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1 ??'?? Sword Technique Lvl 1 on 14/06/18, 11:14 pm

Ja'Ro

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D-Tier
D-Tier

Flowing Stream
       Tier: D
       Class: Warrior
Type: Offensive
Range: Close - Medium | 3-10 Meters
Requirements/Drawbacks: Must be standing still
       Scaling: Power|1 Tier of Damage is added
       Sustain: 0
       Cool Down: 1
       Cost: 10
       Description:
       

           While his weapon is still sheathed, Ja'Ro gets into a offensive stance. He inhales and exhales calmly before taking a single step. All while drawing his blade. With a burst of speed and strength giving him momentum he cuts through whatever is in his path. This attack can be used to cut through every form of magic attack or physical objects. The technique itself Deals D Tier damage. However if a higher tier weapon is being used A,  D tier worth of damage is added. With a burst of speed and strength giving him momentum, he cuts through whatever is in his path within 10 meters of his starting position.



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2 Re: ??'?? Sword Technique Lvl 1 on 17/06/18, 11:30 pm

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D-Tier
Rushing Current
Tier: A
Class: Warrior
Type: Offensive, Defensive
Range: Close, Short
Requirements/Drawbacks: Expends more Stamina
Scaling: More Hits
Sustain: 0
Cool Down:1
Cost: 40
Description:

    Ja'Ro switches his tempo and begins attacking his opponent ruthlessly. His swings may appear wild, but they serve a purpose, to throw his opponents off balance. His they keep their composure then he is quickly able to dodge and counter attack. This allows him to put space between him and his opponent. Each strike, between 1-8, are D tier. More hits are added for scaling.



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3 Re: ??'?? Sword Technique Lvl 1 on 19/06/18, 02:07 am

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D-Tier
Rushing Current Phase 2
Tier: A
Class: Warrior
Type: Defensive, Offensive
Range: Close, Short
Requirements/Drawbacks: Opponent must be on the offensive
Scaling: One Tier Damage
Sustain: 0
Cool Down:1
Cost: 40
Description:
Ja'Ro switches his tempo, with this technique his patiently waits as he works his way through his opponents defenses or attacks, dodging D-Tier damage. Once close enough he attacks with a single strike, dealing B-Tier damage. He can dodge and additional tier of damage and inflict an additional tier of damage after scaling.



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4 Re: ??'?? Sword Technique Lvl 1 on 20/06/18, 11:21 pm

Just like the sword techniques, first thing I'm noticing is that D-Tier skills can't be dual types. They can only be offensive, defensive, or supplementary because if they are two types, the damage they are dealing, effect they are causing, or damage they are blocking is halved.

All offensive skills are missing the damage being dealt.

All skills are missing a set range in the description. Here's a few basic examples:

  • The enemy must be 5 meters away.
  • Player A deals D-Tier damage to anyone within 10 meters of himself.


Also, speed does not exist as it did before. In fact speed doesn't really exist in terms of abilities (save for light or lightning magic possible being instantaneous). The being said, using speed as your scaling doesn't make much sense in the current systems.

TLDR Version

Change the following:

  • D-Tier skills can only be one Type
  • You are missing a set range in your description
  • You are missing the damage dealt, damage blocked, or supplementary effect tier in your description
  • You have 6 abilities up for grading (three here and three in Fighting Style Lvl 1. You are only allowed 5 free abilities when making a new character: 4 D-Tier and 1 C-Tier. You are free to make any of them C-Tier, but one of the six skills you must train.


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5 Re: ??'?? Sword Technique Lvl 1 on 25/06/18, 04:28 pm

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6 Re: ??'?? Sword Technique Lvl 1 on 29/06/18, 02:09 pm


Flowing Stream
Scaling: This is not an appropriate scaling since speeds do not exist in abilities.

Reminder: D-Tier skills are incapable of cutting through things, especially if they are of higher tier. At best they can cause bruises or bump certain objects, so if someone was in your way or was stronger than D-Tier, your blade will not cut through them.


Rushing Current
D-Tier abilities are simple in nature: a single sword swing or a punch. There is too much going on in this ability to be considered a D-Tier. You are trying to disorient the opponent (supplementary), dodge (defensive), and attack. That’s too much for any ability, especially a D-Tier.


