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1Jingyi's Starting Abilities Empty Jingyi's Starting Abilities 22/02/17, 08:11 pm

Jingyi Hou

Jingyi Hou
A-Tier
A-Tier

Cutting Grass
Tier: C
Class: Warrior
Type: Offensive
Range: Short 1m-3m
Requirements/Drawbacks: The user must be wielding a light sword and must have their feet planted while standing in stance.
Scaling: Damage
Sustain: 0
Cooldown: 2 post
Cost: 20 Stamina
Description:

    The user plants their feet firmly into the ground and raises their sword before swinging it downwards in an arc that deals D-Tier damage. The user then takes a step forwards before swinging the sword upwards in a diagonal swipe dealing D-Tier damage once more. The two attacks combine to deal C-Tier damage.



Hypnotic Viper
Tier: D
Class: Warrior
Type: Offensive
Range: Short (1m-3m)
Requirements/Drawbacks: Users must grip their sword outstretched with both hands and stand with their knees bent (Mamushi Stance). The user must shift into the Mamushi Stance before use of the attack.
Scaling: Damage
Sustain: 0
Cooldown: 1 posts
Cost: 10 Stamina
Description:

    Jingyi shifts into the Mamushi Stance before starting to weave and bob around her opponent while making use of the red tassel/cloth on her sword to distract the enemy from her blade. The user lunges 1m forward and swings their sword in a diagonal slash that deals D-tier damage before jumping back to their original spot.



Iron Guard
Tier: D
Class: Warrior
Type: Defensive
Range: Close (0m-1m)
Requirements/Drawbacks: User must shift into a defensive position and brace themselves for the incoming attack.
Scaling: Hits; each time Iron Guard is utilized, the amount of hits it can block raises by 1 for an aditional 10 stamina.
Sustain: 0
Cooldown: 1 post
Cost: 10 Stamina
Description:

    The user plants their feet into the ground and raises their sword as their brace themselves. Any incoming attack that deals D-Tier is blocked, but Iron Guard may only block a single attack per use unless scaled.




Jumping Snake
Tier: D
Class: Warrior
Type: Offensive
Range: Medium (3m-10m)
Requirements/Drawbacks: Users must grip their sword outstretched and tilted to the side with both hands and stand with their knees bent (Mamushi Stance). A sword that isn’t predominately heavy must be used; the user may have to regain their balance and has to plant their feet before the attack.
Scaling: Damage
Sustain: 0
Cooldown: 1 post
Cost: 10 Stamina
Description:

    The user shifts into the Mamushi stance, but with their sword held to the side before lunging 3m forward. As they do so, they swing their swords backwards, raise it in an arc before slashing downwards in a diagonal arc for D-tier damage.




Striking Cobra
Tier: D
Class: Warrior
Type: Offensive
Range: Short (1m-3m)
Requirements: The users must grip their sword outstretched with both hands and stand with their knees bent (Mamushi Stance). A sword must be equipped.
Scaling: Damage
Sustain: 0
Cooldown: 1 post
Cost: 10 Stamina
Description:

    The user lifts their sword as they shift into the Mamushi Stance and holds it in front of them before lunging 1m forward for D tier damage.



Last edited by Jingyi Hou on 24/02/17, 07:43 pm; edited 3 times in total

2Jingyi's Starting Abilities Empty Re: Jingyi's Starting Abilities 22/02/17, 09:23 pm

Reed Harper

Reed Harper
β-Tier
β-Tier

Just general notes:

Sustain count should always be at zero for the purposes of it being the ability in its base form. Furthermore, scaling costs are always 10 stamina/magoi per tier scaled up to. So, from D -> C tier, it is an increase in 10 stamina added to the base cost (D -> B is +20, D -> A is +30, you can't scale to omega tier). D Tier abilities are always 10 stamina/magoi, C Tier are always 20 magoi/stamina, so on and so forth.

Specifically:

- Hypnotic Viper should list what Mamushi Stance entails or Mamushi Stance should be listed as an ability that leads into other abilities. Please list the tier of the damage. Please list how far you lunge forward.
- List "Range" or something similar in effect for the scaling of Rolling Dodge. The stamina will always be +10 for scaling. Also, please list that it dodges d-tier damage, but anything higher requires scaling. Also please list at what distance you can dodge the ability (from 0-1m).
- Elaborate on what Mamushi Stance is for Jumping Snake. Say how high you jump up, and please list that it deals d-tier damage.
- Please list that Cutting Grass deals d tier damage, and at what distance away the sword is swung. You list that it is "easy to block," I'm not so sure you want to intentionally limit yourself.
- Please list what Mamushi Stance is for Striking Cobra, that it deals d tier damage, and how far you lunge as you thrust the sword.


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3Jingyi's Starting Abilities Empty Re: Jingyi's Starting Abilities 22/02/17, 09:59 pm

Jingyi Hou

Jingyi Hou
A-Tier
A-Tier

I edited it, and I hope that I fixed it.
Sorry for the previous mistakes, and thank you so much for your help!

