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1 ??'?? on 05/06/18, 05:37 am

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"Life is 10% what happens to you and 90% how you react to it...How will you react?"
   Name: Ja'ro (Jar-oh) | Ro
   Country Affiliation: Wanderer
   Race: Human
   Tier: D
   Class:

  • Warrior D Tier
  • Beast Tamer Locked

   Age + Birthdate: 23 | 12/11
   Gender: Male
   Sexuality: Heterosexual
   Personality:

  • Kind | Ja'Ro is one of the kindest gentlemen that one could ever meet. That being said he is no push over nor is he gullible. He often has a slight smile on his face; when he does smile it is always a warm one. He treats most people as if the were his Grandchildren, often giving each one they're own nickname. He prefers staying out of the way, but when needed he is a excellent negotiator; calming down most heated situations.
  • Fierce | Whether it be from is presence or the indomitable will; ferocious gaze, or how he can change the tone of his voice to fit the situation. Ja'Ro, if he wanted, could easily stand on his own against a platoon of soldiers and defeat them with ease. When he enters a room he can be felt before he is seen. Its soft of a regal aura he emits; that pairs well with he unique Golden eyes and dark sun tanned skin.
  • Jokster | How has he lived as long as he has? Well one part is his generous sense of humor. Due to him being around for son long he understand most jokes finding the more ridiculous the joke, the funnier it is. He will also tease his opponents in the middle of the fight. If he notices something that amuses him Ja'Ro will point it out. He is also known for playing jokes on random people. Its never rally anything that'll harm someone.
  • Suave | If there's one thing that keeps Ja'Ro spry is women. He is definitely a womanizer in the sense that he loves to flirt with them. That being mentioned Ja'Ro is a True gentleman; often saying "Chivalry is not dead." He is a smooth talker to say the least. He's coined the phrase "My spoon isn't silver. It is golden, because iv'e earned it."
  • Seasoned | Whether it be in combat, politics, or even courting a woman Ja'Ro is a little more experienced then the average person. There's a strong possibility that it's due to his age. Having actually lived a century he's picked up a few things. Him being outwitted only happens if he allows himself to be. He is a man who can teach all with a simple phrase "No one is neither to old or young to learn from someone." That's why he continues to learn.

   Likes:

  • Rice; It doesnt matter the type of Rice. White Rice, Brown rice, Long Grain Rice, Clean Rice, Dirty Rice, Stemmed Rice, Fried Rice. Ja'Ro loves it all.
  • Writing Haiku's; For some reason he is horrible at writing Haiku's but loves scribbling them down any times he gets a chance.
  • Flirting with Women; As long as they're of age, Ja'Ro indulges himself in making women smile and fawn over him.
  • Endangered Species; Any sort of endangered animal Ja'Ro takes extra steps in preserving the species.

   Dislikes:

  • Over Salted Foods; Some people know the correct seasoning ratio and some don't. Ja'Ro cannot stand the latter.
  • Cock Blockers; "All these woman and you want to muscle in on mine."
  • Villians; Who likes Bad people except other bad people? Exactly.
  • Slavery of All; Especially of Fanalis; Slavery in general is a and always has been a outdated concept; its bothered Ja'Ro for centuries...

   Aspirations:

  • Create A Moving Fortress. Create a safe haven on a Island for the Fanalis. This 'haven' will be built on the back of the Akua Akua. There is a story of a giant moving island known as Akua Akua, or God's Island. No one has ever found the island and proven its existence, because it's a Giant Beast that remains dormant until it feels the need to move, leaving its existence to live only in a story for now.
  • Conquer Dungeons until his Final Days Ja'Ro has never been in one dungeon, but has always seen them pop up. He wants to from now on enter every dungeon he can.
  • Abolish Slavery This one is pretty straight forward. The idea of slavery has always been outdated since its conception.

   Phobias/fears:

  • Love; Love can be crippling and women of fickle for Ja'Ro that combination is dangerous.
  • Dementia Ja'Ro has seen and done so much that he feels if he ever forgot anything he would be forgetting a piece of himself.
  • Being AloneThanks to his beast, hes never alone, however Ja'Ro is scared of True solitude. Truly being left a lone may drive him to insanity.
    The Death of this World; Something that has multiple meanings for Ja'Ro. Whether that be with the rise of depravity, or the world itself going into chaos, regardless Ja'Ro would rather see this world be a fun, happy place, that everyone can enjoy.

