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1 Kabuto submit on 11/09/16, 05:53 pm

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D Skills:

RipQuip
Tier: D
Class: Magician
Type:Offensive
Range:Medium
Requirements Drawbacks: Pointing wand in certain direction/ or placing two fingers, and rapidly thrusting in direction, spell goes direction of fingers trust.
Scaling: created sword capable of more strikes
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 1+ 1 sustain
Cost: 10, 5
Description:
Uses gravity to pull a chunk of the ground into the users hand in the shape of a sword capable of a single strike of D Teir damage. Sword can be up to 1 meters in length.  [Strength/gravity magic]
original:
Name: RipQuip
Tier: D
Cost: 10/5
Element: Strength - Gravity
Class: Offensive
Range: 10m
Cool-Down: 2 posts; sustain +1
Description: Uses gravity to pull a chunk of the ground into the users hand in the shape of a sword capable of a single strike of D Teir damage. Sword could be up to 5 meters in length. sword is created at 10m/s and can be swung at 10m/s.


Vally
Tier: D
Class: Magician
Type:Supplement
Range:Medium
Requirements/Drawbacks: Pointing wand in certain direction/ or placing two fingers, and rapidly thrusting in direction, spell goes direction of fingers trust. Wand/fingers must target centre of target
Scaling: 0
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 1+ 1 sustain
Cost: 10, 5
Description:Targets a 5 meters diameter area within 10 meters of caster and rapidly raises it up 5 meter, pulls the equivalent of ground beneath the ground 5meters [Strength/gravity magic]
original:
Name: Blade Vally
Tier:D
Cost: 10/5
Element: Strength - Gravity
Class: Supplementary
Range: 10 meters
Cool-Down: 2 posts; +1 sustain
Description: Targets a 5 meter area within 10 meters of caster and raises it up 5 meters at 10m/s.



D1

Tier: D
Class: Magician
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Requirements/Drawbacks: Pointing wand in certain direction/ or placing two fingers, and rapidly thrusting in direction, spell goes direction of fingers trust.
Scaling: 0
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 1+ 1 sustain
Cost: 10, 5
Description: Gravity pushes user 5 meters in the direction of the caster's choosing. [Strength/gravity magic]
original:
Name: D1
Tier: D
Cost: 10/5
Element: Strength gravity
Class: Supplementary
Range: 5 meters
Cool-Down: 2posts; sustain +1
Description: Uses gravity to push self in a direction of caster choosing at 10m/s travels 5 meters.


Ds
Tier: D
Class: Magician
Range: Close
Requirements/Drawbacks:  Pointing wand in certain direction/ or placing two fingers, and rapidly thrusting in direction, spell goes direction of fingers trust. Wand/fingers must target centre 
Scaling: 0
Sustain: 0
Type:Supplement
Cool Down: 1+ 1 sustain
Cost: 10, 5
Description: Radpidly Pulls a 3 meter tall wall from the ground within ten meters of the caster.[Strength/gravity magic] Protects from one side, and width is 2 meters.
original:
Name: Ds
Tier:D
Cost: 10/5
Element: Strength Gravity
Class: Supplementary
Range: 10 meters
Cool-Down: 2 posts; sustain +1
Description: Pulls a 5 meter tall wall from the ground at 10m/s within ten meters of the caster.


C ranks:

Black Shot
Tier: C
Class: Magician
Type:offensive
Range: Long,
Requirements/Drawbacks: Pointing wand in certain direction/ or placing two fingers, and rapidly thrusting in direction, spell goes direction of fingers trust.
Scaling: Orbs dimensions
Sustain: 0
Cool Down:2 posts; +1 Sustain
Cost:20, 10
Description: Launches a fast 5m diameter orb that can be freely controlled within 20 meters to inflict C-tier damage[Strength/gravity magic]
original:
Name: Black Shot
Tier: C
Cost: 20/10
Element: Strength
Class: Offensive
Range: 20 meters
Cool-Down:3 posts; +1 Sustain
Description: Launches a 5m diameter orb at 15 m/s that can be freely controlled within 20 meters to inflict C-tier damage.



