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1Leonitus the White Tiger Empty Leonitus the White Tiger on 31/07/14, 04:31 pm

Lexiara

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Leonitus the White Tiger UZV39bf
Name: Leonitus
Tier: D
Type: Brute
Species: White Tiger
Speed: 5m/s
Appearance: Leonitus is a white tiger with numerous black stripes covering his body. He has a bulky build and is 2 meters long with his tail, his body just over one meter long.
Passive Traits:

  • Paralyzing Spit - Leonitus produces a special, paralyzing enzyme in his saliva, allowing him to utilize paralyzing effects with his abilities.

Active Traits:

  • Raging Swipes – Leonitus pounces up to one meter in any direction at 10m/s up to five times.




Last edited by Lexiara on 31/07/14, 08:34 pm; edited 1 time in total


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2Leonitus the White Tiger Empty Re: Leonitus the White Tiger on 31/07/14, 08:14 pm

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Tiger Strength
-Since your beasts damage scales with it's tier, this passive ability seems pretty useless to you once you get past C-tier. I suggest thinking of something else that makes a bit more sense than, "Rwar, this tiger is strong just because it's a tiger" as it creates a bit of a problem. It implies that all Tigers are naturally strong simply because they are tigers. But if another player made a Tiger with a different passive, where would their Tiger Strength be? This is all just a suggestion though. If you'd like to keep it as is, then you can.

Raging Swipes
-Five leaps at 5m distance would add up to a total of 25m which far exceeds the scale of what is allowed for D-tier abilities. Unfortunately you'll have to lower the distance of each movement or the total number of movements.
-Are the attacks you make in between jumps part of the ability? Or just something you plan on doing  when you use it? If it's the latter then just remove any mention of attacking as it would not be relevant to the ability itself.


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Thank you all, for everything.

3Leonitus the White Tiger Empty Re: Leonitus the White Tiger on 31/07/14, 08:35 pm

Lexiara

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bump... i think?


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4Leonitus the White Tiger Empty Re: Leonitus the White Tiger on 31/07/14, 08:38 pm

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Approved and priced at 20,000 Huang. Your funds have been deducted

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[b]Name:[/b] Leonitus
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Type:[/b] Brute
[b]Species:[/b] White Tiger
[b]Speed:[/b] 5m/s
[b]Appearance:[/b] Leonitus is a white tiger with numerous black stripes covering his body. He has a bulky build and is 2 meters long with his tail, his body just over one meter long.
[b]Passive Traits:[/b]
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[*]Paralyzing Spit - Leonitus produces a special, paralyzing enzyme in his saliva, allowing him to utilize paralyzing effects with his abilities.
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[b]Active Traits:[/b]
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[*]Raging Swipes – Leonitus pounces up to one meter in any direction at 10m/s up to five times.
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Thank you all, for everything.

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