   Face-Claim:Kotomine, Shirou
   Hair Color: Silver
   Eye Color: Golden
   Height: 195.58 cm
   Weight: 83.9146 kg
   Appearance: Starting with his demeanor; Ja'Ro usually has a sort of smirk or mischievous smile. Not to say that constantly planning something. It's more of he is happy to be a live, to see the sun among other things. He is just a generally cheerful person. From toe to head; Ja'Ro sports a plain yet comfortable outfit. His shoes black yet perfect for fighting or for going on a daytime stroll. Whatever the need they are his go to pair. He wears a simple pair of black pants similar to hi shoes in versatility. He rotates shirts however. He either opts to wear a black long sleeve that covers his neck or a simple short sleeve white tee. Although he dresses rather 'plain' Ja'Ro wears a Golden Cross Pendant. He also dons a pair of sterling earrings.

   Rukh Alignment: White
   Special Features: None
   History:
Year 1-20| Somewhere in the heart of the dark continent there is a large cave; the entrance however is more accessible to quadrupeds than it is to people. From the small opening, light from a fire is flickering against the stone walls. Inside heavy breathing can be heard; a beautiful woman is groaning loudly, as a brown skinned man holds her hand tightly."Stay Strong Janna." said the man passionately. What was the woman doing? Giving birth; after several attempts to get pregnant here she was giving birth to a son. The more she was able to push out her child the more that ruhk began to flutter around them. At first neither was able to notice; it wasn't until Janna's final push that ruhk flooded into the cave. The very life of the world made itself visible to couple. Panting heavily Janna smiles lovingly, as Ge'Ro hands her they're son after wiping him off with a tattered rag."Ja'Ro our beautiful baby boy. You will do great things. Even the world sees it. Never give up."

The years that followed Ja'Ro proved the words of his mother to be true. As a child he showed no fear to anything. Going as far as entering the den of a king beast just to play; eventually taking a nap. Of course the King Beast wasn't thrilled about a Fanalis child being in its home. Luckily for Ja'Ro his parents made sure to keep tabs on him. Keeping him from hurting himself.

Ge'Ro taught his son everything he could; how to be a man, how to provide, how to defend himself among many other things. While Janna taught him life skills and how to love.

Year 20 - Current

In these three years Ja'Ro truly became a man. He left from the dark continent to pursue whats become know as Dungeons. He's heard many things about these constructs. Even some 'light' reaches the dark continent. For someone who grew up having too hunt to survive, a dungeon which grants it conqueror riches beyond they're imagination. How could he not leave his home in order to bring back the light. He has many people's aspirations on his back and he intends to make good on accomplishing his goals.

Year 30-40 "You expect me to remember this? Damn Kids always asking for the unreasonable. Noir pass me my flask. Ares was such a good boy wasn't he."
Year 41-60 "Ummm?"
Year 61-80 "I'm to old for all this. 100 years is a long time. I probably know you're great grandparents. Matter fact you might be my grandchild. I have been around for a few years. Wait what was I even doing when I was 80? Shyyt my 60's and 70's were amazing. You'd be surprised how many young women want a 'Father Figure' Ha!"
Year 81-100 "Fuck y'all I'm going to bed for 20 years."  "Guess its time to get off my ass." Ja'Ro says as he puts on his glasses. "I've been sleep for a very long time. Looks like the world finally needs me."

   Role-Play Sample:
Dynatos walked besides Ares; Athena rode a top the large canine. Dynatos was eager to leave Heliohapt, however he ended up being delayed by something...interesting. Even still they walked with a slow pace. Might as well take a stroll one last time. Who knows when he'd be able to come back. He began soaking it all in. Dynatos and grown greatly since he had been in Heliohapt. He even a swing of a sword shy of obtaining a Djinn. That experience made him want to once again challenge a Dungeon.

