sly, calm and charming, yet and still he is lazy and hot tempered by nature. His behavior can often be called ludacris if not childish many if not all of his decisions are done by sheer whim and impulse.

Jahangir has a kingly demeanor and handles himself as if he were one of high class, while this is less than true people are often fooled by it. Materialistic as he is he often spends his money on gold or clothing.

Jahangir was born with ADHD as a child he was always hyperactive, his guardians focusing that energy on training him. As an adult it has settled a bit allowing him to have moments where he lazes around or even prefers to be inactive. One case of this is with lovers, Yes ladies, he's a cuddler.

Other than that Jahangir is highly competitive and an seeks adrenaline. He loves the thrill of battle and teasing his enemies as he does so, so much to the point to he often toys with the idea of conquering a country. None the less if you can get passed his antics he can be quite the friend, rival or lover.

Jahanghir has however grown a new much colder and ambitious side to his nature. Years of being trapped within a shell of his mind, losing so much time have obsessed him with gaining strength.

[b]Likes:[/b] Jahangir, Likes gold, for aesthetic reasons of coarse and how it reminds him of his dreaded past. He also loves the idea of taking gold as loot from fallen countries.

Jahangir likes nature, which is an odd thing for a person of his personality to find interesting but he is drawn to the adventure of the unknown. He longs to enter a dungeon at some point.

[b]Dislikes: [/b]School, Jahangir hates schools and orderly class room environments with a passion. He finds them all to be a system of keeping people unimaginative and in "the system".

Prisons, Jahangir hates prisons just as passionately as he hates schools if not more. From his time in them, which have been far too many, he has learn they are some of the most boring places to go. Completely Dull and lacking adventure, if he were to spend any hard time there he may very well go insane.

[b]Phobias:[/b] Fear is a rarity in Jahangir, This is the same guy that seeks adrenaline like a child seeks sweets after all. Though he does have one very large fear. Losing another loved one, its to the point to where he hesitates at friendships and romances. The memory of losing his mother and father is subtly haunting.

It gives him nightmares of having his family taken away from him, he often has nightmares of his friends dying.




[b]Aspirations:[/b]Impulse. Almost anything Jahangir does is done on a whim. The problem with this is beyond heavy spending, lives are put at risk when Jahangir gets an idea. He may very well start a war if he could, not alone the countless "mistakes" he has done in the past. He seeks adventure and his own morale implications, while existent are often looked over in favor of a short term goal.

However Jahangir does seriously want to conquer one day, he envisions himself on the throne often. He simply doesn't have the right convictions to do so at the moment, not to mention the means. He has a long ways to go before he can rule anything.


[b]Face-Claim:[/b] "Nue" by "RachityRach" (Drawing)
[b]Weight:[/b] 190 lbs.
[b]Hair Color:[/b] Black
[b]Eye Color:[/b] Lavender
[b]Height:[/b] 6 ft 1 in
[b]Rukh Alignment:[/b] White.
[b]Special Traits:[/b]
[b]Appearance:[/b] While he is Tall Jahangri sports almost no body fat, so it comes to a great surprised how muscular his body appears when unclothed. That is without a doubt the product of his heritage his father being a Finalis he inherited the strength of one. Jahangri does however take on mainly his mothers appearance. Her deep black hair, lavender eyes and brown skin are all a product of his Heliohapt ancestry.

In battle he is stanceless, Jahangri having mastered the Long and Short sword finds using a stance to be near useless. He instead fools his opponents by taking use of his environment, often hiding his battle skills and switching between forms rhythms and intensity mid battle.

Jahangri has the body language of both a wanderer and a king. He walks with his head high up and his right foot forward, however skipping, twirling and dancing are not out of his day to day movement patterns. However he does get serious, and when he does its something akin to a lion. Another trait inherited from his father, as well as the hot bloodedness. Jahangri is known to snarl or roar even in a lion like fashion, the scrunching of his face in anger usually done before or after a fight is reminiscent of his father.


[b]History:[/b]

Jahangir is the product between the taboo relation between a Heliohapt and a finalis. One that ended in blood shed. Jahangir wasnt allowed time with his parents, not much at that. His nightmares also dont come from himself witnessing his parents deaths either. During some time Jahangir's parents started a relationship one way or another, his father being a military man and a finalis was woefully alleged to Reim. At the same time his mother was a citizen of Heliohapt making it impossible for Jahangir to have a "normal" life in his fathers eyes.

The couple were worried about Jahangirs fate. If allowed to stay in Heliohapt he would be forced to join the military at the age of 17. A thing that neither his father or mother wanted. So in order to avoid that his father planned to help his mother abandon Heliohapt without being persecuted. The result was less then desired. The night of the escape Jahangir and a few of his fathers military comrades made the necessary provisions to leave, but were caught unexpectedly and ambushed.

His mother and father died in the battle, however his fathers allies were able to escape with Jehangir. The boy was raised by his fathers team, them being a group of "uncle" like figures. Yet Jehangir was always...Different. His brown skin made his origins evident, but his insane strength and ability made him monstrous. He didnt have many friends his age to say the least. Any friends he did make were usually made in battle one way or another; rather that had been by saving their asses or impressing them is subjective.

The rest is simple history, Jehangir learned swordplay starting from the age of 10 and due to his military connections he had several mentors. He left his home to venture on his own at 17 however he still is often in his home country of Reim.

Jehangirs goals for now are to conquer a dungeon, he will hop at the first chance he gets to conquer. Of course he knows that for this to be possible he would need to grow in strength and power, which is why he's currently training away.

Jahan conquered his first dungeon and was quickly looking to becoming a formidable threat in the world. However fate had thrown him a wrench, being infected with an ancient parasyte that attempted to attack his mind, Jahan fell into a coma for 2 years. The only thing between him and hell was the power of his Djinn and an undomitable will power.

Now Jahanghir has awoken once more.

[b]Role-Play Sample:[/b] [i]Laughing[/i]. Jahangri burst into tears at the idiotic idea he would have to audition for something. Did they not know? He was a king. Well whatever, fools will always be fools. Jahangri stuck his tongue out playfully, a charming if not cute scene.

"Here this is my best effort"

They, however were not very amused. He was removed from the premises as usual. Though he may have a few more fans than usual. So it wasn't a complete failure. He furled his brow.

"Acting may not be my calling after all" Sighing he looked off into the distance. Something about how the colors melted into the sky gave him chills, he began walking towards it. Already finished with his acting endeavors.

"Theres a Brand new world out there" he smiled devilishly. Time to make it mine.


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