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Great Lord Naheed's Starting Abilities

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Naheed

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Name: Heliohapt Fencing: Parrying Stance
Tier: D
Cost: 10 | 5 sustained
Weapon Type: Sword
Class: Defensive
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 2 posts or Sustain + 1
Description: Naheed takes the defensive stance of the sword he has in hand, defending incoming blows with the side of the blade and quickly turning it sideways, causing the edge to slide across the opponent's weapon at 10m/s, greatly reducing the possible damage to his body and the pressure applied to his wrists. This move is capable to redirect up to C-tier attacks with sword.

Name: Heliohapt Fencing: Main Counter-attack
Tier: C
Cost: 20 | 10 sustained
Weapon Type: Sword
Class: Offensive
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 3 + 1 Sustain + 1
Description: After a blow is successfully dodged, parried (Parrying Stance), deflected or otherwise avoided/neutralized, Naheed takes a firm hold of his sword's hilt, putting all of his weight into a slash directed at any openings left by the opponent during their attack at 15m/s. C-tier damage to the enemy will be dealt if it connects.

Name: Great Lord Style: Stomp of the Maurenia Baboon
Tier: D
Cost: 10 | 5 sustained
Weapon Type: 2-handed Sword
Class: Offensive
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 2 posts or Sustain + 1
Description:
Naheed rushes towards the target with his blade pointed at it. Once he arrives at close-range, he thrusts the blade into the ground and then swings his body around at 10m/s, using the hilt for leverage and hitting whatever is in the way with the sole of his boots, dealing D-tier damage if connected, before returning to the other side of the sword and plunging it out of the earth as quickly as possible.

Name: Great Lord Style: Leap of the Maurenia Rabbit
Tier: D
Cost: 10 | 5 sustained
Weapon Type: None
Class: Supplementary
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 2 posts or Sustain + 1
Description: Putting both on his well-trained ankles close to one another and both hands to his back, Naheed leaps up to 5 meters in any direction at 10m/s.

Name: Great Lord Style: Strength of the Earth
Tier: D
Cost: 10 | 5 sustained
Weapon Type: None
Class: Offensive
Range: Close
Cool-Down: 2 + Sustain + 1
Description: In a quick movement, Naheed leans down, placing one hand on the ground for extra support and delivering a kick at 10 m/s. Delivers D-Tier damage if connected.



Last edited by Naheed on 20/10/15, 08:56 pm; edited 1 time in total


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First: The variables are unnecessary and you will simply be expected to rP out the logical execution of these moves. The other option is that you write SPECIFIC variables which MUST be met in the description, however, you would not be able to perform the ability unless those SPECIFIC variables are met. In general, we simply ask that you do not include them.

Overall, your skills are very well done and specific. The wording on this one can be simplified a bit, which may help to make it a bit more clear to anyone reading it:

Great Lord Style: Stomp of the Maurenia Baboon: Naheed rushes towards the target with his blade pointed at it. Once he arrives at close-range, he thrusts the blade into the ground and then swings his body around at 10m/s, using the hilt for leverage and hitting whatever is in the way with the sole of his boots, dealing D-tier damage if it hit before returning to the other side of the sword and plunging it out of the earth as quickly as possible.

Great Lord Style: Leap of the Maurenia Rabbit: This one is missing a couple of elements, such as distance (which would be based off of scale) and has a bit too much flavor text. Suggested wording:

Putting both on his well-trained ankles close to one another and both hands to his back, Naheed leaps up to 5 meters in any direction at 10m/s.


Great Lord Style: Take Five: The only way to recover Stamina/Magoi while in battle is via potion. Thus, this ability would not be allowed, though it is quite interesting.

Overall, I appreciate the thoroughness of your abilities and how carefully worded they are. However, for your own sake, we recommend keeping things simple and concise, if at all possible. You should also keep in mind that you may have 4 D-tier and 1 C-tier starters, you had them all as D-tier. Please make these minor edits and replace the final ability and then bump when completed ^_^


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Naheed

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Bumping. Also, Heliohapt Fencing: Main Counter-attack is C-Tier.


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starters approved, add to vault~

Sorry I had missed the C-tier ability in there ^_^


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