The dock slowly began to become visible. Ares was able to see Noir before Dynatos could. However the Fanalis man knew his beast and patted him. "You'll be able to see Haku soon." Dynatos said with a chuckle. He eventually got with voice reach of Noir. "Sorry something came up..." He said trailing off not wanting to talk about it at the moment. Ares ran straight to Haku and began barking. Ares seemed to like Haku for various reasons. Athena flew over to the small fox that noir now was taking care of.
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2 Re: ??'?? on 06/06/18, 01:10 am

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I'm Ready


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3 Re: ??'?? on 06/06/18, 10:45 am

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Y’all just gonna ignore my Character Sheet


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4 Re: ??'?? on 06/06/18, 11:28 am

Ramses

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Here’s one

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5 Re: ??'?? on 06/06/18, 11:32 am

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And this one

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6 Re: ??'?? on 06/06/18, 02:20 pm

This is all well and good, but there are some issues:

Aspirations: This only has 61 out of the 75 WC requirement. Please add more.

Phobias/Fears: This only has 64 out of the 75 WC requirement. Please add more.

Rukh: Gold rukh does not exist. Please choose either White Rukh or Black Rukh

Special Features: This section involves any distinguishing markings or features that are on your character that is otherwise abnormal or unique to you. Such examples include animal ears and tail, extra fingers, physical deformity, different hair color than normal racial standards despite being an Imuchakk or Fanalis, tattoos, body scars, split personalities, voices in the head, etc. Though golden eyes would most certainly fit this category, the ability to see through the eyes of all characters you have made and will make does not. Whether or not such sight is allowed will be discussed depending on the extent of this sight (i.e. Does he see every detail that your other characters see? Is it only sight? What real benefit are you hoping to get from this?), so stay tuned for that.

Other than that, this is my current grading on this character.


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7 Re: ??'?? on 06/06/18, 03:47 pm

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It’s More Of keeping the character in the loop. That way previous relations etc aren’t lost.


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8 Re: ??'?? on 06/06/18, 04:52 pm

Even if it was allowed (which right now is unclear because we don't really know what this really means), you don't even explain how it works or how he got this special trait. Something like this should be explained. Has he lived through your other characters or what?

EDIT: Furthermore, how can this character have been in a dungeon and which? I know he is old, but he is and will start out as a D-Tier, so it feels weird for that information to be there.


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9 Re: ??'?? on 06/06/18, 04:59 pm

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Yes he has lived through them
Dynatos has been in a dungeon, so in turn Ja’Ro has experienced it.


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10 Re: ??'?? on 06/06/18, 08:03 pm

Such an attribute could only exist via a shard. Beyond that, the exact features of such a trait would need to be discussed amongst staff.


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11 Re: ??'?? on 07/06/18, 10:45 pm

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12 Re: ??'?? on 09/06/18, 12:13 pm

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That should do it


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13 Re: ??'?? on 09/06/18, 04:32 pm

Does this

Create A Moving Fortress of a Island for the Fanalis; There is a giant moving island known as Akua Akua, or God's Island.

refer to the island you will be making despite you also saying it exists?

You'll also need to fix the coding.


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14 Re: ??'?? on 10/06/18, 02:30 am

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There's nothing that needs to be fixed. I'm not going to fix anything. I will be taking that post as a approval and i'm going to continue on with the rest of my creation process.


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15 Re: ??'?? on 10/06/18, 03:53 pm

I asked for clarification on one of your aspirations and for you to fix the coding, which yes, should be fixed as I doubt it's for aesthetics. I did not approve this and nothing you make for this character will be approved until your application has been officially approved, just like everyone else. I apologize for this taking time and for me being difficult, but you do not get to decide when you are approved and ignore what a staff member says because you want to rush things or undermine staff.

The issues are as follows:


  • Coding - Everything below Class is in a list, and I doubt that is for aesthetics. Please fix.
  • Character Tier and Classees - The Beta Event is over, so nobody should be allowed to retcon their character at this point, especially since you did not tell the person grading directly that you were retconning an old character. You will be starting fresh with a D-Rank character, but you will still be allowed to keep items.
  • Wording - I asked about on of your aspirations because even though it is an aspiration, you write it like it already exists and therefore couldn't be an aspiration. I also understand that this character's age was changed and that you kept the years 30-100 for a reason, but the flaws in the app referring to or suggesting his age being older than 23 is not only odd but makes little to no sense in its current format. This is merely to help others understand your application better and to not be confused upon reading it if they were to be interested.


