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Name: Nervus
Tier: D
Type: Parasite
Species: Parasitic Worm
Appearance: The bulk of the parasitic worm is bagel shaped, 6mm wide and 3mm thick, with several tails 1mm thick. There is a main tail, 2mm thick that is constantly growing in accordance with it's age. It is located and attached at the brain stem, it's tails trailing down the spine.
Drawback: If the host is struck by electricity, the host is unable to access any of the parasites traits or abilities enabled by the parasite for their next post.

Beast Traits:

Trait Name:Intelligence I
Trait Tier: D
Trait Requirement: A human host.
Trait Description: Nervus gains a level of self-awareness and intelligence, in accordance with it's host. With these new thoughts, the parasite can also communicate it's own feelings, as well as images and sounds.
Trait Effect: Allows Nervus to use its hosts brain to form it's own thoughts, allowing it the ability to think like a dog. Nervus can communicate its feelings, pictures and sounds to the host, based on past experiences.


Trait Name: Autopilot I
Trait Tier:D
Trait Requirement: Sleeping host.
Trait Description: Nervus has now gained some autonomy. Whenever the host is asleep, it forces the host to sleepwalk to experience the world on its own.
Trait Effect: Nervus can now control the host while it's asleep via natural means. Up to two posts. Can only perform basic actions.

Trait Name: Electroception I
Trait Tier:D
Trait Requirement: Host
Trait Description: Nervus has an electricity-sensing organ, which is how it has navigated itself to 8's spinal cord and brain stem.
Trait Effect: Nervus can sense bio-electricity signatures within 3 meters of itself, it can tell distance and direction, and it is perceived as touch.



Last edited by Eight on 17/02/18, 11:40 pm; edited 5 times in total

Diana Corvus

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First, I will say that these traits are much too vague.

I would recommend going through each of these and asking yourself:

"What does this do for the host exactly?"

While these are low tier traits, being a symbiote / parasite, they still need some sort of drawback for what they are doing. If you need to, you can message me so we can brainstorm what exactly you want out of this beast because from what is here, I can't quite tell what kind of abilities you'd wish to make for this.


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Shishi

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Bump, gonna delay abilities for now. Just want it for plot purposes for now. :) Thanks.


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Diana Corvus

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Okay. So, as we discussed, despite not wanting to make abilities for this parasite right now, the traits need to be edited.




For a D tier trait, having access to such high intelligence is a bit much, in my opinion. This should only allow it to think at a primitive level. Like very simple thoughts.

Trait Name:Intelligence I
Trait Tier: D
Trait Requirement: A human host.
Trait Description: Nervus gains a level of self-awareness and intelligence, in accordance with it's host.
Trait Effect: Allows Nervus to use its hosts brain to form it's own thoughts, allowing it the ability to think like a human.

I don't quite know the exact purpose of this trait as it could easily be linked in with the one above from how I'm understanding it.

Trait Name: Communication I
Trait Tier: D
Trait Requirement: A host.
Trait Description: Now that Nervus has began to form thought, it has just recently gained the concept of communication. It alters messages being sent to the brain, allowing it to communicate, at this level, it can only communicate its own feelings.
Trait Effect: Nervus can communicate its feelings to the host.

This could pass but it *is* pushing it a little bit. This needs a duration, around 2 posts before it can't control the body any longer. It would only be allowed to preform simple basic actions as well during the time it is active.

Trait Name: Autopilot I
Trait Tier:D
Trait Requirement: Sleeping host.
Trait Description: Nervus has now gained some autonomy. Whenever the host is asleep, it forces the host to sleepwalk to experience the world on its own.
Trait Effect: Nervus can now control the host while it's asleep.


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Shishi

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Bump.
Lowered intelligence to that of a dog, and add communication to it.
Added electroception.


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Diana Corvus

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Approved.

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[b]Name:[/b] Nervus
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Type:[/b] Parasite
[b]Species:[/b] Parasitic Worm
[b]Appearance:[/b] The bulk of the parasitic worm is bagel shaped, 6mm wide and 3mm thick, with several tails 1mm thick. There is a main tail, 2mm thick that is constantly growing in accordance with it's age. It is located and attached at the brain stem, it's tails trailing down the spine.
[b]Drawback:[/b] If the host is struck by electricity, the host is unable to access any of the parasites traits or abilities enabled by the parasite for their next post.

[b]Beast Traits:[/b]

[b]Trait Name:[/b]Intelligence I
[b]Trait Tier:[/b] D
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] A human host.
[b]Trait Description:[/b] Nervus gains a level of self-awareness and intelligence, in accordance with it's host. With these new thoughts, the parasite can also communicate it's own feelings, as well as images and sounds.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Allows Nervus to use its hosts brain to form it's own thoughts, allowing it the ability to think like a dog. Nervus can communicate its feelings, pictures and sounds to the host, based on past experiences.


[b]Trait Name:[/b] Autopilot I
[b]Trait Tier:[/b]D
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Sleeping host.
[b]Trait Description:[/b] Nervus has now gained some autonomy. Whenever the host is asleep, it forces the host to sleepwalk to experience the world on its own.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Nervus can now control the host while it's asleep via natural means. Up to two posts.  Can only perform basic actions.

[b]Trait Name:[/b] Electroception I
[b]Trait Tier:[/b]D
[b]Trait Requirement:[/b] Host
[b]Trait Description:[/b] Nervus has an electricity-sensing organ, which is how it has navigated itself to 8's spinal cord and brain stem.
[b]Trait Effect:[/b] Nervus can sense bio-electricity signatures within 3 meters of itself, it can tell distance and direction, and it is perceived as touch.


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