B ranks:

The Walking Moon
Tier:B
Class: Magician
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Range:Long
Requirements/Drawbacks:  Pointing wand in certain direction/ or placing two fingers, and rapidly thrusting in direction, spell goes direction of fingers trust. Wand/fingers must point towards target, and words The Walking Moon must be spoken before running starts.
Scaling: Increased damage
Sustain: 0
Cool Down:5 posts
Cost: 30,15
Description:  The user folds the gravitation direction around themselves, allowing the user to run in any direction on any surface they please for a distance of 10m. [Wall running, ceiling running, water running, and air running]. While doing so, the user fires off a 1m in diameter Ball of strength magoi at a target within 20 meters at speed to inflict C-tier damage. [Strength/gravity magic]
original:
Name: The Walking Moon
Tier: B
Cost: 30/15
Element: Strength
Class: Offensive/Supplementary
Range: 20 meters
Cool-Down: 5 post
Description: The user folds the gravitation direction around themselves, allowing the user to run in any direction on any surface they please at 15m/s for distance of 10m. [Wall running, ceiling running, water running, and air running]. While doing so, the user fires off a 1m in diameter Ball of strength magoi at a target within 20 meters at 15 m/s to inflict C-tier damage.


Rising Sun
Tier:B
Class: Assassin
Type:Offensive/Supplementary
Range: Medium
Requirements/Drawbacks: Katana in hand and at least one foot on even footing. 
Scaling: Damage
Sustain:0
Cool Down:5
Cost: 30/15
Description: The user jumps 5 meters into the air at speed, slicing their blade upward at the same speed to inflict C-tier damage to anything struck.
original:
Name: Rising Sun
Tier: B
Cost: 30/15
Weapon Type: Sword
Class: Offensive/Supplementary
Range:Close
Cool-Down: 5 posts,
Description: The user jumps 5 meters into the air at 20 m/s, slicing their blade upward at the same speed to inflict C-tier damage to anything struck.


Closing Cloud
Tier: B
Class:Assassin
Type: Supplementary/Supplementary
Range: Medium
Requirements/Drawbacks:  Pointing wand in certain direction/ or placing two fingers, and rapidly thrusting in direction, spell goes direction of fingers trust. Wand/fingers must point towards target, and words The Walking Moon must be spoken before running starts.
Sight prevention in area works both ways.
Scaling:Larger area of smoke
Sustain:0
Cool Down:5 posts
Cost: 30/15
Description:
The user scrapes blade against the ground, at speed creating a strong friction between blade and ground to generate a smoking flame which generates a cloud of smoke with a diameter of 5 meters in front of the caster preventing people from seeing clearly within that area. Simultaneously the user will dash in any direction at speed for 5 meters.
original:
Name: Closing Cloud
Tier: B
Cost: 30/15
Weapon Type: Sword
Class: Supplementary/Supplementary
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 5 posts,
Description: The user scrapes blade against the ground, at 20m/s creating a strong friction between blade and ground to generate a smoking flame which generates a cloud of smoke with a diameter of 5 meters in front of the caster preventing people from seeing clearly within that area. Simultaneously the user will dash in any direction at 20m/s for 5 meters.


Toe Step
Tier: B
Class: Assassin
Type: Supplementary
Range: Medium
Requirements/Drawbacks: requires two unocupied feet 
Scaling: larger distance
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 5posts
Cost: 30/15
Description:Rapidly moving without making a sound, the user sneaks through her surroundings at speed for a total distance of 7 m
original:
Name: Toe Step
Tier: B
Cost: 30/15
Weapon Type: N/a
Class: Supplementary
Range: Self
Cool-Down: 5 posts
Description: Rapidly moving without making a sound, the user sneaks through her surroundings at 25m/s for a total distance of 7 m


a ranks:

Dis C Order
Tier: A
Class: Magician
Type: Offensive
Range: Long
Requirements/Drawbacks:  Pointing wand in certain direction/ or placing two fingers, and rapidly thrusting in direction, spell goes direction of fingers trust. Wand/fingers must point towards target, and words 
Scaling: extra projectile 
Sustain: 0
Cool Down: 7 posts
Cost: 40/20
Description: Kabuto sends a 1 cm ball of magoi at a target within 40 meters at speed. On contact, the magoi encourages a tumor 10 cm in diameter to grow, dealing A-Tier damage to its surroundings and causes the eyes of the target to pop out if it struck the target's head.

Life magic
original:
Name: Dis C Order
Tier: A
Cost: 40/20
Element: Life
Class: Offensive
Range: 40m
Cool-Down: 7 Posts
Description: Kabuto sends a 1 cm ball of magoi at a target within 40 meters at 25 m/s. On contact, the magoi encourages a tumor 10 cm in diameter to grow, dealing A-Tier damage to its surroundings and causes the eyes of the target to pop out if it struck the target's head.