Rushing Current Phase 2
Range: Must be close
Description: Your current wording is unclear and confusing. Instead of “Ja'Ro switches his tempo, with this technique his patiently waits as he works his way through his opponents defenses or attacks. Once close enough he attacks with a single powerful strike. Does B tier damage after scaling.”, perhaps you should have this instead:

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“Ja'Ro switches his tempo, with this technique his patiently waits as he works his way through his opponents defenses or attacks, dodging D-Tier damage. Once close enough he attacks with a single strike, dealing D-Tier damage. He can dodge and additional tier of damage and inflict an additional tier of damage after scaling."

I included the damage you are capable of dodging and the damage dealt. The reason why both are only D-Tier is because this ability is a dual-type C-Tier skill. Dual-type skills always split the tier between the two types of effects you are trying to implement in a single ability.


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7 Re: ??'?? Sword Technique Lvl 1 on 30/06/18, 11:53 pm

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D-Tier
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8 Re: ??'?? Sword Technique Lvl 1 on 01/07/18, 02:27 pm


Flowing Stream
Description: Remove the last sentence. It honestly just hinders yourself. Instead of “This technique deals D-Tier damage.” you should put “This attack deals D-Tier damage unless Ja’Ro is wielding a higher tiered weapon. Then, the technique deals the weapon tier’s damage.” Also, include the range in your description.

Range in Description:

With a burst of speed and strength giving him momentum, he cuts through whatever is in his path within 10 meters of his starting position.

Important Note: Cutting through gaseous or liquid magic spells will do nothing, especially if they are AoE and a higher tier. The only spells you would be able to effectively “cut through” are life (if they involve plants), strength (though it is still difficult for you to see them), ice, combination magic spells that involve solid constructs, and so on.


Rushing Current & Rushing Current Phase 2
These abilities are denied. You are a D-Tier character and as such you are not allowed A-Tier abilities. You did not change the range like I told you to do either.

Also, changing the Tier of Rushing Current does not change my original grading for its description. No ability, regardless of Tier, can achieve a supplementary, defensive, and offensive type all in one. Also, the requirements/drawbacks would need to change; expending more stamina is not a suitable drawback.


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9 Re: ??'?? Sword Technique Lvl 1 on 01/07/18, 03:37 pm

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D-Tier
I'm fine with just flowing stream


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10 Re: ??'?? Sword Technique Lvl 1 on 01/07/18, 04:26 pm

I have made slight modifications to the ability Flowing Stream below. If the ability looks okay to you and you understand the important note I left in the previous grading concerning magic spells, please bump this thread.



Flowing Stream
Tier: D
Class: Warrior
Type: Offensive
Range: Close - Medium | 3-10 Meters
Requirements/Drawbacks: Must be standing still
Scaling: Power|1 Tier of Damage is added
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 1
Cost: 10
Description:
       

           While his weapon is still sheathed, Ja'Ro gets into a offensive stance. He inhales and exhales calmly before taking a single step. All while drawing his blade. With a burst of speed and strength giving him momentum, he cuts through whatever is in his path within 10 meters of his starting position. This attack can be used to cut through every form of magic attack or physical objects. This attack deals D-Tier damage. However, if Ja’Ro is wielding a higher tiered weapon, then the technique deals the weapon tier’s damage as per system rules.


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11 Re: ??'?? Sword Technique Lvl 1 on 03/07/18, 01:59 am

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12 Re: ??'?? Sword Technique Lvl 1 on 03/07/18, 02:47 am

The following ability has been APPROVED*:

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[center][b]Flowing Stream[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Warrior
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close - Medium | 3-10 Meters
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Must be standing still
[b]Scaling:[/b] Power|1 Tier of Damage is added
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1
[b]Cost:[/b] 10
[b]Description:[/b]
       
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       While his weapon is still sheathed, Ja'Ro gets into a offensive stance. He inhales and exhales calmly before taking a single step. All while drawing his blade. With a burst of speed and strength giving him momentum, he cuts through whatever is in his path within 10 meters of his starting position. This attack can be used to cut through every form of magic attack or physical objects. This attack deals D-Tier damage. However, if Ja’Ro is wielding a higher tiered weapon, then the technique deals the weapon tier’s damage as per system rules.[/list]


*Approved techniques are still subject to change if any issues arise in future threads concerning these abilities or if another staff member notices errors in the grader's grading. If such a scenario occurs, staff is welcome and allowed to look over them again and tweak them if necessary.


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