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16 Re: ??'?? on 10/06/18, 05:51 pm

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@Adrastos Thanatos wrote:I asked for clarification on one of your aspirations and for you to fix the coding, which yes, should be fixed as I doubt it's for aesthetics. I did not approve this and nothing you make for this character will be approved until your application has been officially approved, just like everyone else. I apologize for this taking time and for me being difficult, but you do not get to decide when you are approved and ignore what a staff member says because you want to rush things or undermine staff.

The issues are as follows:


  • Coding - Everything below Class is in a list, and I doubt that is for aesthetics. Please fix.
  • Character Tier and Classees - The Beta Event is over, so nobody should be allowed to retcon their character at this point, especially since you did not tell the person grading directly that you were retconning an old character. You will be starting fresh with a D-Rank character, but you will still be allowed to keep items.
  • Wording - I asked about on of your aspirations because even though it is an aspiration, you write it like it already exists and therefore couldn't be an aspiration. I also understand that this character's age was changed and that you kept the years 30-100 for a reason, but the flaws in the app referring to or suggesting his age being older than 23 is not only odd but makes little to no sense in its current format. This is merely to help others understand your application better and to not be confused upon reading it if they were to be interested.


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17 Re: ??'?? on 11/06/18, 01:21 am

Then this character will not be approved.


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18 Re: ??'?? on 11/06/18, 02:21 am

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19 Re: ??'?? on 11/06/18, 02:51 am


  1. Your tier can't be A-Tier. You will be starting from scratch: a D-Rank character with a D-Tier primary.
  2. Your aspiration for a flying Fanalis sanctuary is worded as if it already exists and therefore wouldn't be an aspiration. This doesn't even take into account that it wouldn't exist anyway without proper plot development.


I'll disregard how you seem to always be around when a dungeon happens to pop up so long as you don't claim to have seen all or most of them appear before your eyes and the dementia phobia, because that shouldn't be a logical fear for a 23 year-old since dementia normally doesn't affect anyone younger than 40-60 years old.

So just fix the two issues I listed out.


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20 Re: ??'?? on 11/06/18, 02:58 am

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@Adrastos Thanatos wrote:

  1. Your tier can't be A-Tier. You will be starting from scratch: a D-Rank character with a D-Tier primary.
  2. Your aspiration for a flying Fanalis sanctuary is worded as if it already exists and therefore wouldn't be an aspiration. This doesn't even take into account that it wouldn't exist anyway without proper plot development.


I'll disregard how you seem to always be around when a dungeon happens to pop up so long as you don't claim to have seen all or most of them appear before your eyes and the dementia phobia, because that shouldn't be a logical fear for a 23 year-old since dementia normally doesn't affect anyone younger than 40-60 years old.

So just fix the two issues I listed out.

1. So what Old members can't revamp anymore?
2. It isn't flying; It does exist; No one inhabits it; I obviously am going to obtain it through plot. I've mentioned that before. Very Happy


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21 Re: ??'?? on 11/06/18, 03:22 am

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I fixed the Tier after a brief discussion


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22 Re: ??'?? on 11/06/18, 03:57 am

Your moving island then. It's still worded in such a way that you have your own interpretation and others have theirs, making it unclear and confusing.


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23 Re: ??'?? on 11/06/18, 04:22 am

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That should be better


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24 Re: ??'?? on 12/06/18, 09:35 pm

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25 Re: ??'?? on 12/06/18, 10:54 pm

I'd suggest rewording the aspiration to say the following:

Create A Moving Fortress. Create a safe haven on a Island for the Fanalis. This 'haven' will be built on the back of the Akua Akua. There is a story of a giant moving island known as Akua Akua, or God's Island. No one has ever found the island and proven its existence, because it's a Giant Beast that remains dormant until it feels the need to move, leaving its existence to live only in a story for now.

The reason for this is that it does not outright mean the creature exists, but you'd still be able to achieve the dream by going through plot (probably through Beast Tamer). It would feel more realistic and offer better story and character development depending on how things unfold or how you go about hunting down this myth to prove it exists, if this makes any sense


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