4Jingyi's Starting Abilities Empty Re: Jingyi's Starting Abilities 22/02/17, 10:42 pm

Ariel

Ariel
A-Tier
A-Tier

You haven't completely fixed your mistake. The initial cost still says the wrong number.

Saying that you need a weapon in your requirements is too vague. The point of a requirement is to define scenarios that you can execute your ability in. Perhaps it is something about how you hold your weapon or maybe it's all in the stance. Or maybe an environmental factor plays a role. Ask yourself how you would perform the ability and what might make it difficult to execute due to outside factors.

You don't really need an ability to be able to dodge. Remember, Magi is a logic based forum. Speed and power do not correlate. If you have an A-Tier using a fairly slow attack, it doesn't matter what tier you are, you could dodge the attack. In real life, power is useless if you're against an opponent faster than you.


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5Jingyi's Starting Abilities Empty Re: Jingyi's Starting Abilities 22/02/17, 11:15 pm

Reed Harper

Reed Harper
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β-Tier

I went ahead and fixed the errors: please make sure to read over the Ability System and guide and look over the corrections I made and edit your post.

Ability System

Corrections:


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6Jingyi's Starting Abilities Empty Re: Jingyi's Starting Abilities 22/02/17, 11:53 pm

Jingyi Hou

Jingyi Hou
A-Tier
A-Tier

Thank you for fixing them, Reed, and I looked at what you changed. I have read the ability guide, but I'm a dodo sometimes. Sorry about that!
Thank you for your help, Ariel, it was greatly appreciated. Hopefully this time it's fixed. Thank you again, and I'm sorry for any trouble.


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7Jingyi's Starting Abilities Empty Re: Jingyi's Starting Abilities 24/02/17, 07:49 pm

Jingyi Hou

Jingyi Hou
A-Tier
A-Tier

Bump!
I followed Reed and Ariel's advice and did my best to improve it
*Replaced the Rolling Dodge move (per what Ariel advised) and replaced it with Iron Guard
*Added in the fixes Reed made
*Fixed costs
*Requirements/Drawbacks are now fixed (hopefully)
*Fixed Sustain
*The damage dealt and how far the user jumps are now described in the attacks
*Improved Cutting Grass
I'm sorry for all the mistakes, and hopefully, things are fixed now.


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8Jingyi's Starting Abilities Empty Re: Jingyi's Starting Abilities 24/02/17, 09:22 pm

Ariel

Ariel
A-Tier
A-Tier

Approved

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[center][b]Cutting Grass[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] C
[b]Class:[/b] Warrior
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Short 1m-3m
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] The user must be wielding a light sword and must have their feet planted while standing in stance.
[b]Scaling:[/b] Damage
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 2 post
[b]Cost:[/b] 20 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
The user plants their feet firmly into the ground and raises their sword before swinging it downwards in an arc that deals D-Tier damage. The user then takes a step forwards before swinging the sword upwards in a diagonal swipe dealing D-Tier damage once more. The two attacks combine to deal C-Tier damage.[/list]


[center][b]Hypnotic Viper[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Warrior
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Short (1m-3m)
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Users must grip their sword outstretched with both hands and stand with their knees bent (Mamushi Stance). The user must shift into the Mamushi Stance before use of the attack.
[b]Scaling:[/b] Damage
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 1 posts
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
Jingyi shifts into the Mamushi Stance before starting to weave and bob around her opponent while making use of the red tassel/cloth on her sword to distract the enemy from her blade. The user lunges 1m forward and swings their sword in a diagonal slash that deals D-tier damage before jumping back to their original spot.[/list]


[center][b]Iron Guard[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Warrior
[b]Type:[/b] Defensive
[b]Range:[/b] Close (0m-1m)
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] User must shift into a defensive position and brace themselves for the incoming attack.
[b]Scaling:[/b] Hits; each time [b]Iron Guard[/b] is utilized, the amount of hits it can block raises by 1 for an aditional 10 stamina.
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 1 post
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
The user plants their feet into the ground and raises their sword as their brace themselves. Any incoming attack that deals D-Tier is blocked, but Iron Guard may only block a single attack per use unless scaled.[/list]



[center][b]Jumping Snake[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Warrior
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Medium (3m-10m)
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Users must grip their sword outstretched and tilted to the side with both hands and stand with their knees bent (Mamushi Stance). A sword that isn’t predominately heavy must be used; the user may have to regain their balance and has to plant their feet before the attack.
[b]Scaling:[/b] Damage
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 1 post
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
The user shifts into the Mamushi stance, but with their sword held to the side before lunging 3m forward. As they do so, they swing their swords backwards, raise it in an arc before slashing downwards in a diagonal arc for D-tier damage.[/list]



[center][b]Striking Cobra[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Warrior
[b]Type:[/b] Offensive
[b]Range:[/b] Short (1m-3m)
[b]Requirements:[/b] The users must grip their sword outstretched with both hands and stand with their knees bent (Mamushi Stance). A sword must be equipped.
[b]Scaling:[/b] Damage
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 1 post
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
The user lifts their sword as they shift into the Mamushi Stance and holds it in front of them before lunging 1m forward for D tier damage.[/list]


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