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1Xanvar [Starter Beast] Empty Xanvar [Starter Beast] on 21/12/17, 02:28 pm

Xanvar [Starter Beast] Yellow+worm

Name: Golden Blood Worm
Tier: D-Tier
Type: Parasite/Symbiote
Species: Blood Worm
Appearance: A small golden worm about the length of a finger (10cm) that resides in the flesh of its host. The worm is like ay other worm, except it is golden.
Description for personal use:
The worm is not detrimental, or dangerous, and is considered a blessed creature in some culture. In order to continue living, and give birth to children, the worm gives birth unisexually and lays eggs. While most parasites lay eggs that eventually devour the host, the worm cannot live but a day outside of a host unless it is still in its egg. Since the worm is so reliant on keeping a single host, it has developed traits that help keep its host alive.
Beast Traits: (See the Trait Systems for more info.)

Trait Name: Wound Filling
Trait Tier: D-Tier
Trait Requirement: Being a Blood Worm
Trait Description: The bloodworm travels throughouts its host body regularly, and when doing this it spits out a corrosive liquid in front of it to move. In order to prevent holes from building up within the hosts body, the worm secretes a goo from its backside that acts as a suppliment for the flesh around it, becoming energy for cells to quickly come in and replace it.
Trait Effect:  Allows character to register healing abilities.

Trait Name: Toxin Resistance
Trait Tier: D-Tier
Trait Requirement: Being a Golden Blood Worm.
Trait Description: The worm has, over time, developed a resistance to toxins by surviving and reproducing after its host had been poisoned. When a host is poisoned, the snake migrates towards the heart and connects to the blood stream, breaking down the toxins that flow towards the heart, preventing the spreading of toxins.
Trait Effect: Can break down D-Tier Toxins. (Resistant to D-Tier Poisons)

Trait Name: Golden Protection
Trait Tier: D-Tier
Trait Requirement: Being a Golden Blood Worm.
Trait Description: The blood worms strongest trait that improves as the worm grows. The golden blood worms determination to survive has led it to develop an ability that protect the host in the event of an attack. It releases a chemical into the blood stream that absorbs minerals into the blood stream then out through the pours. This causes a layer of golden skin to coat the body.
Trait Effect: Allows the user to defend against D-Tier attacks.



Last edited by Chikara Yaoko Xwuxiao on 29/12/17, 06:21 pm; edited 6 times in total

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2Xanvar [Starter Beast] Empty Re: Xanvar [Starter Beast] on 26/12/17, 08:26 am

Ariel

Ariel
A-Tier
A-Tier
Venom Glands

This trait was technically fine, but for the sake of clarity, I reworded your trait. Make sure you tell me if this is good or not lol.
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[b]Trait Name:[/b] Venom Glands.
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] D-Tier
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Being a Flat Snake.
[b]Trait Description:[/b] The snake has venom within glands in its head. Over generations, the hunting methods of the snake had changed, causing it to develop the ability to spit venom to assist in constricting its preys' movements.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Allows the beast to register venom-based abilities. These abilities have the potential to induce paralysis, slowed movements, and fatigue.

Constricting Muscles
Firstly, considering this is a D-Tier trait, you would not be able to have two effects. Secondly, you should be able to constrain your enemies without a trait anyway.

Hardened Scales
I would do something like Diana has with her beast. She basically can null damage one tier lower than her beast. This may sound disadvantageous, but in the long run, I think you will find it to be most effective. That being said, if you still want to go through with this trait for now and change it later, I'll approve it.


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3Xanvar [Starter Beast] Empty Re: Xanvar [Starter Beast] on 28/12/17, 04:52 am

Bump: I changed it ;I

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4Xanvar [Starter Beast] Empty Re: Xanvar [Starter Beast] on 28/12/17, 05:05 am

Ariel

Ariel
A-Tier
A-Tier
Traits aren't supposed to cost stamina.
Also, you do need a drawback. Maybe put it in the description or something?

Wound Filling

- I'd change this to allow the beast to register healing abilities.

Golden Revival

- I'm afraid this isn't something a D-Tier trait could do. It's way too strong for a D-Tier trait.


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5Xanvar [Starter Beast] Empty Re: Xanvar [Starter Beast] on 29/12/17, 05:26 pm

Bumpity

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6Xanvar [Starter Beast] Empty Re: Xanvar [Starter Beast] on 29/12/17, 06:26 pm

Ariel

Ariel
A-Tier
A-Tier

Added the drawback as per discussed in our conversation.
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[img]https://3.bp.blogspot.com/-iNBjOUnrang/T8XfitAuefI/AAAAAAAACcU/ynWwPv42UAI/s1600/yellow+worm.JPG[/img]

[b]Name:[/b] Golden Blood Worm
[b]Tier:[/b] D-Tier
[b]Type:[/b] Parasite/Symbiote
[b]Species:[/b] Blood Worm
[b]Appearance:[/b] A small golden worm about the length of a finger (10cm) that resides in the flesh of its host. The worm is like any other worm, except it is golden.
[b]Description:[/b]
The worm is not detrimental, or dangerous, and is considered a blessed creature in some culture. In order to continue living, and give birth to children, the worm gives birth unisexually and lays eggs. While most parasites lay eggs that eventually devour the host, the worm cannot live but a day outside of a host unless it is still in its egg. Since the worm is so reliant on keeping a single host, it has developed traits that help keep its host alive.

The worm's movements may induce internal pain as it attempts to close/heal any injury, though it does not harm the inside. However, the pain may cause the user's movements to slow slightly for one post.

[b]Beast Traits:[/b] (See the Trait Systems for more info.)

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Wound Filling
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] D-Tier
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Being a Blood Worm
[b]Trait Description:[/b] The bloodworm travels throughout its host body regularly, and when doing this it spits out a corrosive liquid in front of it to move. In order to prevent holes from building up within the host's body, the worm secretes a goo from its backside that acts as a supplement for the flesh around it, becoming energy for cells to quickly come in and replace it.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b]  Allows the character to register healing abilities.

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Toxin Resistance
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] D-Tier
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Being a Golden Blood Worm.
[b]Trait Description:[/b] The worm has, over time, developed a resistance to toxins by surviving and reproducing after its host had been poisoned. When a host is poisoned, the snake migrates towards the heart and connects to the bloodstream, breaking down the toxins that flow towards the heart, preventing the spreading of toxins.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Can break down D-Tier Toxins. (Resistant to D-Tier Poisons)

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Golden Protection
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] D-Tier
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Being a Golden Blood Worm.
[b]Trait Description:[/b] The bloodworms strongest trait that improves as the worm grows. The golden blood worms determination to survive has led it to develop an ability that protects the host in the event of an attack. It releases a chemical into the bloodstream that absorbs minerals into the bloodstream then out through the pours. This causes a layer of golden skin to coat the body.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Allows the user to defend against D-Tier attacks.


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