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2 Re: Kabuto submit on 11/09/16, 08:14 pm

Duquin

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We don't use speed number anymore. Remove them all. This also means no speed scaling.

"Need a wand/katana" is not a satisfactory requirement. A requirement should be some kind of physical action you need to perform in most cases.

Requirements/Drawbacks is also not an optional section. You need to fill it out for the abilities where you left it blank.

Please fix those issues before further grading.


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3 Re: Kabuto submit on 03/10/16, 12:19 pm

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Think done.


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4 Re: Kabuto submit on 04/10/16, 10:38 am

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You will need to resubmit your character; it's been archived due to inactivity.


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5 Re: Kabuto submit on 10/11/16, 06:20 pm

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Bumping this; now that i am archived


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6 Re: Kabuto submit on 13/11/16, 02:13 pm


  • RipQuip


    • The sword should be 1 meter.


  • Vally


    • This honestly seems more like a C-Tier ability than a D-Tier ability.

    • At what increase does the area change per scaling?

    • Please specify how deep of land this ability raises.


  • Ds


    • The range should be close.

    • Which aspect of the wall increases and how much does it increase per scaling?

    • Does the barrier protect the user on all sides? Just one side? A combination of one side and from aerial attacks?

    • It should just be about 2~3 meters in height.

    • Can you please specify the width of the barrier?







  • D1: I changed the wording slightly.

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    [center][b]D1[/b][/center]
    [b]Tier:[/b] D
    [b]Class:[/b] Magician
    [b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
    [b]Range:[/b] Short
    [b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Pointing wand in certain direction/ or placing two fingers, and rapidly thrusting in direction, spell goes direction of fingers trust.
    [b]Scaling:[/b] Increases distance
    [b]Sustain:[/b] 0
    [b]Cool Down:[/b] 1+ 1 sustain
    [b]Cost:[/b] 10, 5
    [b]Description:[/b] Gravity pushes user 5 meters in the direction of the caster's choosing. [Strength/gravity magic]






Once you're done correcting everything for your D-Tier abilities, I'll move on to your C-Tier and B-Tier abilities.


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7 Re: Kabuto submit on 27/11/16, 09:02 am

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Done & and i removed the scaling stuff; don't care for it. Nerfs be real but i think i done the d stuff.


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8 Re: Kabuto submit on 10/12/16, 09:57 pm


  • Vally


    • 2-3 meters would be more appropriate for a D-tier ability like this.




RipQuip:
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[center][b]RipQuip [/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Magician
[b]Type:[/b]Offensive
[b]Range:[/b]Medium
[b]Requirements [/b][b]Drawbacks[/b]: Pointing wand in certain direction/ or placing two fingers, and rapidly thrusting in direction, spell goes direction of fingers trust.
[b]Scaling:[/b] created sword capable of more strikes
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1+ 1 sustain
[b]Cost:[/b] 10, 5
[b]Description:[/b]
Uses gravity to pull a chunk of the ground into the users hand in the shape of a sword capable of a single strike of D Tier damage. Sword can be up to 1 meters in length. [Strength/gravity magic]

D1:
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[center][b]D1[/b][/center]

[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Magician
[b]Type:[/b] Supplementary
[b]Range:[/b] Short
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Pointing wand in certain direction/ or placing two fingers, and rapidly thrusting in direction, spell goes direction of fingers trust.
[b]Scaling:[/b] -
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1+ 1 sustain
[b]Cost:[/b] 10, 5
[b]Description:[/b] Gravity pushes user 5 meters in the direction of the caster's choosing. [Strength/gravity magic]

Ds: I changed the type to defensive.
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[center][b]Ds[/b][/center]
[b]Tier:[/b] D
[b]Class:[/b] Magician
[b]Type:[/b] Defensive
[b]Range: [/b] Close
[b]Requirements/Drawbacks:[/b] Pointing wand in certain direction/ or placing two fingers, and rapidly thrusting in direction, spell goes direction of fingers trust. Wand/fingers must target center.
[b]Scaling:[/b] -
[b]Sustain:[/b] 0
[b]Cool Down:[/b] 1+ 1 sustain
[b]Cost:[/b] 10, 5
[b]Description: [/b] Rapidly pulls a 3 meter tall wall from the ground within ten meters of the caster.[Strength/gravity magic] Protects from one side, and width is 2 meters.


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