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Lagis D and C rank ability resubmission

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Lagi

Lagi
Ω-Tier
Ω-Tier

Mask Change
Tier: D
Class: Body Manipulator
Type: Supplementary
Range: Close
Requirements/Drawbacks: "Lagi must reach up and place his fingers on a few pressure points on the face"
Scaling: N/A
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 1 post cooldown
Cost: 10 Stamina
Description:

    Lagi is able to change up the structure of his face using body manipulation.



Voice change
Tier: D Tier
Class: Body Manipulator
Type: supplementary
Range: Close
Requirements/Drawbacks: "Lagi must reach up and place his fingers on a few pressure points on the throat of his vocal cords
Scaling: N/A
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 1 post
Cost: 10 Stamina
Description:

    Lagi is able to change up the sound that is produced by his voice box in order to change the way that he sounds vocally. This ability can even allow Lagi to partially mimic the vocals of other people that he already knows as well.



Air Bubble
Tier: C-Tier
Class: Beast Tamer (Orie)
Type: supplementary
Range: Close
Requirements/Drawbacks: Must utalize orie

Scaling:
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 2 posts
Cost: 20 Stamina
Description:

    Orie could form around Lagi's head and create a filtered air bubble. The air bubble can provide Lagi with oxygen, as well as filter out any kind of water or toxins. The  air bubble is the same size of Lagi's head, but it could be as big as one meter in size.



Last edited by Lagi on 09/10/16, 06:47 pm; edited 3 times in total


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Duquin

Duquin
A-Tier
A-Tier

Mask Change:

Requirements - You just listed off body parts here. That doesn't explain the requirements or drawbacks related to this ability. It should be some kind of physical condition/action you need to meet in order to perform the ability.

Scaling - Deception isn't measured by tiers so this can't really be scaled in any sort of measurable way.

Sustain - This should be 0 or "-" . You only fill it out when you've used the ability in a thread. The section exists to keep track of how many sustain's you've done.


Voice Change:

Same problems as above.


Air Bubble:

Same problems as above. And you MUST have requirements/drawbacks.


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Thank you all, for everything.

Lagi

Lagi
Ω-Tier
Ω-Tier

can you offer suggestions? im new a bit to these drawbacks because its noncombatant and i never needed them before.. what should even be the drawback for them?


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Lagis D   and C rank ability resubmission  CrChE3t

Lagis D   and C rank ability resubmission  LBbFjDO

Lagi's Vault

Duquin

Duquin
A-Tier
A-Tier

"Lagi must reach up and place his fingers on a few pressure points on the face" would be an example of an acceptable requirement. It's acceptable because it includes a necessary action you need to take before the ability executes.

"While the face changes are taking place, Lagi's vision becomes blurry and he can't speak" Is an example of a drawback. Although, I don't believe a drawback is needed for this ability. I'm just giving an example of what a drawback for it might look like if you did need one.


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Thank you all, for everything.

Lagi

Lagi
Ω-Tier
Ω-Tier

how about now??


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Lagis D   and C rank ability resubmission  CrChE3t

Lagis D   and C rank ability resubmission  LBbFjDO

Lagi's Vault

Duquin

Duquin
A-Tier
A-Tier

Approved with edits:

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[center][b]Mask Change[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Body Manipulator
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Lagi must reach up and place his fingers on a few pressure points on the face prior to activation.
[b]Scaling:[/b] N/A
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1 post cooldown
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
Lagi is able to change up the structure of his face using body manipulation changing his physical facial features. This ability lasts for one post after the last use/sustain.[/list]


[center][b]Voice change[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D Tier
[b]Class:[/b] Body Manipulator
[b]Type:[/b] supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Lagi must reach up and place his fingers on a few pressure points on the throat of his vocal cords prior to use.
[b]Scaling:[/b] N/A
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1 post
[b]Cost:[/b] 10 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
Lagi is able to change up the sound that is produced by his voice box in order to change the way that he sounds vocally. This ability can even allow Lagi to partially mimic the vocals of other people that he already knows as well. The voice change lasts 1 post after the last use/sustain of this ability.[/list]


[center][b]Air Bubble[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] C-Tier
[b]Class:[/b] Beast Tamer (Orie)
[b]Type:[/b] supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Close
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] There must be room for the air bubble to form. It can't protect the user if they are already within harmful gas clouds or other airborne threats.
[b]Scaling:[/b]
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 2 posts
[b]Cost:[/b] 20 Stamina
[b]Description:[/b]
[list]
Orie could form around Lagi's head and create a filtered air bubble. The air bubble can provide Lagi with oxygen, as well as filter out any kind of water or toxins. The  air bubble is the same size of Lagi's head, but it could be as big as one meter in size. The air bubble lasts 2 posts after the last use/sustain.[/list]


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Thank you all, for everything.

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